PEER ASSESSMENT

Number 35: Nguyen Thu Quyen

WRITING AN INTRODUCTION

The introduction was written by Nguyen Thu Quyen, and assessed by Khuong Dinh Khoa.

A. Introductory paragraph

As a student, there're many things needed to think about. And one of the most important things among them is how to get high scores

at school. High scores also mean good preparation for the exam. We have many ways to prepare before our exam. And different ways also

suit particular conditions. Hence, students sometimes find it hard to find out the best options for them. Luckily, there are still some methods

that are simple-to-follow, suitable, and efficient for almost every student.

B. Assessment

Criterion Rating scale Comment

TASK The introduction …
ACHIEVEMENT
1 Hook 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 The hook is quite general and does not leave a good
Acceptable impression on the reader
Very Ineffective Effective Very
ineffective effective
2 Background 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 The ideas are not very clearly related to the topic. The
 information Very Ineffective Acceptable Effective Very key term or its equivalent “study skills” is not stated
ineffective effective
3 Thesis statement 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 The thesis statement is quite general, without including
Acceptable relevant subtopics that are presented in the body
Very Ineffective Effective Very
ineffective effective
COHERENCE &
COHESION
4 Progression 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 The ideas are loosely connected with one another. A
particular idea is unrelated to the whole paragraph
Very Unclear Acceptable Clear Very clear
(Hence,…)
unclear
5 Linking words 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Linking words are faulty regarding usage and meaning
(hence, and). Some ideas are not connected with
Very Ineffective Acceptable Effective Very
another by linking words.
ineffective effective
LEXICAL
RESOURCE
6 Range of 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 The majority of vocabulary used in the introduction is
Vocabulary, of basic levels, without any noticeable less common
Very Limited Sufficient Wide Very wide
including less lexical resources.
limited
common words
and collocation
7 Style 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Avoid using personal pronouns and contractions in
 Rather academic writing
formal
Informal Rather Neutral Formal
informal
8 Lexical errors 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Two inappropriate word meanings (mean, suit)

(4 or more (3 errors) (2 errors) (1 error) (0 error)

errors)

GRAMMATICA
L RANGE AND
ACCURACY
9 Range of 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Uses both simple and complex structures, though not
structures, very diverse
Very Limited Sufficient Wide Very wide
including both
limited
simple and
complex
structures
1 Grammatical 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Prepare (in this context this verb is transitive)
0 errors
(4 or more (3 errors) (2 errors) (1 error) (0 error)
errors)

TOTAL 5 AVERAGE
 WRITING A CONCLUSION

The conclusion was written by Nguyen Thu Quyen, and assessed by Khuong Dinh Khoa.

A. Concluding paragraph

In conclusion, students should follow a clear and intelligent preparation plan to achieve high grades at school. Those methods

mentioned above are appropriate for almost everyone to adopt in their preparation for the exam. But besides that, students also have to be as

much hard-working as possible so that they can get their expected score. The more carefully you prepare, the higher score you will get.

B. Assessment

Criterion Rating scale Note

TASK
ACHIEVEMENT
The conclusion …
1 brings the essay to 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 using transition signal: In conclusion
a close Acceptable
Very Ineffective Effective Very
ineffective effective
2 reinforces the 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 paraphrasing the thesis, but not summarizing
thesis statement Acceptable subtopics
Very Ineffective Effective Very
ineffective effective
3 leaves the reader 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 There is a call for action but with subjective tone
with a strong Acceptable and not really impressive
Very Ineffective Effective Very
impression
ineffective effective

COHERENCE &
COHESION
4 has a clear 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 the transition between the thesis and subtopics is
progression quite clear
Very Unclear Acceptable Clear Very clear
unclear
5 uses cohesive 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Uses linking words but not always appropriately
devices (But besides that,)
Very Ineffective Acceptable Effective Very
ineffective effective
LEXICAL
RESOURCE
6 uses a range of 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Mixed use of basic and intermediate level
vocabulary vocabulary
Very Limited Sufficient Wide Very wide
limited
7 uses written 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 using noun clauses, subjunctive mood, formal
English vocabulary
 Informal Rather Neutral Rather Formal
informal formal
8 makes few lexical 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Two word choice mistakes (intelligent, expected)
errors
(4 or more (3 errors) (2 errors) (1 error) (0 error)
errors)

GRAMMATICAL
RANGE AND
ACCURACY
9 uses a range of 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 using both simple and complex structures accurately
structures and effectively, e.g. complex sentences,
Very Limited Sufficient Wide Very wide
subjunctive, modal verbs.
limited
1 makes few 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 one grammatical mistakes (comparison structure:
0 grammatical errors as…as…)
(4 or more (3 errors) (2 errors) (1 error) (0 error)
errors)

TOTAL 6.6 FAIR

Number 36: Le Thi Tham Quyen

WRITING AN INTRODUCTION

The introduction was written by Le Thi Tham Quyen, and assessed by Khuong Dinh Khoa.
 A. Introductory paragraph

What factors do you think that can lead to success in college? Many people would answer “intelligence.” They believe that if you are

intelligent enough, you will succeed in college, and if you are not excellent enough, you will fail. However, the most effective way to

achieve your goals in college depends much more on your studying skills. Nowadays, studying skills are the necessary method that you have

to equip on your own to learn and work efficiently. The way how you learn and some other methods in studying skills such as class note-

taking, ability to memorizing and preparation for taking exams will definitely help you succeed in your future career.

B. Assessment

Criterion Rating scale Comment

TASK The introduction …
ACHIEVEMENT
1 Hook 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 starts with a question
Acceptable
Very Ineffective Effectiv Very
ineffective e effective
2 Background 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Have a good background information
information Acceptable
Very Ineffective Effectiv Very
ineffective e effective
3 Thesis statement 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 The thesis statement is a little unclear.
 Very Ineffective Acceptable Effectiv Very
ineffective e effective
COHERENCE &
COHESION
4 Progression 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 has a clear progression (a logical and clear transition
from the hook to the thesis statement, and from the
Very Unclear Acceptable Clear Very clear
thesis statement to the body paragraphs)
unclear
5 Linking words 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Linking verbs are only of adequate number; in some
cases ideas transition is not very natural (For example
Very Ineffective Acceptable Effectiv Very
“Nowadays,”)
ineffective e effective
LEXICAL
RESOURCE
6 Range of 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 The range of vocabulary is wide enough to cover the
Vocabulary, task, with some awareness of collocations.
Very Limited Sufficient Wide Very wide
including less
limited
common words and
collocation
7 Style 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Overuse second personal pronoun

Informal Rather Neutral Rather Formal

informal formal
8 Lexical errors 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 contains no error in vocabulary usage
 (2 errors)
(4 or more (3 errors) (1 error) (0 error)
errors)

GRAMMATICAL
RANGE AND
ACCURACY
9 Range of structures, 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 uses both simple and complex structures effectively
including both
Very Limited Sufficient Wide Very wide
simple and complex
limited
structures
10 Grammatical errors 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 has 1 grammatical error.

(4 or more (3 errors) (2 errors) (1 error) (0 error)

errors)

TOTAL 7.6 FAIR

 WRITING A CONCLUSION

The conclusion was written by Le Thi Tham Quyen, and assessed by Khuong Dinh Khoa.

A. Concluding paragraph

In conclusion, studying skills are very important tools that must be learned and practiced day by day. Your study skills such as class

note-taking, promotion of concentration, ability to memorizing and preparation for taking exams,... can be improved. Having studying skills

is an invaluable asset in all areas of life, not just school. You will be success if you have good study habits.

B. Assessment

Criterion Rating scale Note

TASK
ACHIEVEMENT
The conclusion …
1 brings the essay to a 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 using transition signal: In conclusion
close Acceptable
Very Ineffective Effective Very
ineffective effective
2 reinforces the thesis 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 paraphrasing the thesis, and summarizing subtopics.
statement Acceptable These expressions can be improved.
Very Ineffective Effective Very
ineffective effective
3 leaves the reader 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 The call for action is quite unclear and not very
 with a strong Very Ineffective Acceptable impressive
impression ineffective
Effective Very
effective

COHERENCE &
COHESION
4 has a clear 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 There is one unrelated idea in the concluding paragraph
progression
Very Unclear Acceptable Clear Very clear
unclear
5 uses cohesive 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Ideas transition between sentences is fair but not
devices completely natural
Very Ineffective Acceptable Effective Very
ineffective effective
LEXICAL
RESOURCE
6 uses a range of 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 including less common words (levels B2, C1)
vocabulary ( catalyst, propitiously) and a few collocation
Very Limited Sufficient Wide Very wide
limited
7 uses written English 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 Overuse second personal pronoun

Informal Rather Neutral Rather Formal

informal formal
8 makes few lexical 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 having no errors in word choice, word formation and
 errors (2 errors) spelling.
(4 or more (3 errors) (1 error) (0 error)
errors)

GRAMMATICAL
RANGE AND
ACCURACY
9 uses a range of 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 using both simple and complex structures but with
structures mixed success.
Very Limited Sufficient Wide Very wide
limited
10 makes few 0.2 0.4 0.6 0.8 1.0 having 3 grammatical mistakes.
grammatical errors
(4 or more (3 errors) (2 errors) (1 error) (0 error)
errors)

TOTAL 6.6 FAIR