The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one

European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

01.
The given bar chart illustrates data on the(0) various means of transport that
commuters in a European city used in three specific years: 1960, 1980 and 2000.
Overall, cars accounted for the highest percentage of users at the end of the
timescale. Another noticeable feature is that whereas the proportion of citizens
driving to and from work witnessed an upward trend, the opposite was true for that
of others.
As can be observed, the number of people commuting by cars1(by car) in 1960
was the lowest2( the lowest figure) of slightly over 5%, 40 years later, however,
that tiny proportion was recorded for bikes. A similar change in position also
transpired in 2000 when car3(cars) replaced foot(walking) in terms of the most
popular means of transport. Additionally, there were modest percentages of under
30% when it comes to bus, car, bicycle users and people traveling on foot in 1980.
The total amount of people choosing to walk was higher than that of bikers, but on
the whole, there was a downturn trend in both rates. From 1960 to 1980, car use
had4(saw/experienced) a surge of approximately 20%, which doubled that of bus
use. From then on to the end of the period, the former continued to leap and finally
stood at about 36%, yet the latter decreased to just over 15%.

Explanation:
1+3. ‘Car’ is a singular countable noun so we must use a determiner in front of
it or use its plural form except when we say ‘by car’.
2. ‘the lowest’ should be followed by a noun or we can say ‘was lowest’ if we
have already mentioned the noun.
4. Word choice: ‘witness/see/experience a surge’ seems nicer than ‘have a
surge’.

02.

The given bar chart sheds light on the(0) various means of transport used for the
purpose of commuting in an Europian country1(a European city) in the three
years of 1960, 1980 and 2000.

Overall, it is evident(it is evident that) the usage of cars increased rapidly

throughout the period, while other transports of 2(modes of transport, namely)
buses, bicycles and foot declined.

In detail, in 1960 cars were the used least as a method of transport with 7% of the
population opting for this approach. Meanwhile, walking represents the most
preferred way of getting3(commuting) with 35% of the population. The
proportion of those who made use of bikes and buses was 25% and 18%
respectively. However, 1980 witnessed an increase in the percentage of travellers
using buses. There was a paramount increase in the proportion of commuters
used(using) cars to go to work(go to and from work) to around 24%, (thêm
while) the figure for those using bikes and going on foot fell to approximately 20%
and 17% respectively.

In 2000, a sudden increase was witnessed in the figure for cars, up to 35%,
eclipsing the figure(figures) for buses, bikes and walking with them being
around(with data recorded/reported around) 16%, 6%, 9% respectively.
Explanation

1. 'An' is used before words that begin with a vowel sound. Note that we are
talking about sounds not spelling.
The word ‘European’ begins with the vowel letter 'e' but it is pronounced
with the consonant sound /j/. Therefore, we would write ‘a European’.

2. ‘transport’ is an uncountable noun so we cannot write ‘transports’. Try to

use ‘modes of transport’ or ‘transport mediums’.

3. ‘commuting’ would be more precise.

Recommendation ^^

 The writer can switch between multiple ways of citing data, for instance: a
quarter (25%); nearly a third (35%); one-fifth (20%); a tiny proportion/an
insignificant majority (6%)… to avoid mentioning too many percentages in
a paragraph.

 There should be more comparisons between different categories of the chart.

Here are some suggestions:
- By contrast, as opposed to, Similarly…
- (Marginally/Substantially) more/less people chose to ...than…
- S1 was X times higher than S2 / double, triple…