Portfolio Task #2 (Paired): Report Writing

Names: Amani Khazendar

Working in pairs or groups of 3, you will now critique a sample report. Identify the
situations where rules of report writing were broken and explain the errors.
Submit one assignment per pair/group. Be sure to include the ES Title Page for each
group member.

Sample Report:

Thursday

OMG, what an insane day! We all felt overwhelmed today as so much happened! Too existed
to sit and right longer notes so this will be a quick one – IMO, Ryley was basically acting like a
punk. He was trying to impress the girls, especially Julie, by doing TikTok dances and laughing
loudly in class and ignoring us when we tried to talk to him. When I tried to speak to him about
this behaviour, he put his earbuds in, turned his music up loudly, and did not respond to me. I
finally lost it and had it out with him. He’s now claiming I threatened him, but that didn’t
happen. Telling him he’ll be kicked out is not a threat! Also, before that, he kept going to his
locker. I don’t know what he was doing there but it seemed suspicious. I hope tomorrow is a
better day. I’ve sent a copy of this to Ryley’s other teachers and school staff so they’re aware
of what went on today. Long day!

Error Type Give examples of this Explain what was

error from the report wrong with this
phrasing

Clear This report is not clear, Therefore, these

as it includes: OMG, expressions (OMG, IMO,
IMO, and insane. and insane) are unclear,
as it is considered as a
slang or idioms
(Martin,2014).

Concise This report is not concise, The report should include

as it includes: acting like facts not the EAs opinion
a punk. of student. Thus, we
should make the
reporting not the same as
interpreting, analyzing,
inferring (Martin, 2014).
Complete This report is not
complete as its written:
so much happened! so
what else happen.
Also, when she said that
the student goes to his
locker. Then she said
that it seemed
suspicious, so why its
suspicious?!
Also, incomplete date,
she just wrote:
Thursday!
Correct This report includes non
accurate reflection. Thus,
the EAs (Educational
Assistance) wrote that
the student claimed that
she threatened him, then
she said:( (but that didn’t
happen)). However,
when she said for him,
he’ll be kicked out, so
that is a threat!
Confidential This report not
confidential. For
example, (I’ve sent a
copy of this to Ryley’s
other teachers and
school staff)
Confined I’ve sent a copy of this to
Ryley’s other teachers
and school staff so
they’re aware of what
went on today.
The other readers may
didn’t know what exactly
other things happened,
when she wrote so much
happened and she didn’t
explain everything
happen. Thus, there is no
clear image of the
events. Also, when she
said suspicious, so she
didn’t explain why, and its
not allowed for her to put
her opinion. Besides,
Its not include signing
and date (Martin, 2014).)
She tries to manipulate
the fact to make herself
look good (Martin, 2014).
It should be secret
information and
confidential, so we just
locked in a file cabinet, or
secured in the teacher’s
desk, then just reporting
for stuff, who responsible
for that (Martin, 2014).
They should never be on
display for others to read
them (Martin, 2014).
 References:

Martin, Sue. (2014). Take a Look: Observation and Portfolio Assessment in Early Childhood, 6 th Ed.
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