Loy 1107

The Raw Rats

On a faraway galaxy, there is a planet called Raw Rats. On this planet, there is a tribe that

can use special power. They called themselves Namuh. Their appearance is unique. Imagine that

they are big size as human mouse. The colors of their fur determine whether they are good or

bad. Mostly, this tribe doesn’t have black fur, only one that has is the evil one. Suddenly, I get

punched and the explanation of setting stop and we get to the story of the legendary warrior of

Raw Rats named Adoy. The story of how a coward and bullied become the most respected

warrior in this planet.

"Big bro! Let go training" Saggin said. The silence is the replied. "You left us no choice,

I think the FORCE is the answer".

A moment later Adoy's body gets stomp by his sworn brothers, Saggin and Nikana.

“ark...” Adoy moaned as they lift his body from the “Coffin” and demand martial art training.

This happens again and again. Until now he almost builds his own six-packs in exchange

of his intestine.

“You guy can train on your own right, can I get to my “Coffin”. Adoy said. “No, you

can’t. We have a promise, don’t we?” They said and continuing the interrogation.
 Three days before the promise during the night, something that slept for millennia has

awakened. It has no form, just a black fog-like. It has the lust to corrupt everything in black. It

can control its prey’s mind to become both it. The assault starts on the kids in the village because

the Namuh emphasize their family at the highest. The one who starts to have negative emotions

such as anger and fear slowly go crazy and completely lose consciousness.

“Good, good... Turn into my food and toy” the creature sing a song while watching the

Namuh become corrupted.

“What the hell are you!?” Nikana cry in fear as the creature approach.

“Yes...Indeed a kid. This where the fun begin” The black fog transforms into a gigantic

venomous spider.

Nikana didn’t completely corrupted, just half of his consciousness because it can let him

taste the fear and suffer until his life extinguished.

“Carve my name all over the floor” it said. His hand uncontrollably scratch everywhere

its name, Redav.

With the left consciousness, he sees giant spider fang sink into his body. The pain when

the venom turns his body into smoothy drives him crazy, melting every part of his inside, and it

sucks all the jelly, left only the skin part of him.
 The morning has come, Saggin visits there to pick up Nikana to go to Adoy. He saw

everything. Every straw house is ruined, blood spills everywhere, and not a single Namuh is

there. He keeps searching for his friend but then stops. It is the skin fur of Nikana. The body is

empty, but still has the scent of his friend. He delivers the news about this to the whole tribe.

When also got to Adoy, there is so many things happen inside his head whether memories of him

or how is this happening. Saggin and Nikana are like blood-related brothers to him. No one treats

him good except for these two.

“Why, why, why…” he asked himself. Saggin brings Adoy a Nikana’s skin and they bury

it to make a grave.

They pray, “Rest in peace, brother”. They both feel the same thing, sorrow and hatred.

Neither of them can smile. Especially, Saggin cannot suppress his anger. He wants to avenge his

sworn brother.

Two days later, the Chosen path begins. It is the trial during only the day time for Namuh

who is fifteen years old to do. It is trial for Namuh to looking deep into their mind to find their

inner potential and personality through extremely concentrating meditate. This is dangerous

because anything that affects the mind can change the result, so the challenger must have strong

mental enough or they would have fallen to the dark side and become broken. Adoy is seventeen

and Saggin recently just fifteen. The three of them promised that they will pass the trial together
but it never becomes true. Adoy has already recovered his mental but Saggin doesn’t. He still has

a lot of hatred in his heart.

“Well, isn’t that our old friend, Adoy” said the Namuh warrior. “Why would a failure

like you here? Don’t you ever have shame of yourself? How many times will you keep doing

this?”. Adoy didn’t respond. “You should die instead of your parents, why did our saviors

wasting their life for this litt-” He stops insult because they ignore.

They reached inside of the ancient temple and focusing on meditating along with other

challengers.

“Surprise! Redav is here” Redav appeared from the shadow but no one knows except

Adoy. He immediately rushes into it but that is useless because it has no body. “Wait.. Why

didn’t you become corrupted?? Eww Disgusting!” it mumbled and then spread black smoke

slowly into the challengers including Saggin to stimulate the negative emotion.

Everyone wakes up as a fallen warrior. They get negative power and under control of

Redav. Only Saggin that change the most. His fur turns into black. “Redav..v.” he said when his

mind is completely corrupted.

“Saggin, Nooooo!”, Adoy shouted.

 The warrior from outside breaks into the temple. When Saggin mediating, his desire to

get revenge for his friend was very strong, and that unlocked the inner power, the psychic ability.

“Ok boys, show them what you got” It ordered and disappear.

The corrupted kids are strong as an adult in term of strength, only Saggin is a special

one. He uses the force to wipe out all of them. They can’t fight Saggin and got push out of the

temple. The fallen retreat.

Adoy was shocked that he loses his brother because he is too weak.

“Only if I have power, this won’t happen” that mindset of him push him to the corner. He

can’t let the insult get in his way. He clear mind and finally know what he should do.

During the night, he sneaks into the temple to complete the undone trial.

“Don’t you dare do it! Do you know why we don’t do it during the night time” an old

man warrior warned him.

“Yes old man, I know why no one does the Chosen during the night. It affects our mind

the most” Adoy said with a smirk and then sit down. “To take my brother back, I need power.

The power to protect everyone” he keeps this in his mind to remember why does he need power.
 The black smoke comes out of nowhere and covers all of him for an hour. Oldman

prepared for the worst.

“Ha...ha..hahahahaha!” Adoy uncontrollably laughs and the smoke disappears.

The old man swing his sword at him.

“I’m fine, old man” he said and the blade stopped by the invisible wall.

He didn’t give in to his dark side. The night that turns Namuh crazy but it’s nothing with

his mental.

“Thank to those insults and insolation. It trains my mental quite a lot” Adoy said. He

unlock the his inner ability and personality. “Wait for me brother, don’t be eaten”, he joke.

With his ability, he can senses where Redav is. His physical also improved. The fallen

hide in the valley behind the temple. He reaches to the valley and encounters Redav. He smile. It

tries to corrupt him but nothing happens. It cries out and orders the fallen to kill him.

“Well, I’ll be gentle”, he said and rush into a horde of fallen.

 His ability is a Positive Force. It cleanses all the corrupted. Just a few seconds, all of

them are cleanse, except Saggin. His hatred is too strong.

“Redavv!” Saggin still lose consciousness and attack Adoy.

“Oh brother, isn’t it pass your bedtime” he taunted him as the blade in Saggin’s hand

missed and hit the floor.

He rapidly slash at Adoy but only hits the air. He tried to grab Adoy with psychic but got

repel and fall to the ground.

“Big bro..” Saggin starts to gain himself but the dark side still takes control.

“I don’t remember you are this weak. Losing to the dark side” Adoy wake him up. “Just

let your hatred go. Its a root of darkness”, Adoy said.

“But… I want my revenge”, Saggin tells his reason.

“What will Nikana think if he saw you like this? We are brother. We protect each other,

remember?” Adoy reminded him why they need power. His hatred faded away and Redav loses

control of Saggin.

“Curse you” Redav yelled and fly away, but it got captured.
 “Yare yare.. I can’t let you go. You have a business with me, don’t we?” After Adoy

said, the light engulf the black fog. “You won’t hurt my people anymore”

“Arrrrrrrrhhhhh!!!” it screams in pain and the light disappear with the fog.

The villagers that are saved by Adoy started to accept him after all these years that they

isolated him. “Let’s go home my brothers and sisters”, Adoy said.