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PP Don Gian Viet 1 Bai Task 2 Band 8.0
PP Don Gian Viet 1 Bai Task 2 Band 8.0
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BY NGOC BACH
TOPIC
+ MỞ BÀI
+ THÂN BÀI 1
+ THÂN BÀI 2
+ KẾT LUẬN
DÀN BÀI
INTRODUCTION
+ Paraphrase the keywords of the topic
+ Answer the question part of the task
Body 1: the disadvantages of taking a year off before going to university
+ the later start to a career after graduation
+ the expense of taking time off to travel
Body 2: the advantages of taking a year off before going to university
+ good chances for them to gain some valuable experience
+ young graduates can clarify their study and career future
CONCLUSION
+ Paraphrase what you wrote in your introduction
BY NGOC BACH
INTRODUCTION
CÂU TOPIC CỦA ĐỀ BÀI:
In some countries, some high school leavers are
choosing to work or travel for a period of time
before going to university
CONCLUSION:
In conclusion, I believe that there are many advantages for young people who
start working or traveling prior to entering a university, although this decision
has some notable disadvantages.
Topic: In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period
of time before going to university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of those school
leavers’ decision. Give your own opinion.
After graduating from high school, some students tend to get a job or go on a trip for some time
before university life. While I accept that there are benefits and drawbacks of this decision, I
would argue that it is better to take a gap year to work or travel.
The option to get a job or travel straight after school is disadvantageous to some extent. The
main shortcoming is that a number of graduating students may start their professional careers
later than their fellows who do not choose to get a job or go on a trip after high school. As a
result, they will get promoted later . In addition, traveling costs them a great deal. If they travel
right after high school, they will earn no money and have to ask their parents for the expense . It
is not advisable that people should take this option.
On the other hand, it seems to me that high school seniors should choose to work or travel for a
period of time because of some undeniable advantages. Firstly, working and traveling are both
good chances for them to gain some valuable experience. My brother, for instance, travelled to
London during his gap year. By spending time in London, he was able to hear, speak, read and
write the English language constantly which gave him countless opportunities to improve his
English skills. Secondly, taking a year out helps young graduates clarify their study and career
future. They can do various jobs without long-term commitment in this time , and discover what
might be right for them
In conclusion, I believe that there are many advantages for young people who start working or
traveling prior to beginning their university studies, although this decision has some notable
disadvantages.
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Written by Ngoc Bach
IT’S GOOD ENOUGH FOR A BAND 8.0 ?
+ Task response: (details)
- I answered the task question fully
- stating the advantages and disadvantages of a gap year and also giving my own
opinion clearly
+ Coherence and cohesion (details)
- I maintained my opinion consistently throughout the task (in the introduction, at
the beginning of paragraph 3, and in the conclusion)
+ Lexical resource: (details)
- take a gap year/start their professional career later than their fellows/right after high
school/gain some valuable experience/ countless opportunities/taking a year
out/without long-term commitment/discover what might be right.
- high school leavers -> students, graduating students , high school seniors , young
graduates , young people , they
+ Grammar: (details)
adverb clauses, relative clauses and a (first) conditional sentence. There are a variety
of sentence structures and correct comparative forms
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