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Essay 3 Peer Feedback

Antonio Guevara

1. Yes, your thesis makes sense and it is a strong thesis in my opinion.

2. Your essay is very good, you are paraphrasing very well in your body paragraphs. I also
like the topic of your paper because I also agree that music can help change a person's
mood. It is used as therapy.

3. No, you did not repeat yourself too much.

4. Yes, your conclusion matches the main idea of your essay because you explain how you
proved music can help people in your body paragraphs with the evidence you have provided
in your paper.

5. No, I do not think you should remove anything from your paper.

Bryan Garcia

Your thesis makes sense.

I really liked your essay, its full of information.

You did not repeat yourself too much.

Your conclusion matches your essay.

So far, I think everything looks good in your essay aside from grammatical issues.

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Essay 3 Group Conferce

Bryan Garcia

1. Your title does fit your because because it reflects the benefits of music.

2. So far, your introduction looks pretty good with your main idea being strong.

3. Yes, I had no problem understanding the topic of your essay.

4. I believe this is a good topic to write about and I find it interesting as well.

5. You could just provide more evidence in your body paragraphs talking about the effects
music has on a person, which I am pretty sure you wll.

Leslie Orozco

1- yes it it goes well with the thesis

2- so far just grammar but overall it is good

3- Yes and it is easy to understand what your topic is

4- Yes it is, we all listen to music to help us in many ways and it is good that you cover how it
can help

5- I think it has enough explanation about the topic so far