So, this an example of writing a good paragraph.

If you look online there

are quite a few pages that describe what would make a good paragraph
for an academic essay. Some of the acronyms include PEEL or WEED.
1. This includes a topic sentence, the first sentence – what is the point
of the paragraph.
2. And this is then followed by explanation and evidence that would
support the topic sentence.
3. And the last sentence links all the sentences back to the original
question.

So, the question (C1 Advanced) is about the factors that influence the
young to move to the city. The options are work, education, and culture.
And the following paragraph chooses “education”.

Likewise, the level of education that is offered in important cities is an

enormous attraction. There are many people who are attracted to study in
such places due to the huge variety of options that are offered by them. In
addition, not only do they have the chance to receive well taught classes
by eminent lecturers in the most prestigious universities but have the
opportunity to do work placements in the most influential companies
based in the city. These are important advantages that make moving to a
city seem logical and popular for the young.

Green – topic sentence(point)

Yellow – explaining the topic sentence, evidence
Red – Concluding the sentence and linking to the question.

Content – The question is answered, and the reader would be well

informed
Communicative Achievement – Essay format, formal language, attention is
easily held, and complex ideas are expressed.
Organisation – “Likewise and In addition” - connecting devises, examples
of relative clauses/pronouns. Other connecting devices, “attraction-
attracted”, “such places” and the concluding sentence focuses the whole
paragraph to the question.
Language – full control of the language.