Dear Readers,

Hi everyone! I am Yihang Pan, and welcome to my webpage. I call my page the

"Game World" because it is the major topic of my two WPs, and I am a big fan of
video games. I provide introductions of some of the most popular games today, and I
hope to stimulate your interest in gaming. I also believe that after reading my two
WPs, you can realize the benefits of playing video games.

We all experienced a hard time during this quarter because of the Covid-19. I
used to believe that I could not make any progress in my writing because I am not a
native speaker. In my previous writing courses, I failed to improve my writing skills
because I didn't like writing. I took the classes just for GE requirements. However, the
Writing 2 course I took this quarter planted a seed of hope that facilitate my writing.
Julie Johnson, the most helpful TA I have ever met, provided a new perspective of
writing to me.

At the start of the quarter, I was extremely nervous because it was the first
academic writing course I took in college, and I knew it would not be easy. I doubted
whether I could perform well in this course. However, at the end of the quarter, I
successfully finished my writing projects with the help of my TA, Julie Johnson.
During the quarter, she set up various activities to help us know each other and learn
how to write academic essays. The Rhetorically Activity that contains murder scenes
helped me cooperate with my teammates and build a preliminary understanding of
the genre. The rhetorical situation poster is very useful because the content concisely
introduces us to the definition of exigence, audience, and constraints in a rhetorical
situation. Chapters in the book "Writing Spaces" provide a detailed explanation of
genre, which greatly benefit my two writing projects. When writing the WP1, the
handouts of "Beginning an essay," "Thesis Statement," and "Conclusion" helped me
structure my content and build a strong thesis and an effective conclusion. When
completing the WP2 assignment, I learned that all sources have their constraints, and
bringing these sources into a discussion in the literature review will be helpful to
build a comprehensive opinion on a topic. Besides, I realized that even non-academic
sources could be persuasive if we recognize their constraints.

In both WP2, I added indents to indicate the start of new paragraphs. I deleted
some useless intensifiers, such as "very," "directly," and "a large number of."
However, I still have some intensifiers because these intensifiers help me to express
my idea. To maintain concision, I cut redundant words. For example, instead of saying
"are giving," I use "give" to eliminate unnecessary clutter while expressing the same
message. I also replace unnecessary passive voices with active voices.

In the translation of WP1, I pointed out that the results are from previous studies
to eliminate the misunderstanding that the results should appear after the
questionnaire. The biggest problem of my WP1 is that my thesis statement is not
specific. In the revision, I indicate the specific conventions of my new genre, such as
eliminating jargons and data, and I describe the new purpose and targeted audience,
which is to let the public realize the benefits of gaming. Besides, I refer to
information on the MedicalNewsToday website that states video gaming can be
addictive to display the anti-gaming attitude. I also go beyond vague descriptions of
the genre conventions in the introduction by adding specific conventions of the
educational science article.

During the revision of WP2, I polished my thesis by pointing out the goal of my
literature review is to let the public create a better gaming environment for their
children, their parents, and themselves.

Best regards,
Yihang Pan