TON DUC THANG UNIVERSITY

FACULTY OF FOREIGN LANGUAGES

Smartphones are changing the human race in significant

ways.

Group: 7
Student name & ID: 1. Bùi Trương Minh Anh-018H0003
2. Đỗ Minh Anh-018H0004
3. Trần Đỗ Mai Thy-019H0221
Course: Writing 4 (001153)
Lecturer: Lê Ngọc Quỳnh Như

Submission date: May 14, 2021

Order Full Name & ID ASSESSMENT RESULT

(Alphabetical order)
Peer TOTAL TOTAL
Oral Part Report
Review RESULT RESULT
(20%) (70%)
(10%) (In numbers) (In words)

1 Bùi Trương Minh Anh

018H0003

2 Đỗ Minh Anh

018H0004

3 Trần Đỗ Mai Thy

019H0221

Examiner 1’s signature & full name Examiner 2’s signature & full name
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 Peer review form:
research paper
Writer’s name: Trần Đỗ Mai Thy, Bùi Trương Minh Anh, Đỗ Minh Anh
Reviewer’s name: Lê Trương Quốc Bảo, Nguyễn Hoàng Vy
Title of the research paper: “Smartphones are changing the human race in significant ways.”

Date:
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General
1. What is the topic of the paper? - Technology
2. Underline the thesis statement on the paper. “In this article…in a significant way.”
3. In your own words, what is the thesis?
- The thesis illustrates some aspects of smartphone users and demonstrates how smartphones
change human’s life.
4. How many main ideas are there?
- There are two mains idea in this thesis; firstly, the writer shows some particular aspects of
the users; lastly, they will point out the causes of the problem.
5. Is the paper persuasive or expository?
- Expository

Introduction
1. Does the introduction begin with a hook? If so, what kind of hook?
- Yes. The hook is a question.
2. Does the introduction include the background information? If so, about what?
- Yes. The background information is about the entertainment needs of people and point out
the advantages of smartphones which is helpful for people.
3. Is the thesis statement the final sentence of the introduction? - Yes.

Body
1. How many body paragraphs are there? - Two paragraphs.

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 2. Underline the topic sentence in each paragraph.
- “First, we will learn … use of smartphones usage”
- “Smartphones now provide… or even health surveillance”
3. For each body paragraph, write the types of support that appear (e.g., statistics, results of a
study, expert testimony, personal experience, logical reasoning, etc.).
- In paragraph 1: Statistic
- In paragraph 2 :Result of study, expert testimony

4. How are the body paragraphs arranged? (e.g., chronologically; least important to most
important idea; no particular order)
- From least important to most important idea
5. Which piece of research do you find the most convincing?
- “With modern mobiles apps, smartphone will be your own health monitoring and health
monitoring medicines, using software and applications” (paragraph 3, line 23-25)
6. Is there any research that you think does not support the author’s point? If so, explain here:
- There is no research that does not support the author’s point
7. Are there any points that you feel need more support? If so, explain here:
- There is no point that need more support

Conclusion
1. Does the conclusion tie back to the introduction? If so, how?
- Yes, the conclusion was mentioned the essences of technology to human lives
2. Does the conclusion summarize the main points?
- Yes.
3. Are any new points raised in the conclusion? If so, what?
- Yes, they talked about how possible smartphone can help people in the future.
4. What else does the conclusion do? (e.g., make a prediction or recommendation)
The conclusion makes sure that people in the future may take advantages of smartphone better.

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General impressions
1. What are two things you learned from reading this paper?
- The number of smartphone users on all over the world is extremely high and increasing
continuously
- Smartphones play a significant role in people life nowadays due to the fact that they provide
us with many useful functions
2. Draw a star (*) by your two favourite sentences in the paper.
- “In such a wired planet, it is not possible to not be influenced in one direction or another by
the social media craze”
- “Thereby, it can be seen that not only Vietnam but all over the world are very open and
quickly embracing new technologies of the intelligent device when the number of people using
them increases continuously year by year”

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 Abstract
This paper investigates that smartphone is an indispensable thing for human life in recent
years. The paper provides the figures to prove that smartphones have become popular
nowadays. Moreover, smart attributes and applications for the most part make
smartphones essentially become a part of people’s life and easy to basically find
information anytime and anywhere. Based on the sort of specific evidence of
smartphones’ advantages in the research papers can bring all the essences of smart
gadgets to sort of human lives in a big way. The paper concludes why this intelligent
device changes humans significantly.

Keywords: Smartphone, figures, smart attributes.

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 Did you know that there was around 70% of users worldwide use smartphones in the
first 6 months of 2020? Everyone's entertainment needs have also become a matter of
concern, so smartphones are impacting day-to-day life in some significant ways. The
smartphone has truly become a special ability to every single person, and it is regarded as
an indispensable thing for human life in recent years. With smart features and
applications, integrated gadgets seem to be all in a compact phone, smartphones have
become the trends of today's society general and youthful individuals. It is true that the
advent of smartphones has brought people a series of new possibilities, as you know if
you have smartphones on your hands, you will get news, information, any kind of data,
anytime, anywhere. In this article, we will provide you with important smartphone
statistics on key aspects of smartphone users such as the number of people who own
smartphones, the time spends on smartphone devices, etc. Besides that, we will also point
out the causes why smartphones are changing humans in a significant way.

First, we will learn about the development and use of smartphones usage. When
talking about mobile usage statistics, we absolutely cannot ignore its dominance of it.
According to Statista, an estimated 3.6 billion smartphone users worldwide and a global
population of 7.8 billion in 2020, it shows that smartphone penetration is estimated at
46.45%, 12.95% higher than in 2016 (S. O’Dea, 2021). Meanwhile, in Vietnam in
particular, according to data Google released from Vietnamese Consumer Online
Behavior Research, the proportion of Vietnamese people using smartphones nearly
doubled compared to 2013, specifically, increasing from 20% last year to 36%. Due to the
quick access and easy receptive to new technology, the young group of 16-24 years old
owns the most smartphone, 58%, double the figure of 27% last year. It is also the largest
group of online users (86%). Next is the age group 25-34 with 45% using smartphones,
and 31% of people aged 35-44. Thereby, it can be seen that not only Vietnam but all over
the world are very open and quickly embracing new technologies of the intelligent device

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when the number of people using them increases continuously year by year. The next
aspect of smartphones' influence is the time humans spend on them. In Vietnam,
according to Q&Me’s research on phone application trends in Vietnam 2019 just
announced, the average Vietnamese spends 4 hours a day on smartphones. Of which
about 30% of users spend more than 5 hours per day. Vietnamese users also use social
networking and texting on their smartphones more than using laptops or tablets. Up to
90% of messages are exchanged on applications such as email, Facebook via
smartphones. Through the data, it can be seen that the influence of smartphones on
people's daily life is increasingly popular. Next will be the significant uses of smartphones
for humans.

Smartphones now provide individuals with diverse uses, such as training, entertainment,
help for a range of career opportunities, or even health surveillance. Firstly, internet use
has become a part of any student's life and a means to look for knowledge wherever and
when necessary. These days, mobile telephones have become routine, and the number of
mobile users who use the Internet overruns fixed-lined internet users (Manoj Kumar,
2011). Smartphones' increasing demand, internet access, and mobile high-speed browsing
are ready to provide an additional platform for offering services to education. Parents also
use instructional apps for young children such as Youtube's training services, using
technologies of augmented reality (AR) on smartphones in order to see objects or animals
via mobile cameras to support children's brain development. Today, students learn and
work entirely on smartphones and it almost becomes an essential complement for any
student. Learning is a process and a part of our everyday life. Modern technology has
simplified learning from all over the world through online learning and smartphone
learning. Students use smartphones, for example, for sharing multimedia lessons with
classroom peers. It made studying more comfortable and enjoyable. Today, students learn
and work entirely on smartphones and it almost becomes an essential complement for any
student. “A survey conducted by CourseSmart, the world’s largest provider of eTextbooks
and digital course materials, found that college students can not go long without checking
their digital devices, including smartphones, laptops and more” (CourseSmart, 2011).
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Besides, having a smartphone to self-study will help you become an independent and
highly autonomous person. “Self-management of learning is defined as the extent to
which an individual feels he or she is self-disciplined and can engage in autonomous
learning” (Wang, Wu, & Wang, 2009). Secondly, with modern mobile apps, smartphones
will be your own health monitoring and health monitoring medicines, using software and
applications. It is difficult to imagine that you will follow every day on only one
smartphone in your pocket, watch the number of calories you loaded or used, check your
weight and height, and even be your personal trainer with workouts that are divided to
suit you every day with the app. During the last Covid-19 outbreak, the use of
smartphones via the Bluzone application, which is headed by Viet Nam's Ministry of
Information, Communications, and the Ministry of Health, has been very useful and
successful. If you have direct contact with people with COVID-19, Bluezone will warn
you to reduce the transmission of the virus to the population people and when an illness
occurs, you will know whether you have a bad encounter with this case or not only by
visiting Bluezone. Thirdly, whenever you think of a communication system, which is
often used as an entertainment source, the smartphone name pops into your head first. The
meteoric growth of websites such as Facebook and Twitter has caused social media in
pure numbers over the last decade. Along with YouTube, Instagram, WhatsApp, and
Pinterest, they are the biggest players in the social media business. In such a wired planet,
it is not possible to not be influenced in one direction or another by the social media
craze. Now that almost everyone has a smartphone available, you can keep linked to
billions at any time. As we all know entertainment will bring high efficiency in work and
study. “Obviously, entertainment is a cultural domain of great significance in modern
life” (Stromberg G., 2009). Finally, research shows that about 15% of the world's existing
population has a certain kind of disability and the number of elders is rising every day (S.
Verstockt, D. Decoo, D. Van Nieuwenhuyse, F. De Pauw, and R. Van de Walle, 2009).
Such examples include smartphone applications such as text to voice, GPS, and
networking sites that can allow this community of people to be quickly incorporated into
society. The target audience can effectively share their needs with these resources and

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many other functions, get help from others and stay linked to society. Smartphone has
also allowed us to stay linked to our friends and family all the time even in today's busy
world. The Internet is still linked by a smartphone which offers an excellent means of
continuous contact for people who want to be extremely secure for children who go to
school or out of school. The classic cell phones did this for a long time but the
smartphone uses the same which has easy communications and knows the location of
children (Time Pike University of Playmouth, 2011).

In a nutshell, smartphones can bring all the essences of technology to human lives. As a
result, all over the world are generous, swift to receive new advances of smartphones and
the number of all generation users increases continuously by period.

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