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Jordan Teixeira

Professor Samantha Gonzales

ENC1101

11 November 2022

Dear Professor Gonzalez,

Subject: Submission of Revised Major Assignments 1 & 2

Thank you for the feedback on my assignments. I have reviewed the comments and have revised

them. I appreciate the feedback that you and my peers shared with me. When it comes to the first

major assignment there wasn’t much to revise and I was glad to see the positive judging

comments praising my introduction for the first paper. Also, the reacting comments to my

interest in Percy Jackson. However, there was valuable feedback from the comments made. Such

as the other comment about an awkward phrased sentence, or my mistakes with making in-text

citations. This feedback was extremely helpful due to my confusion at the time with how to cite

with the correct format, and by showing me that sometimes it is worse to make a sentence more

complicated than it needs to be. In order to fix the sentence, I corrected some vocabulary and

made the sentence much simpler and easy to understand. The sentence now says, “However, the

most important skill that I learned from this class would have to be being able to clearly express

personal problems and emotions and put it in my writing.” (Teixeira, pg. 4, lines 4-6). Making it

much more clear than what it had been before the feedback. The citations were put into the

proper format after learning how to cite correctly, instead of having a large blob of text for the

in-text citations, it is now concise and follows MLA format. When it comes to the second major
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paper, all of the feedback was important to me, and I appreciate the depth of the feedback I

received. Such as the coaching comments suggesting me to restructure sentences, or the negative

reacting comments reacting to my lack of a thesis statement. However, the most important

feedback I received was a mistake that can be seen on both papers, it being my header in the

incorrect format. As well as the second paper lacking a proper thesis statement. This feedback is

extremely important to me since I need to follow the correct format and be able to produce thesis

statements in order to have a proper paper. In order to fix my format errors, I searched for the

proper way to make headers in MLA format so that I don’t make this recurring mistake again. As

for the thesis statement, after adding it to my paper, it says, “ An example of a discourse

community could be something as simple as a game, like Destiny which is a community that I

am a part of that follows the guidelines.” (Teixeira, pg. 1, lines 9-11). This statement provides

insight as to what my paper is about now, instead of having no thesis statement like before. I am

thankful for all of the feedback that led to my corrections, the judging comments praising my

introduction for major paper one, or the positive reacting comments for my analysis using the

framework presented in the second major assignment. Also, the coaching comments that

suggested subtle changes, sentence structure/ grammar, and the other comments that let me know

that certain sentences were hard to understand. All of the feedback provided allowed me to

improve my papers.

Sincerely,

Jordan Teixeira
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Works Cited

Teixeira, Jordan. “My Literacy Growth.” 18 September 2022. ENC 1101, University of Central

Florida, Student Paper

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jUxpBar_rkV6butkblMEvvkLkGb2sxeW59KYKDGBdY

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Teixeira, Jordan. “Destiny as a Discourse Community.” 1 November 2022. ENC 1101,

University of Central Florida, Student Paper

https://docs.google.com/document/d/14Iv0XlFy49179_-urHB-21jWosB8PYtN4HUWVn9KpZ8/

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