If I have to talk about a lesson that I remember well, I will say tell you about the lesson I

learn with my daughter in the education center for kid babies. You know, In Vietnam there
are have a lot of Education Centers for kids but only one a Center for baby 6 months to 2
years old. Your baby get to contact is exposed to waterwater environment, improve tactile
ability and exercise When my children daughter was 6 months to 1 year, she was swimused
to swim in the small pool for about 15 minutes. I can could stand by my baby and followed
her when she played with water. And then the Babysitster massaged for her. At this that
time she was so relaxed and happy. When She was 1 year older, She started to learn the first
lesson and I am so lucky to join the classroom with her. At the Bbeginning of the lesson, is
The children listened to music and danced. I aslo danced with her, It make made me very
interesting excited . Then she learned with flash cards, Professtionalthe professor teacher
get gave her two pictures and explaint explained it. For example blue, red, blue, red… and
asked her where is was red. She touched on flash card red, which was is right. I was very
surprised and dont didn’t know why all of children always choose chose right flash card.
After learning with flash cards, the kid begin began to do exercise. I keep kept my daughter
hands and take took her go over the mini bright bridge and go through the tube. The last
part was shooting the ball and getting some reward.
To wrap it all, I thought it was such an amazing experience for me and my daughter. I wish
there could be more and more centers with these useful and interesting activities like this.
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Nhận xét chung:

- Nội dung câu chuyện rõ ràng, có yếu tố dẫn dắt giúp người nghe muốn nghe câu
chuyện.
- Dùng từ khá ổn, không bị lặp từ
- Tuy nhiên, lỗi ngữ pháp còn nhiều, đặc biệt chưa dung thì quá khứ để kể lại câu
chuyện đã qua.
- Ý cuối chưa có nên tình tiết câu chuyện còn thiếu
- Cố gắng cải thiện lỗi ngữ pháp, dung động từ to be ở quá khứ ‘was,were’, tính từ thể
hiện cảm xúc con người: surprised, excited, relaxed