Assignment 2: Proposal to Solve a Problem

Writer: Ryan Leibold

Writer Email: rleibold@rams.colosate.edu
Reviewer: Connor Behrenbruch
Reviewer Email: quantum@rams.colostate.edu

Instructions: Carefully read through your peer’s entire proposal once. After doing so, complete the following
questions and add comments to the draft:

Introduction

1. Does the introduction provide a brief overview of the problem and proposed solution? How could this
introduction be more exciting, clear, or comprehensive?

This is a well written introduction, listing the overview of the problem and its significance. Maybe change
up some word choice and syntax.

2. Does the author uses headings to effectively signal different sections? On the draft, make a note of any
headings or sections that are missing.

Title, Name, Name of professor, Class, and Date is listed. Sub-headings are absent.

3. Does the proposal identify a specific audience? Who is it? Why has the writer chosen this audience?

Audience is broadly Lawrence, Kansas and Kansas University. This audience was chosen because the
people of Laurence are the people who are held victim to this problem.

4. Do you think this is the right audience for this proposal? Why or why not?

I do, however I think it would be a stronger proposal if the audience was a more specific individual or
group.

Details of the Problem

1. How successfully does the writer establish the problem as a problem? Why is this problem significant? Are you
convinced? Why or why not?

The problem addresses food insecurity in Lawrence. Being that there is a food deficit that is currently affecting
the population of a city, this problem carries significant concern.

2. Where could the writer add more detail about the causes and effects of this problem?

There is great detail regarding the causes and effects of the problem.
Overview of Potential Solutions
1. Does the writer provide a comprehensive analysis of each potential solution? Are the pros and cons for each
potential solution clear? Are there any pros or cons the author overlooked?

Yes, details and logic is used to clearly analyze each potential solution. Pros and cons are present and make
sense. No pros or cons were overlooked.

2. Does the writer remain neutral as they explain the pros and cons of each potential solution? How credible is the
writer being here?

No bias is carried throughout the explanation of pros and cons. The author remains neutral, adding to his
credibility.

Proposed Solution
1. Is the author’s reason for choosing this solution clear? Why is this solution the best one? Are you convinced?
Why or why not?

The reason for choosing the solution is clear to the audience. This solution is the most effective of the
two, making it more convincing. Because of this, I am convinced.

Use of Sources
1. Does the author use at least three different sources? Do they seem credible to you? Why or why not?

Author used three credible sources, four quotations. The sources seem credible, derived from: Kansas
Health institute, University of Kansas, The Food Bank of Kansas.
2. How effectively does the writer use voice markers and the quotation sandwich? On the draft, note any places
where the writer needs to more clearly identify the speaker of the quote or provide more explanation for a quote.

Author uses voice markers and quotations well, strengthening his argument. Quotations provide enough
context for the audience to get a good understanding of the problem.