Your Name: André Austin

Paper’s author’s name: Zac Nicholson

Peer Review Sheet (aka-Last Chance to Rectify Mistakes…So, choose an intelligent friend)
Your MLA paper should follow these guidelines. -1%/mistake.
Directions: Help your friend. Check off the steps they have done correctly and leave blank the sections they
need to fix. Make comments as you go. The more mistakes you find in their paper, the fewer I will find.
(Cohen: #35. “ALWAYS WRITE A SCRATCH COPY. Even Shakespeare revised. Unless I say differently, turn all scratch
copies in with your final version.” Also turn in 2 peer review sheets with your paper).

Heading DONE
• Top left of first page only.
• Includes the following:
- Full name - Teacher’s name
- Class and period - Due date of paper

Header (pg. #) NEEDS WORK

• Top right of ALL pages.

• Includes last name only and page number.
• To add, click on View, and then Header and Footer.

Paper Title : DONE remember Cohen’s wise words:

“Give your paper a title that is informative, not cute. The name of the work you are dealing with is NOT the title of your paper.
“Shakespeare’s Use of Time in Hamlet” is by a thoughtful person; “It Takes a Broken Egghead to Make a Hamlet” is by a jerk;
Hamlet is by Shakespeare. Do NOT underline, italicize, or put in quotes your own title.”

• Comes after the heading.

• Centered and normal font.

Works-Cited pages NEEDS WORK

• Double-spaced • Indent 2nd line of entries
• Alphabetical order • Include title (Works-Cited)

Miscellaneous:
• Absolutely NO passive voice (form of “to be” plus “past participle”) DONE (Cohen: “Do not use the
passive voice ("Careless students are failed by Mr. Cohen"); use the active voice ("Mr. Cohen fails careless students"). Because
the active voice is honest and clear, this rule is the most important rule of style; and, like it or not, style affects meaning. If you will
take the time to master the voice of your verb, you will find yourself a better writer in all ways. I may be a bear on this one, but
I’m a bear for your sake.”)
• 1000 words (may be within 200 of this) NEEDS WORK
• 1” margins on all sides DONE
• Size 12 black font DONE
• Times New Roman Font DONE
• Double-space everything DONE _
• Indent new paragraphs (no extra space between paragraphs) DONE
• Do not use contractions (except in dialogue) DONE (Cohen’s words: 11. A possessive without an apostrophe is a
misspelled word. 12. One exception to rule 11: "Its" is the possessive of "it." "It's" is the contraction for "it is." Since I do not allow
contractions, you will never need to write "it's" on a paper.)
• For titles of literature…
- italicize long pieces (books, movies, plays, etc.) DONE
Your Name: André Austin
Paper’s author’s name: Zac Nicholson
– Proofreading and Editing –

• Placing punctuation outside of quotations (except citations and questions) NEEDS WORK
o Exception: Hamlet said, “To be, or not to be” (3.1.59).
o Exception: Was she right when she said, “The SAT is impossible”?

• NO starting sentences with conjunctions (and, but, for, nor, or, so, yet) DONE

• Do not use exclamation points DONE (Cohen: 32. “Lose the word "very" from your written vocabulary,
avoid the word “effective,” eschew the words “transition” and “impact” as a verb, and only use an exclamation mark after
the happy face you scrawl of the bill you give to diners”).

• Do not use too many commas (refer back to Cohen’s rules) DONE

• Correct citations NEEDS WORK “Macbeth blah blah blah…and then blah blah blah”
(III.iv.5-6).

• NO apologizing for your opinion DONE

o Example: “Feel free to disagree with me, but this is what I think…” (Cohen: #20. DO NOT hedge.
Words like "maybe," "perhaps," and "might" do not keep you from being wrong; they merely alert the reader to
the fact that you are worried about it.)

• NO stating the obvious DONE

o Example: “It is obvious that…” or “This goes without saying…”

Cohen #34. “Conclude your paper with a paragraph that explains the importance of your ideas to some larger
understanding. Do not allow me to ask "so what?"”
What is the “so what” of the paper? Is the moral that Shakespeare wants you to learn clear? What is it? The moral is
that Man cannot hope to control nature, and any attempt to do so can only lead to destruction. Nature is simply
too complex for humans.

Cohen #7 “Give your paper a clear thesis sentence at the end of the first paragraph (the second if the paper is as long as
8 pages). This rule is the one most important one.”
Re-write their thesis statement here (if it is not clear, help them by suggesting one). By looking at how Shelley
provides evidence for this moral, such as the relationship maintained by Frankenstein and his
monster, and how Yuyama shows the same through Giovanni and Mewtwo, it is clear that man cannot
ever hope to control nature and will be harshly punished for any attempt to do so.

Choose one of Cohen’s rules that this paper follows well. Explain. Zac does a good job with the actual writing
portion of the paper, but needs a lot of work on formatting still.