Invictus Нескорений

Out of the night that covers me,
Black as the Pit from pole to
pole,
I thank whatever gods may be
For my unconquerable soul.
In the fell clutch of circumstance
I have not winced nor cried
aloud.
Under the bludgeonings of
chance
My head is bloody, but unbowed.
Beyond this place of wrath and
tears
Looms but the Horror of the
shade,
And yet the menace of the years
Finds, and shall find, me unafraid.
It matters not how strait the gate,
How charged with punishments
the scroll,
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul
Із темної ночі, що вкрила цей
світ
Проваллям від краю до краю
Богів, що створили мене і мій
рід,
Нескореним духом вітаю.
Хай прикрих обставин стискає
тягар —
Я сліз та образ не збираю.
До крові гамселить недолі
лихвар,
Та  я голови не схиляю.
Хоч в світі, що зітканий з гніву та
сліз,
Не бачу нічого, крім болю —
В тенетах років, без надії на
зміст,
Згубитись собі  не дозволю.
Хай двері вузькі та високий
паркан —
Гріхами не спутати волі:  
Я — вільний, я — духу свого
капітан.
Володар своєї я долі.

Analysis:

1) The whole poem is written close to the text of

the original in terms of meaning with some

discrepancies or derivations in this regard.

2)The punctuation was somewhat distorted,

omitting all the semi-colons which might have

been caused by the influence of Ukrainian poetry

conventions.
3)The number of lines, as well as the rhyme

scheme has been preserved, which is a

remarkable achievement, especially taking

account the preservation of meanings (predominantly).

with additions

4) Syllables: The original’s line pairs count different

numbers of syllables, whereas throughout the

translation the different amount is observed .

In my humble opinion, this is neither a

good quality, nora bad one — it is just different. But the

fact remains: the number was distorted.

Some stylistic devices

Anaphora(was not preserved in translation):

I am the master of my fate

I am the captain of my soul

Sibilance:

Beyond this place of wrath and tears

Looms but the Horror of the shade

Personification:

До крові гамселить недолі лихвар

*the final goal was achieved by

translator.