Peer review for essay 1

Five questions

1. Is my punctuation correct? Yes your punctuation is correct although there are a few
words that are misspelled go back and double check!!!!

2. Did my  thesis statement make sense? Yes your thesis made sense and you put good
info to support your thesis !!!

3. What should I change in my body paragraph ? Things that you should take into
consideration would be your word choices for example in the first paragraph maybe
change “the less strokes possible “ to “ the fewest stokes possible”. Also when including
citation in your essay I believe that you are supposed to put the citation at the end of
your sentence before the period. 

4. Is my posture about the topic clear? Yes the posture about the topic is clear. 

5. Did I cite my sources correctly?  I am not sure if you bulleted your sources on
purpose or not but I believe that they are not supposed to be bulleted , also I believe
that the day you accessed the source should be put at the end of the source for
example :

Walker, Cordie. “The Myth of ‘Perfect Practice Makes Perfect.’” Golf Science Lab, 16
Aug. 2017, golfsciencelab.com/perfect-practice-makes-perfect/. Accessed 21
September 2021.