Discussion

The topic chosen reflects a touch of personal experiences and an intrinsic desire to venture into

the depth of the experiences of the said group of people. However, apart from anecdotal

evidence, it would be very beneficial for the writer to convince the readers by putting in some

research. This video can prove to be helpful in gathering of quality material:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_b7k6pEnyQ4

There are scads of researches as well as social experiments done on the said topic. I believe these

can prove to be highly helpful for the writer in reaching a desirable level of validity and

reliability. Apart from this, it is also essential for the writer to make correct use of language

aspects such as punctuation and grammar. There were several such mistakes in the writing.

These mistakes can prove to be a negative aspect for the readers. The writer needs to incorporate

the correct use of grammar and punctuation. After brushing up on the elements of grammar and

punctuation, it is also crucial for the writer to use an engaging level of language. This charming

level of writing will prove to be highly helpful; for the writer to keep his/her audience engaged.

This engagement can be brought about by using catchy phrases and rendering the use of tools

like analogies. Putting int thought-provoking questions every once in a while can also be helpful.

This aspect will allow for a higher level of impact being made by the writing on the readers.

Apart from these correctional aspects, writing all in all depicts a high level of personal interest

by the writer. This personal interest is always a healthy thing to have while writing. I believe the

said work can be completed on a wonderful level if the right aspects are incorporated. I look

forward to the final presentation of this topic as I believe it will be insightful for all.