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BRIANNA GUTIERREZ'S PEERMARK REVIEW OF ELAINE BRIONES'S PAPER

ASSIGNED QUESTIONS

1. Does the author make a claim that includes an interpretation about how three communities use the selected genre? Is this claim clear and direct? What is it? Mark it
in the text. What suggestions do you have for the writer in order to strengthen the thesis? Has the author chosen one (and only one) genre to analyze?

Yes, the author does make a claim about her three examples. The claim is clear in the first two examples but I think her third example needs a more direct idea. The
author did chose only one genre to analyze.

2. Does the essay include a controlling idea that is not obvious to everyone? In other words, does it reveal something not everyone would know about how and why the
participants use the genre within the given communities? Where can the author develop more of an analysis or more fully develop the ideas?
The essay does include a controlling idea and it does reveal something that I don't think much of use knew about how these websites work or how they are started.

3. Does the author use elements from the genre in the three communities to support the claim made about it? What are they? Mark them in the text. Are they used as
good evidence? Indicate why or why not in the text. What kind of evidence would help the writer demonstrate his/her point?

She does use elements to support he genre in all three examples but I think she was still able to give us more information about her third example and explain to use
how everything was well put together and how.

4. Does the essay maintain a cohesive focus around the thesis? Does the author use solid transitions to guide his/her ideas? Determine, as a reader, how you want to
be presented with the information. Does the organization work for you? Indicate suggestions for organization and transitions. Also, mark any tangents that you find in
the essay.

The essay does maintain a good cohesive focus around her thesis. She does give us a good solid transitions so when she talks about her claim and then her point of
view.

5. How is each genre organized? Is the essay organized by each genre or do the paragraphs compare and contrast the genres and how they are used? Does this
organization help move the ideas forward? Tell the author if the organization works or offer organization ideas.
The genre is well organized by three body paragraphs explaining them with much information possible and details. The idea and organization does help move the
ideas and claim forward.

6. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Indicate these places in the text.

I think that the author could use more direct details in her second example. She does go into detail but she does cut it off short instead of doing more explaining.

7. Are the introduction and conclusion focused on the main point of the essay? Does the conclusion answer the three questions? (1. Did I do what I said I would do? 2.
Why is this important? 3. What do I want my audience to do with this information?)

The introduction and conclusion are straight to the point that she is making about her essay. In the introduction she examples it well organized about the genre she is
going to analyze and her conclusion gives us a great small summary of what her essay was about.

8. Indicate in the text where the author needs more evidence.

She already gave much information possible, so if she continues she will make the essay very much repetitive which will make her essay not sound well and not get
the readers attention what so ever.

9. Is the author too repetitive or present too much information? In other words, does the essay overwhelm you as a reader because there is too much information or
underwhelm you because there is too little information?
The author isn't very repetitive with the information that she is giving about all her three examples. The essay did not overwhelm me at all since she does give plenty
of information about all her three websites.

10. Where could the author use stronger transitions to strengthen connections between his/her points?

The author can make another body paragraph that can make a much stronger connections about the point she is trying to make in that body paragraph. She can use
more information to make the connections much stronger, so she can actually making a great claim and support her idea.

11. Is the essay in the correct MLA format?

The author did write her essay in the correct format which was MLA format.

12. Are the sentences and word choices varied? Does the author use strong, active verbs and solid, descriptive nouns? Indicate where the author could strengthen the
verbs and nouns.

Most of the sentences are varied. The author does use very strong verbs that makes her essay sound very strong and straight to the point that she is trying to prove.

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13. Does the author have any fragments, comma splices, or run-ons? If so, mark them in the text. If you know the rule, then go ahead an offer advice to the author. If you
do not know the rule, then simply mention that something seems off.

I haven't seen a fragment or run-ons in her essay and she has placed all her comma splices in the right place to where they are supposed to be.

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JOSHUA IKWUAGWU'S PEERMARK REVIEW OF ELAINE BRIONES'S PAPER

ASSIGNED QUESTIONS

1. Does the author make a claim that includes an interpretation about how three communities use the selected genre? Is this claim clear and direct? What is it? Mark it
in the text. What suggestions do you have for the writer in order to strengthen the thesis? Has the author chosen one (and only one) genre to analyze?

2. Does the essay include a controlling idea that is not obvious to everyone? In other words, does it reveal something not everyone would know about how and why the
participants use the genre within the given communities? Where can the author develop more of an analysis or more fully develop the ideas?

3. Does the author use elements from the genre in the three communities to support the claim made about it? What are they? Mark them in the text. Are they used as
good evidence? Indicate why or why not in the text. What kind of evidence would help the writer demonstrate his/her point?

4. Does the essay maintain a cohesive focus around the thesis? Does the author use solid transitions to guide his/her ideas? Determine, as a reader, how you want to
be presented with the information. Does the organization work for you? Indicate suggestions for organization and transitions. Also, mark any tangents that you find in
the essay.

5. How is each genre organized? Is the essay organized by each genre or do the paragraphs compare and contrast the genres and how they are used? Does this
organization help move the ideas forward? Tell the author if the organization works or offer organization ideas.

6. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Indicate these places in the text.

7. Are the introduction and conclusion focused on the main point of the essay? Does the conclusion answer the three questions? (1. Did I do what I said I would do? 2.
Why is this important? 3. What do I want my audience to do with this information?)

8. Indicate in the text where the author needs more evidence.

9. Is the author too repetitive or present too much information? In other words, does the essay overwhelm you as a reader because there is too much information or
underwhelm you because there is too little information?

10. Where could the author use stronger transitions to strengthen connections between his/her points?

11. Is the essay in the correct MLA format?

12. Are the sentences and word choices varied? Does the author use strong, active verbs and solid, descriptive nouns? Indicate where the author could strengthen the
verbs and nouns.

13. Does the author have any fragments, comma splices, or run-ons? If so, mark them in the text. If you know the rule, then go ahead an offer advice to the author. If you
do not know the rule, then simply mention that something seems off.

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