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6.4 All unnecessary words have been deleted, leaving the following:
a. consensus
b. innovations
c. long time
d. at $50
e. remains
6.9 With the unnecessary modifiers removed, the sentences read as follows:
a. High pay increases were given to the skilled and conscientious employees.
b. The union’s proposals were inflationary, demanding, and bold.
6.11 With the indefinite starters removed, the sentences might read as follows:
a. Several examples here show that Elaine can’t hold a position very long.
b. A generous contribution to Mildred Cook’s retirement party would be appreciated.
c. Generally reliable sources in Washington report today that the White House will soon make
an important announcement.
d. According to the rule, we cannot work overtime without permission.
e. Your working late the next three Saturdays would be great.
6.12 Rewritten with parallel construction, the sentences might read as follows:
a. Mr. Hill is expected to lecture three days a week, to counsel two days a week, and to write for
publication in his spare time.
b. She not only knows accounting but also reads Latin.
c. Both applicants were in their thirties, had families, were college graduates, and had
considerable experience; but they lacked social connections.
d. This book was exciting, well written, and interesting.
e. Don works hard and knows bookkeeping.
6.13 Here are the sentences with the awkward pointers removed:
a. The vice president in charge of sales is responsible for the key to 34A; the production
manager is responsible for the key to 35A.
b. The key to 34A belongs to the vice president in charge of sales, and the key to 35A belongs
to the production manager.
c. The gold-embossed keys to 34A and 35A have been given to the production manager.
d. John received his laser printer, and Megin got her dot matrix printer.
e. The walnut desk cost $300 more than the oak desk.
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