Essay

FOCUS ON THE SENTENCE TYPES AND EXPRESSIONS

When Christmas holidays, Sant Valentine’s Day, Mother’s and Father’s Day, Weddings,
Anniversaries, Retirements, or Birthday, occasions are going to take place, people get ready
to purchase and receive gifts. But what type of present do people value the most? This essay
will examine the presents that are more appreciated in society. (51words)
Introduction good. Change the first sentence in order to show a high level of English.
Homemade items are generally given to closer close partners or family when is thought to
gift with a meaningful item. As it takes more time to prepare homemade items, people
usually plan to prepare this when they have time, in order to enjoy the gift making process.
This gifts not only involve time but also love and dedication. In addition, when choosing to
gift a personalized product, less money is spent, and to can make the receiver feel special.
(128 words)
Close* which can make the receiver feel special*
Receiving experiences is a unique gift which is usually given to enjoy with one-another as
spending a memorable moment. However, these presents are also given when people have no
idea of what to buy. As experiences are really varied gifts, people could life live an adventure
or experience a relaxing activity. Moreover, adventure gifting experiences gifting is a way to
connect with itself ourselves, have fun and enrich our life. (194 words)
Live* and adventure gifting experiences* connect with what?
After considering all the points mentioned, I strongly believe that although homemade items
show love and care, experience gifts open the tapestry of happy enduring memories and
strengthen relationships whether or not the experience is lived together with the receiver.
Suming up, Also, experiences are better received than homemade items as people find them
more compelling and significant. (251 words)
Don’t say summing up again in the middle of the conclusion.
Maybe put a question?