Notes:

Green highlights: Good use of words/ideas (in my personal opinion)

Yellow highlights: Possible flaws
Words in red: Possible missing/redundant words
That: “that”s (are there too many..?)
---> (indentation) In an attempt to revitalize economic development and outbound
traveling, in the midst of the COVID-19 crisis, a great many solutions have been
proposed by countries worldwide, one of which being the implementation of
vaccination certificates. While the advocates of these documents opine that it can pave
the way for a new normality, there exists a -> another (I don’t know if it’s correct or
not, but personally I’d rather use “another”) notion that it leads to the potential
emergence of novel problems for -> in society. In what follows, the pros and cons of
inoculation passports will be discussed in details (in detail?) and implications will be
drawn at the end (of what?).
( In an attempt to – a great many solutions: I believe the noun the first phrase refers to
is “countries”, which means there might be an inconsistency in the 1st sentence.)

(I will break the following paragraph into two main points as I can observe)
(indentation) To commence with, multiple benefits does the application of vaccination
certificates offer (broken sentence?). An advantage to mention is that via a certificate,
individuals rendered unemployed owing to the pandemic are -> may be (for
persuasiveness) able to attain work opportunities. Being ensured a public environment
virtually free of viral contagions instead of a prolonged period practicing social
distancing, such recipients of the vaccine (what vaccine?) are capable of gradually
rejuvenating the economy of a country.
In the 1st point of view, I believe you are referring to “work opportunities”.
Nonetheless, the evidence above apparently does not fit in with the point of view. And
if so, shouldn’t there be a warrant?
Equally essential is that external traveling can be reignited through the use of the
aforesaid papers. Being vaccinated follows that one stands fewer (countable?) chances
of being vulnerable to the severe ailment of COVID-19, which might require
hospitalization abroad. As a result, this precludes the aggravation of the existing onus
of insufficient provision of medical services occurring in foreign (do we know what
nation is the author in?) nations.
(indentation) Nevertheless, apart from the foregoing advantages, the enactment of the
policy regarding the implementation of inoculation certifications has a downside ->
several downsides. A drawback induced by such a law is the genesis of a two-tiered
society as -> in which individuals carrying such passports are enabled to perform
activities as well as enjoying benefits that -> while/whereas? others cannot. As a
matter of fact, ones -> those (to avoid repetition) who deliberately decline the
inoculation against coronavirus in spite of it being offered or are incapable of
obtaining an injection due to their health conditions are -> may be subjecting
themselves to social disparity. In other words, the stigmatization of ones with an
absence of a legal vaccination instrument might equal antagonizing already
unfortunate ones in the light of certain inequalities. Another crucial disadvantage is the
production of counterfeit papers, which are utilized by those who desire to access to
public facilities or move overseas without an injection against COVID-19. As a
consquence -> consequence, ones purchasing forgeries run the risk of transfusing
coronavirus to other citizens should they be previously infected with the disease.
Additionally, keeping track on -> of them might prove more problematic for the
authority as merely declaring their possession of the required warrant can ensure their
escaping punishments.
(indentation) On balance, although the introduction of vaccination -> vaccine
passports entails conundrums such as the potential risks of fraud documentation and
social inequality, it is capable of guaranteeing occupational opportunities and the
safety of international travel. However, the analysis above clearly indicates that the
demerits engendered by this policy far surpass the merits.

(I do realize that you have attempted to paraphrase the term “vaccine passports”.
However, I believe it is not necessary since it might be a fixed concept and using
variants of it could lead to potentially incorrect use of word. This is my personal
opinion, yet there is ground to believe so because I have once been reminded of this by
our teacher, Mr. Duc)
My overall thoughts after reading:
You have an impressive vocabulary as well as good choice of words. The ideas are
correlated, but could it be that in an attempt to use some striking/academic words, you
happened to lengthen your words?