CREATIVE NONFICTION

Let’s engage and work! Week 3

I have you, you have me!

Peer review critique

Writer’s name: Cyiathres Kaye R. Capiones
Partner’s name: Steffhanie Cadion
Title: My last visit in Kanangga

1. What really like about your writing is…

It’s very expressive and also very interesting, the way you are writing is very unique and
creative. Your writing really expressed what you are trying to convey and tell to it’s readers, it is
also descriptive as it describes very well.

2. Your beginning paragraph…

In the beginning of the writing the writer sets the tone and mood very well. The writer was also
good at giving the hint of what the subject is as well as what the story is all about. The writer
wrote a very good introduction that catches the readers interest right from the beginning.

3. Your middle paragraphs…

The writer provided accurate information of its experiences and is also sincere, honest, truthful,
of telling the story. Though it lacks literary devices that entertain the readers the story its still
good and interesting to read.

4. Your ending paragraph…

Overall the story is good and worth reading, it is truly about a very fun and memorable
experience that the readers can relate to whenever they go to vacations too. But specially the
story is very good at describing sceneries and places that makes the story beautiful.

5. Your writing can be improved by:

The writing style is already good enough to be honest but it can be improved by minding the
usage of past tense, check the spelling, and use some literary devices to enhance the story and be
more entertaining and appealing for the readers experience.
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Let’s engage and work! Week 4

Activity 1 : Going down memory lane

1. The first time I dyed my hair
This event is a good memory for me because it was the first time I dyed my hair, it’s interesting,
and an unforgettable memory for me so I think it will be fun making a memoir about it.
2. Miss goddess of 2022
This event is totally and definitely memorable, This event is a rollercoaster of emotions and
situations. I learned a lot from this experience and grow to understand some new things in life.
3. My 16th Birthday
This one is a good event for me, whenever I think of this memory I instantly feel joy and warmth
but most specially grateful. This event is so nostalgic that I would love to experience it one more
time again.

“MY 16TH BIRTHDAY”

It was my 16th birthday and as usual even though I’m already turning 16 that day I still feel so
excited as if it was it my 7th birthday. 3 days before my birthday my mom asked what I want to
do for my birthday this year, I told her that I wanna celebrate my birthday this year in just a
simple but memorable way so I decided that I want a picnic told my mom about it. We then
decided to go picnic at the Mac Arthur park as it was a famous place and most people usually go
there to have a picnic.
After deciding where and what I wanna do for my upcoming birthday, Me and my mom then
thought of the foods that is convenient to bring as we are traveling and will have a long way ride
before arriving in our destination. Of course my favorite pasta dish wouldn’t be forgotten and my
birthday wouldn’t be complete without carbonara, then we had pansit, we also bought sliced
bread, and I also requested to my mom this one pasta dish that I really wanted to try, It’s pesto
pasta. I am so excited! I couldn’t sleep at night before my birthday.

On the day of my birthday I woke up with many greetings, greetings from my family in the
house and greetings from online friends. I helped my mother from cooking to preparing of the
foods. After preparing everything we got ready to leave, we rode for almost two hours before
arriving in the Mc Arthur park. We lay down the banig on the grass and put the foods next then
we sat and started singing a birthday song before eating.
Me and mama agreed that we wouldn’t buy a cake anymore since I requested a pesto pasta and
it was already out of the budget, but to my surprise my tito bought me a mocha birthday cake!
And for another surprise an hour later my tita and her girlfriend came and they also bought a
vanilla chocolate birthday cake! I became so happy at that time that I didn’t even know how to
express how grateful and thankful I am into words, I feel my cheeks hurting from smiling and
laughing all day but I couldn’t stop smiling.

Even though it’s just a simple picnic celebration I had so much fun and it gave an unforgettable
memory that I cannot forget. My 16th birthday gave me so much joy and happiness that I wish to
feel the experience one more time again, every time I remember my 16th birthday celebration I
feel very nostalgic and I really want to celebrate a simple but joyful birthday again. I will surely
have a picnic again next time even though I don’t have an occasion to celebrate amd I would
love to experience a simple picnic again someday with my family and friends.
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Let’s apply now! Week 5

Look through my eyes (Final output 2.0)

“MY 16TH PICNIC BIRTHDAY CELEBRATION”

It was my 16th birthday that day and even though I’m already turning 16 I still feel so excited as
if it was it my 7th birthday. 3 days before my birthday my mom asked what I want to do for my
birthday this year and I told her that I wanna celebrate my 16th birthday in a simple but
memorable way so I decided that I want a picnic for this year and told my mom about it. We then
decided to go for a picnic at the Mac Arthur park as it was a famous tourist place and most
people usually go there to have a picnic.

After deciding where and what I wanna do for my upcoming 16th birthday, Me and my mom then
thought of the foods that is convenient to bring as we are traveling and will have a long way ride
before arriving in our destination. Of course my favorite pasta dish wouldn’t be forgotten and my
birthday wouldn’t be complete without carbonara. We have fried chicken, we bought sliced
bread, and I requested this one pasta dish that I really wanted to try, It’s pesto pasta. I am so
excited! I couldn’t sleep a wink at night before my birthday.

On the day of my birthday I woke up with many greetings, greetings from my family in the
house and greetings from online friends. I helped my mother from cooking to preparing of the
foods. After preparing everything we got ready to leave, we rode for almost two hours before
arriving in the Mc Arthur park. We lay down the banig on the grass and put the foods next then
we sat and started singing a birthday song before eating.

Me and mama agreed that we wouldn’t buy a cake anymore since I requested a pesto pasta and
it was already out of the budget, but to my surprise my tito bought me a mocha flavor birthday
cake! And for another surprise an hour later my tita and her girlfriend came and they also bought
a vanilla chocolate birthday cake! I became so happy at that time that I didn’t even know how to
express how grateful and thankful I am into words, I feel my cheeks hurting from smiling and
laughing all day but I couldn’t stop smiling.

Even though it’s just a simple picnic celebration I had so much fun and it gave an unforgettable
memory that I cannot forget. My 16th birthday gave me so much joy and happiness that I wish to
feel the experience one more time again, every time I remember my 16th birthday celebration I
feel very nostalgic and I really want to celebrate a simple but joyful birthday again. I will surely
have a picnic again next time even though I don’t have an occasion to celebrate and I would love
to experience a simple picnic again someday with my family and friends.
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