A trip vacation I want to take.

A trip vacation I want to go to is Japan. An island country in the North Pacific Ocean. It lies off
the northeast coast of mainland Asia and faces Russia, Korea, China, Stretching from the Sea of
Okhotsk in the North to the East China Sea and Taiwan in the South. 6 reasons why I want to
visit Japan are their polite and friendly people, it’s great natural beauty, their amazing culture,
unique castles, the cherry blossom season, and the Japanese cuisine. Out of all the seasons, I
would like to visit Japan in the winter. Because of the must see The mountain, Mount Fuji. There
are many things to do around Mount Fuji. One of them is Kawaguchiko, a famous “picture
perfect” reflective lake. The huge expanse and shoreline of Kawaguchiko offers an outstanding
view of Fuji. Another thing to do around Mount Fuji is to visit the Chureito Pagoda. To reach the
pagoda, visitors must go through a long stone staircase of almost 400 stairs. In the process of
going up the stairs, you can see above the town ,and(remove) a fantastic view of Mount Fuji.
You can also visit Oshino Hakkai, a reconstructed traditional village centered around eight
natural ponds, fed by the melted snow each spring. Moving on, I would also like to visit Shibuya,
which is the center of youth fashion and culture. It’s streets are the birthplace to of many of
Japan's fashion and entertainment trends. Somewhere I would like to go soon in the future.
Thank You!!

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Include more information, tell more about those place such as history etc. I would recommend to
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about village I would add like their personality kind or…. Add info more in each place you talk
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A trip vacation I want to take. 

A trip vacation I want to go to is Japan. An island country in the North Pacific Ocean. It
lies off the northeast coast of mainland Asia and faces Russia, Korea, China, Stretching from the
Sea of Okhotsk in the North to the East China Sea and Taiwan in the South.
6 reasons why I want to visit Japan are their polite and friendly people, it’s great natural
beauty, their amazing culture, unique castles, the cherry blossom season, and the Japanese
cuisine. Out of all the seasons, I would like to visit Japan in the winter. Because of the must see
mountain, Mount Fuji. There's many things to do around Mount Fuji. One of them is
Kawaguchiko, a famous “picture perfect” reflective lake. The huge expanse and shoreline of
Kawaguchiko offers an outstanding view of Fuji. Another thing to do around Mount Fuji is to
visit the Chureito Pagoda. To reach the pagoda, visitors must go through a long stone staircase of
almost 400 stairs. In the process of going up the stairs you can see above the town and a fantastic
view of Mount Fuji.
You can also visit Oshino Hakkai, a reconstructed traditional village centered around eight
natural ponds, fed by the melted snow each spring.
 Moving on, I would also like to visit Shibuya which is the center of youth fashion and
culture. It’s streets are the birthplace to many of Japan's fashion and entertainment trends.
Somewhere I would like to go soon in the future. Thank You!!(No thank)

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