Writing Effectively

It was a beautiful day. The sun was shining in a clear blue sky. Raj felt excited as he wanted to play
with his friends. Quickly, he took his mountain bike and rode it happily to the park which is placed in
the center of his neighbourhood. After reaching the park, he parked his bike under a shady tall tree.
While parking his bike, he watched the breathtaking sights of the rolling hills from far away. Without
wasting any minutes, he took out his samsung galaxy phone and took some pictures of the sights.

Chimes of the ice cream seller pierced the air. How nice to have a magnum now, wondered Raj.

Description about time or day -decribe the noun

Description about the setting -describe the noun
State what the writer did and felt - tell the action
State what the the write did next