Writing task 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge
of the following topic.
Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of
poorer tuitions. However, the governments of richer nations should take more
responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your
arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
You should write at least 250 words.
TASK 2 RESPONSE

It has been a controversial question whether the government of richer nations should be
more responsible helping the poorer tuitions in health, education, and trades due to their
importance for the development of a nation. As for me, there is no reason to denounce
this opinion.
There is no concern that helping the impoverished countries in such areas is the richer
governments’ responsibilities. Firstly, helping those poorer countries is not only seem
like a good thing to do but it also a good opportunity to invest on. In short terms, it is a
“win-win” co-operation. The richer country can raise a country’s development by
investing in its health and educational services and in return, they can financially benefit
from the investment. For examples, the are many international colleges and universities
around Vietnam like BUV, RMIT, ITI, … and the investors can benefit from the students’
loans. Another reason why richer country should help poorer countries that is to improve
the friendship between countries around the world, rich countries help poor countries,
and the poor countries help the pourers. As a result, it will raise a commonwealth
between countries. Many organizations and commonwealths have been so successful
in this, like ASEAN and EU.
Finally, it’s all about the human’s rights. It declared that everyone around the globe have
the rights to have a proper health services, education and living conditions. And since
trading is one of the economic spearheads of many countries, it indirectly improves the
people’s living conditions and services in a country. Yet many citizens living in such
poor countries can not access to those services. And the rich nations, since they have
done so well for their people’s conditions living and other essential services, should take
more responsibility to help those poor nations’ people, with a view to having the
people’s equality around the world.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that richer nations should help the poorer countries in
order to raise their development as it not only benefits the countries’ government but
also the people and the helping countries.
The paper results

Overall band: 7.0

TA: 7.5 CC: 7.0 LA: 6.0 GRA: 6.5
Task response: 7.5
Scoreinforce: 7.0
Comments: -
Grade-online: 7.0
Comments: -
Cambridge Write and Improve: 8.0
Comments: 5/5
Actual CEFR scoring: C1
Ielts69: 6.5
Comments: OK
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
Scoreinforce: 7.0
Comments: -
Grade-online: 7.0
Comments: -
Cambridge Write and Improve: 7.0
Comments: -
Actual CEFR scoring: C1
Ielts69: 6.0
Comments: Structure your answers in logical paragraphs. Vary your linking
phrases using synonyms.
Testbig: 7.0
Comments: OK
Grammarly: 5.5
Actual Score: 000.0
Comments: A bit unclear
Lexical Resources: 6.0
Scoreinforce: 7.0
Comments: -
Grade-online: 7.0
Comments: -
Cambridge Write and Improve: 7.0
Comments: -
Actual CEFR scoring: C1
Ielts69: 5.0
Comments: Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms. Use less
common question specific words that accurately convey meaning. Check your
work for spelling and word formation mistakes.
Testbig: 5.5
Comments: More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Grammarly: 5.5
Actual Score: 42.7
Comments: Range of Vocabulary: 5.5; Spellings: 6.0
Grammar Range and Accuracy: 6.5
Scoreinforce: 7.0
Comments: -
Grade-online: 7.0
Comments: -
Cambridge Write and Improve: 7.0
Comments: -
Actual CEFR scoring: C1
Ielts69: 6.0
Comments: Please use a variety of complex and simple sentences.
Testbig: 6.0
Comments: More relative clauses wanted.
Grammarly: 6.0
Actual Score: 55.0
Comments:
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