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CORRECT WAY OF WRITING AN OPINION ESSAY. THE FIRST
SENTENCE SHOULD BE AN INTRODUCTORY ONE, IT SHOULDN’T
CONTAIN YOUR PERSONAL ATTITUDE/POINT OF VIEW
the choice of your profession is always a very difficult choice that each of us faced at least
once our life. But you can always resort to advice to make this choice AVOID
REPETITIONS easier for yourself.
uFirst of all , is taking in considerence CONSIDERATION what you enjoyed in school, for
example, if you loved chemistry, you could look forward to a future career as a lab
technician or a pharmacist, or if you liked English classES, consider becoming an editor or
a copywriter. ????? uSecondly, explore yourself. Figuring out what you
should do with your life may sometimes require you to get to know yourself better. If you
want a career that will really make you happy, you have to have ????? a very good
understanding of what you want to enjoy. uIn conclusion, even if choosing your work is
very difficult , you need to know that everyone was faced with this choice, and it was
hard for everyone, but this should not stop anyone, since you can always resort to help
and someone’s advice.

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The essay should be divided into 4 paragraphs!
The 2nd and the 3rd paragraphs should contain relevant examples supported by
sound arguments. (I found pieces of advice and arguments, there are no
examples. They should be brought either from your personal life experience or
from a piece of literature.)