Relationships bones Genre Focus: Descriptive writing Product ‘An essay about a fiend or family member you admire writing Process Read about an uncle-dad-neighbor. Learn how to make comparisons. Interview someone about a person she or he adres. Practice vocabulary for describing people. ‘Expand paragraphs to essays. G6 To love is to admire with the heart; to admire is to love with the mind. 33 —Theophile Gautier French poet, dramatist, novelist, journalist, and literary critic (1811-1872)ay mcr kkk) Eh wry do we admire otners? EZ sce there people in the world everyone admires? EE wnat types of people do we tend to admire?eae ¢ These photos show indiuas with people they admire. Guess te relationship ofthese people and talk about wiry you think one acmices the oer person, Work with partner and share your guesses withthe class, 46 chaptersBhorainstorming about People You Admire tink of pele you krow and admire. ist their names andl write why you admire them, 1 El Freewriting about someone You Admire choose one person rom your lst in the Brainstorming activity, and write for five minutes about hi oF he, Describe how you know this person and why you admire him o her. Preparing to Read You ae going to read an atic bya young student who writes about someone ne admires. Before you ead, answer those question in smal groups. 1. What are three reasons we admire people? 2. Are there people in your life who are not family members but act as if they ate? My Uncle-Dad-Neighbor Larry verybody has somebody special, and for me it's Larry Williams. When 1 was only two years old, my parents were divorced. You can imagine how I felt: lost, abandoned, unwanted, However, there was someone across, the street to help me. For many years, Larry has had a really important role ‘in my life. He has been like my dad—the dad I never really had. Even today, 5 refer to him as my dad, and if somebody asks how my family knows him, we say he's my uncle. Larry and I are very close, and he's the man I most admire. Larry owns his own construction company in the city called City Con- crete, and because he has a lot of responsibilities, he works very hard. Be- fore City Concrete, he worked in a science lab. You can see that someone Relationships 4748 who can move from laboratory work to running a construction business is very smart, Larry is ‘very smart. Construction is tough work, but he can always find time to get together with my family and me. Larry loves science and his- tory, and he wants to pass on his passions to me, When T go to his house, I don't just wateh TV; we 0 to bookstores and he teaches me about topics like electricity and the Vietnam War. He is writ- ing a book about science right now (I don't know the subject), + Lartyis ares ole model and he hopes to get his book pub- lished. One weekend about a month ago, my best friend Nick and I went ‘over to Larry's house, We talked, well, mostly listened, and learned about chemicals used to kill insects that eat plants. Some chemicals kill plants, too. Now he wants to teach me about geology and earthquakes. ‘Lary loves the outdoors more than almost anything and knows so ‘much about nature. He is one of those guys who is outdoors every chance hhe gets. He has a huge telescope that he uses to teach me astronomy. He is ‘constantly reading—sometimes about history, but mostly about science. (On one of our “science weekends” he rented a very nice microscope, and we got to see single-cell animals moving around, Lary’ so curious about the world. | think Larry is the way he is because he grew up fishing and camping. ‘When he was just a teenager, he was drafted into the army and sent to Viet ‘nam as a photographer. He didn't have to fight, he just took and developed pictures, I's a good thing because he isnt the fighting kind of guy ‘Lam realizing now that many of Larry's interests are mine, too. Because of his influence, I think I will study biology when I get older. Larry has been ‘a dad; [like to spend time with him and he is an inspiration for my future. i EI ES Chapter 3 ahe i understanding what You Read Answer these question in smal groups: 1. How do we “meet” Larry? How does the writer introduce him? 2. Which of these do we know aout Larry? — his age —— how he met the writer — his marital status — his work —— his interests —— Now he spends his free time —— what he looks like 13, Why do you think the writer included certain information about Larry (but not everything he knows)? Which items in the list above are most important? 4, What are two reasons wi the writer admires Lary? 5. Is there anyone in your lifelike Latry? Who? Deserbe this person, Etrioag ‘Thinking Critically: Making Comparisons Comparing, pointing out similarities and diferences san important eiticalthink- ing sil. inclucing comparisons in your wariting wl help you develop a description ‘of person you adie Practicing Making Comparisons Use the underined words to write ‘comparisons of your own based on those from "My Uncle-DadNeighbor Larry” 1. Lamy isike my dad, 2. Lamy loves the outdoors more than almost anwthing, Share your comparisons with your classmates when you ae fished, ©]. 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Ao Interview with Question 1: Answer: Question 2 Answer: Question 3: Answer: Question 4 Answer: Question 5 rswer SS (chapter3 waFocusing on Words and Phrases neers sche ais i Practicing useful words and Expressions The folowing exoressions wil help you write about pele you admire, Read the expressions and review their ‘meaning inthe examples. Then write a sentence of your own 1. play an important role He plays an important role in ray if. 2, seta good example She sets 8 good example for others 3. havea lot of responsibilities Since her father died, he has a lot of responsibilities. 4, depend on (someone) | depend on hrm for many things. 5. is close to She is close to her mother 6. get together ‘The family gets together frequent GD Di reviewing efinitions Here ere more words that can help you wit wth ‘detail about peope you admire. With aparner, match the words inthe column onthe let with one ofthe expressions on the right. Wit the leteron the line. Then write a sentence for each word on a separate sheet of paper. 1. personality family member — 2. influence . commendable 3. admirable © look upto — 4. relative ‘think about with high regard —— Silize €. style of interacting with others — 6. respect {. affect someone's thoughts or behavior st Relationships 8152 ‘chapter 3 = Ed choosing the Correct Expression circle the word or phrase that best ‘exoresses the meaning ofthe underined words in the five sentences below, 1. She fs lo ba her aunt, €.is similar in size to has a deep ar Joving relationship with Disthe same age as 4. was named for 2, She idolized her bg sister when she was young ‘a. strongly admired € looked like Ddida' get along with competed with 3, She and her mother got along we a. have frequent disagreements 1s together Dlenjoy each other's company dive close to each other 4, They havea Jo in common, a. look alike 6 share many’ interests bare the same age down property 5, Her grandmother depends on her expects her assistance ¢. shares personal information with Di hides fromm quarrels with i writing a paragraph About Someone Older or Younger write a bagraph about someane you admire who i oer or younger tan you are Use the ‘vocabulary you've learned in tis section A writing a paragraph using Ideas from Freewriting write a paragraph about someone you admire using your eas irom te Freewritn actty on page a + Younger lings often admire oder sibings.Organizing and Developing Your Ideas oan Review Points * In auniied paragraph, al the sentences relate to and develop the topic sentence. * In an organized paragraph, all the sentences flow smooth and are in @ logical order. Inthe fst two chapters, you wrote paragraphs. Now you're going to leam how to ‘expand a paragraph into an essay @Q_— Weeginning with a Paragraph reed te tolowing pararaph by a student about her oie brother Ten answer the question wth parr When I think of someone I look up to, I think of my brother. Although my name for my brother shows respect and we are very attached to one another, our behavior doesn’t always show that. My brother has very short, brown hair because he's in the military. Before he went to training camp in San Diego, he helped me a lot with my homework. My brother didn’t just help me with school, though. [respect and love my brother so much. Cathy Lai 41, What isthe main dea ofthe paragraph? 2, How does the writer develop her main ies? 13. In order to expand this paragraph into an essay, which points ean the writer "expand"? Where can the writer provide more information? 4. Does the paragraph seem unified to you? Organized se Relavonshins 53.fied "New Points: Parts of an Essay "in an essay, the writer states a main idea and develops that dean more than ‘one paragraph by explaining, describing, comparing, retelingan event, or using @ combination of these writing techniques. * anessay includes an introduction, the main discussion the tod, and a Conclusion. The main idea for the entre essay is called the thesis statement STUDYING PARTS OF AN ESSAY Look at the following diagram. t shows how parts ofa paragraph relate to parts of an essay Paragraph Essay Introduction + thesis statment ‘Topic sentence + bridge — First body paragraph dea t Sentence 1 + example fae eoe eA ihe meee | Idea 3 coneusion, ———f —— Conclusion 584 chapters1 expanding 2 Paragraph to an Essay Now reed ow cathy expanded her paragraph ito an essay —————————————— My Brother Joe When I think of someone I look up to, I think of my brother. His name is Joe, but I never call him that. I always say “Brother” in Chinese because he is older than Tam, and that is the way T show him respect. He calls me Cathy. Although my name for my brother shows respect and we are very at- tached to one another, our behavior doesn’t always show that. My brother has very short brown hair because he’s in the military. His 4gold-framed glasses and small brown eyes go with his hair and give the im- pression that he's more organized, more efficient, and more serious than he really is. used to see him every day, but now, since he joined the Marine Comps, I only see him on weekends, He always wears his uniform when 1 see him now, and he sort of smells like com starch. Before he went to training camp in San Diego, he helped me a lot with my homework. Homework was hard for me because I was a slow learner. wouldn't have passed many tests and quizzes without his help. And al- though my grades weren't as good as his, he was always proud of me when T came home with passing scores. When we walked home from school to- gether, he would always say, "Good job! Get the same grade next time of I'l beat you up!" Of course I said “No way!” and hit him. He'd hit me back, and we'd go running all the way home trying to catch each other. When he left for training camp, I felt sort of empty. My brother doesn't ‘know it, but he taught me a valuable lesson by leaving. I had to work on ‘my own and leam to be independent. I wish he were still living with us and. bothering me like always. But by leaving, he showed me I can work by my- self and still learn what I need to know to continue my education. My brother didn’t just help me with school, though. I remember one ‘summer when I was 10 and he was 17. The weather was unusually hot, and I started to fee! itehy all over my body. I started to scratch. In no time, | got hives. Hives are these big bubbles on your skin. My brother helped ‘me with 50 many things. He got me orange juice, lotion, and a spray bottle filled with water to stop the itching. He even bought me ice cream to cool me down. He set up the fan to blow in my face and changed the channels on the TV for me. By the end of the day, the hives were almost gone. I said thanks to him. He said, “Shh! P'm watching something on TV." I threw a pil Tow at him and laughed. My brother likes to act tough. He doesn't talk much and he seems very serious, but I think he would do anything to help me. [respect and love my brother so much, ‘> Relationshios 5556 ‘chapter ED writing an outtine compete the fotowing cutine ofthe essay you just ead, wy Botner." |. Introduction and thesis statement 1. First idea I. Second idea IV. Third ideo V. Fourth idea VL. Conclusion OO OOS Comparing the Paragraph and the Essay Now compare the essay to Catry Lars cxgnal paragraph on page 53 and answer these questions 4, What parts of the essay are the same as or similar to the paragrapl? 2, What pats of the essay are new? 3, Where were these new parts adied? 4 Can you identity any ofthese new parts as: (a) description, (b) retelling an ‘even, (e) comparing, (A) writing about feelings? 5. Why were the new parts added?+ parents can ake preatrole mace Building Essays from Paragraphs: No. 1 expand this paragraph into an ‘essay by Completing the tree steps that follow, My parents played an important role in my educational development by helping me in both material and spiritual ways to become the person that am today. They raised my older brothers and sisters in such a way that they would set a good example for me and the other younger children, ‘They bought various books that helped me become a hardworking student and a good reader: They also exposed me to experiences such as vacations and museum trips that enlarged my perspective on life. In addition, they looked carefully at my examination results in school in order to motivate ‘me always to do my best. In short, I owe all of muy positive qualities to the efforts of my parents, —Solomon Gebreaftse ‘Step 1 Make an autine in nate form ofthe paragraph What is the first idea? 7 What isthe fourth i se» Relationships 57step 2 Based on your experience and the reading you've dane in this chapter, adé supporting Information to each ofthe ideas in Step 1. You can do tis by giving a further ‘explanation of what you think the writer means by each of his ideas. Use speciic examples and details, Write your supporting points inthe extra space provided under each idea in Step 1 step 3 "Now write an essay based on your outline. Remember thatthe paragraphs, although part ofan essay, should contain al the elements you've been practicing in the book up to tis point 1 The generations ofa fomiy 58 Chapters ea»Building Essays from Paragraphs: No. 2 Here is another paragraph thet you can expand into a complete essay, First, ead the paragraph, My grandpa is very nice and very, very smart. We do lots of things to: ‘gether, and T always leam a lot. He likes to play games with me, and he always wins. He is also a very good cook, so whenever I visit him, he makes delicious food. Sometimes my grandpa takes me out in his boat to fish or just to have a good time on the lake. He also likes to take me to the car mu- eum. I think I'm lucky to have a grandpa who likes to spend time with his, ‘grandson, Aaron Marks [Now expand ths paragraph into an essay by following Steps 1 through 3 from Activity S How many paragraphs wil this essay have? Starting an Essay with Your Own Paragraph write a paragraph about someone you admire ‘Make an outne tke the ones in Activities 3 and 5. Then expand your paragraph into an essay. Share your orginal paragraph, the outline, andthe essay with a classmate before you give it to your teacher BF expanaing Your Paragraph to an Essay cxpanc one of te paragraphs you wrote in Chapter 1 or 2 nto an essay. Fist, make an outline. Give the original Paragrap the outne, and the new essay to your teacher Focus on Testing Actives 3, 5,6, and 7 ask you to make an outine before you write your essay. An ‘outline isa commonly used method for organizing ideas. Whenever you write an essay under time pressure, ist the main ideas in an outine, and develop your sup porting ideas from the outie. This will help you save time and keep your writing focused, iar tas Writing About Someone You Admire write an essay about the following topic [Write an essay about frend or family member you admire. Use what |, you've leamed from this chapter to complete te assignment fs Relatonshins 59EERZS evaluating Your writing Use the folowing rubric to score your writing Read the rubric with your class, then give your writing a score. classmate and a teacher wil score your writing also and explain reasons for thelr scores. You can revise and improve this essay cr you can revise a paragraph from Chapter 1 or 2 Rubric for Writing an Essay About Someone You Admire 3 ‘Content: wring presents a person completely and descrip tion includes information, accomplishments), anecdotes, Excellent ‘comparisons, andor dalogue to help the reader understand wy this person is admirable ‘= Organization: eas are organize to support and explain haw and why the writer admires someone; there isan intro ‘duction, body paragraphs, and a concuson; ideas are con- nected to main ides. Language: Vocabulary is speciic and descriptive; sentences In each paragraph develop the topic sentence, 1 Grammar: Subjects and verbs agree; common grammar problems (oranauns, articles and plurals) are minimal so that ‘meaning is clea ‘Spelling and Mechanics: Most wortsare spelled corecty, ‘and punctuation is correct. 2 "= Content: writing presents a person, ard description includes Information that sows why he or she s admirable ‘Adequate | organization: ideas are organized inte paragraphs anc there \s clear beginning, middle, and end Language: Vocabulary is descriptive; sentences are mostly the same type, ‘= Grammar: Subjects and verbs mostly agree: common gram- ‘mar problems (pronouns, articles, and olurals) ae distracting ‘= Speling and Mechanics: writing has some distracting spel- Ing and/or punctuation mistakes. 60 chapter 3 w=Developing. Sol erANis\ cst ‘Content: Witig does not presenta person clearly or does | ‘not develop description with sufcient details or explanation. ‘Organization: Not enough ideas to be an essay, oF es are canting. Language: Vocabulary i limited or repeated andor there are tao many mistakes to understand andor folow the ideas; sentences have mistakes. Grammar: Writing has many common grammar problems (Gronouns, articles, and plurals that are conusing tothe reser. ‘Speling and Mechanics: Wrting has many cstracting spel ing and/or punctuation mistakes. ent Log In this chapter, you worked through the following activities. How much aid they help you become a better writer? Check a ot, A itl, oF Nota al, | talked about why people admire others. read an essay about an uncle-cad neighbor. eared to make comparisons. interviewed someone about a person she or he admires | stuied vocabulary and expressions for describing people. Heamed how to expand a paragraph into an essay. evaluated my essay (Add something) Alot —Alittle Not at all a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a Retaonships 61