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Poetry can be distinguished from prose for both its metrically bound speech and its brevity
(Winko, 2010). Both of these factors imply that poetry cannot communicate as much
information to its readers, because the short duration restricts the development of thematic
material, while constraint comes from the strict rhythmic aspect in stanzas. Character
development, it would seem, is also part of this problem: due to the confined space in which
poetry acts upon, surely characterisation would be neglected in favour of evoking imagery
and concentrating on emotions, moods and sentiments (Winko, 2010). This assumption is
unfair, and there is a wealth of great poetry that draws memorable characters despite its
brevity. British poet John Betjeman excelled in this, using witty characterisation to
emphasise the messages he was putting forward in his work. So, from a narrative theory
perspective, analysing how methods of storytelling affect the readers, this essay will explore
how Betjeman uses characters and narrators to highlight meaning in his poetry, particularly
John Betjeman is best known for being Poet Laureate from 1972-1984, and his poems often
provide scornful commentaries on society’s habits and flaws. Both poems in this essay fall
into this category: “Diary of a Church Mouse” attacks society’s relationship with religion,
while “Hunter Trials” is more personal, as Betjeman sook revenge on his wife by expressing
his hatred of their horse (Early, 2018) while mocking snobbery. However, the characters in
these poems are interesting, as Betjeman juxtaposes serious claims with whimsical narrators,
looks at life through the animal’s point of view, particularly its daily business of searching for
food (Magee, 1964), as the poet uses hyperbole and emotive language to make the readers
sympathise for the mouse, who’s ‘bread is sawdust mixed with straw’ and ‘jam is polish for the floor’
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(Betjeman, 2006, p.205). This achieves a strangely compelling character, who’s goodwill is
based largely on his own misery (Magee, 1964), caused by so-called ‘bad’ mice who don’t
attend church and take his food while he ‘starve(s) the whole year through’ (Betjeman, 2006,
p.205). The mouse can draw off the point of view for observing human situations from an
unusual perspective (Magee, 1964), as the other mice act as metaphors for the lack of
commitment from humanity towards religion, and the innocence of the character is effective
mouse falsely claims that “Within the human world I know/Such goings-on could not be so” (Betjeman,
2006, p.205). There is a deliberate link between the bad mice and humanity here, and it offers
a chance for the readers to actually stop and think about the relationship between the
metaphor and reality: if a human was narrating instead, the effect wouldn’t be as convincing
because both character and reader are in the same realm, nor would the character be as
engaging for there is no complexity (Maslej, Oatley, & Mar, 2017). The characterisation of a
affecting the reader’s mindset, both with an unassuming charm and a perspective away from
the human.
“Hunter Trials”, by contrast, is narrated by a young girl, but contains other non-speaking
characters. They all have remarkably posh titles – “Prunella”, “Smudges”, “Guzzle”, “Diana”, “Miss
Blewitt” (Betjeman, 2006, p.197) are merely designations using fictive names (Winko, 2010)
that evoke an upper-class, yet poignantly distasteful feeling. We know from Betjeman’s
background that class conciousness and snobbery were recurrent themes in his life (Early,
2018), and the pretentiousness of the character’s names are just as valuable as the arrogance
of the young narrator in setting the sneering tone of the poem. Of course, the snobbery of the
speaker takes centre stage: she is always first to criticise the other competitors, such as her
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damning analysis of Prunella – “Why doesn’t she slacken his muzzle/And tighten the breach in his girth?”
(Betjeman, 2006, p.197). Typical of her characterisation is not only personal optimism on her
for the reader, particularly in Stanza Six in her judgement of Margaret, as her “withers got tied
in a noose” and her “coronets (were) caught in the traces” (Betjeman, 2006, p.197). This puts a
distance between us and the girl, and she becomes less engaging and unlikeable because she
handedness. Of course, her over-confidence comes back to bite her, as Betjeman makes her an
unreliable narrator that is part of the story she tells (Lodge, 1992),because her eventual
failure to live up to her own hype in the last stanza is amusing to the reader. But, how this
incident plays out is driven by the nature of the person involved (Abbott, 2002), and
Betjeman’s characterisation of the young girl makes it destiny for her to fail and receive
dutiful karma: even after her turn, she says that it was “naughty of Smudges” and that she’s “sick
with disgust” (Betjeman, 2006, p.197)! Her arrogance and self-indulgence emphasises
Betjeman’s theme of criticising upper-class snobbery, and this character is very effective in
Furthermore, there are links between the two poems’ approach to character. They could be
described as a variation in what E.M. Forster calls ‘flat’ characters (1956), in that while
things certainly happen to them in the poem (particularly in Hunter Trials at the end when
the rider fails in her equestrian), their stances and outlooks on life never change. They
declare themselves in their motifs, like Popeye says, “I yam what I yam” (Abbott, 2002).
There are benefits to this for Betjeman’s cause: they are easily recognised by the reader, and
remembered by them afterwards (Forster, 1956), but it also means that there is no need for
there is no room for irrelevant information (Winko, 2010), so by creating ‘flat’ characters he
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is able to concentrate solely on effectively delivering his mantras while merely letting the
nature of the characters speak for themselves: surely a talking mouse and a snotty girl is
suffice to be engaging, capture our interest and hold our attention (Maslej, Oatley, & Mar,
2017) without requiring major developments. However, what is most impressive about
Betjeman’s characterisation is his ability to make his readers identify with his characters as if
the events were happening to them, in a process Jonathan Cohen calls “identification” (2001).
Take the “pagan mice” (Betjeman, 2006, p.205) in “Diary of a Church Mouse” – Betjeman is
forcing the reader to identify with them in finding similarities between the characters and
themselves (Cohen, 2001), but in an undesirable fashion due to the bias of the “good church
mouse” (Betjeman, 2006, p.205), who makes us dislike ourselves if we identify with the other
mice. Identification requires that we forget ourselves and become the other (Cohen, 2001),
and while that may seem rather extreme for what is comedic poetry, the result is convincing
– even the most dedicated of religious people would even question their own commitment,
thus changing their position to the characters (Cohen, 2001), rather than maintaining belief
in themselves. The narrator in “Hunter Trials” works in a similar fashion, but with a more
selective and narrow group of people in just the upper class, allowing the rest of society to
not only mock the character, but the people associated with it. This is where identification
people relate to this girl to open new perspectives which may result in attitude changes
(Cohen, 2001), a technique that Betjeman uses very often in his other works. Both characters
are effective in opening new outlooks, pressing readers to question their own morality and
characters despite the short operating space of poetry, with his charactersation a pivotal
aspect of emphasising his poetry’s messages. In “Diary of a Church Mouse” and “Hunter
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Trials”, the characters we meet help us both ridicule the folly of society, while also to reflect
on our own attitudes, and they are equally effective in achieving these goals. Betjeman is able
to juggle character development and rhetoric equally well in his works, and this produces
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