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Thank you for the feedback on my assignments. I have reviewed the comments and have
revised them. My responses are given in a point-by-point manner below. Changes to the
manuscript are shown in both Major Assignment 1 and Major Assignment 2 papers.
Both of my major assignment papers have received critiques on needing more supporting
details to make my points more clear. For example, I received a comment on this section of my
first paper: “As I began my high school journey, I was unsure of what my future in writing would
look like” (Dallas, p.1). The feedback I received for this was suggesting that I go into greater
detail about why I felt uncertain. I changed this section of my paper to include more explanation
about why I was unsure of what my writing future would look like in the beginning of high
school. I used to fear adding too much detail to my writing, as I didn’t want to bore my readers.
However, after receiving multiple critiques suggesting more examples and explanations, I see
how details are essential to making my writing more clear for readers. I feel that by revising this
Another part of my first paper that received a critique is the multimodal project. My feedback
stated that my paper didn’t provide a suffice explanation of the pictures I represented and why. I
have added further details in my paper about my literacy sponsors and how my multimodal
Finally, I gained feedback on my thesis from my second paper. In attempt to provide a thesis,
I wrote, “All of these features assemble together to create a discourse community” (Dallas, p.1).
After practicing thesis writing in class, I can clearly see that this is not a sufficient thesis for my
paper. I adjusted this part of my essay to hopefully include a better thesis to shape the goal of my
paper. I think that removing this sentence and replacing it with a more accurate thesis addresses
Sincerely,
Skyler Dallas