“Arrows to the Bullseye” is an editorial article that is featured in the August-

November issue of the official Senior High School student publication paper, CRESCIT.
It unveils the plea of the author that addresses De La Salle Lipa in providing monetary
funds for undervalued fields within the school to which the administration continuously
ignores. It was written following the arrangement of the school to spend more than 300
million pesos in the next two years for campus redevelopment projects. The author uses
appropriate claims in giving reasons why the administration should focus on other
issues, with minor errors in the usage of language and writing mechanics which do not
hinder the overall effectiveness of the article.

The author begins the editorial by enumerating the campus redevelopment

projects funded by DLSL in the past years in which he/she questions the effectiveness
of these projects that will be continuously implemented in the next two years. With this,
the writer states the different fields that should also be considered by the school
administrators such as investing in student psychological care, hiring quality teachers,
and developing canvas and cybersecurity. This is because these fields contribute in
uplifting the quality of education in the school. Overall, the author wants to convey that
expensive redevelopment projects may be great for the school, but De La Salle Lipa
should not allot all of their budget into these kinds of projects since there are more
aspects that should be prioritized since these hinder each students’ ability to learn
effectively.

Evaluating the entirety of the article, the author has noticeably errors in language
use such as pretentious writing, wordiness, cliché, and conversational language. It can
be seen through the words like “arduous”, “in order to”, “safe and sound”, and “just”
respectively. In terms of organization, the author was able to convey his/her thoughts
through a logical and systematic way since he/she uses transitional words like
“furthermore”, “in addition”, “consequently”, and “meanwhile” to emphasize the main
idea. Furthermore, the writer also uses supporting details in justifying his/her claims that
adds to the effectiveness of the article. In terms of cohesion, the article is coherent
because of the author’s use of synonyms and pronouns to avoid redundancy within a
sentence like instead of using “De La Salle Lipa” repeatedly, he/she uses the synonym
“school” or the pronoun “it”. However, Lastly, there are also errors committed in terms of
mechanics such as the use of contractions like “shouldn’t” and “isn’t”.

Despite the weak conclusion used by the author, together with the errors committed in
writing a well-written text, the article is still effective. This is because with the use of strong
claims and supporting details, the writer was able to convey his/her message that they wanted
to be heard.