Writing a story

As Mark was about to throw away the old bottle, he saw that there was a piece of paper inside it. (140-190 words)
Your story must include:
• a message or map
• a surprise

Paragraph his feeling ...curious: ..it piqued his curiosity./ ..thinking to take it out or not: ..(contemplating
1: when he saw whether to take the paper out)/ ..decided to smash the bottle/pulled the cork out./ ..took the
it paper from the shards of glass carefully/took out the paper from inside the bottle.
what he did
Paragraph describe the ...paper: ..discoloured, rolled, smell of sea water – too long being under the see before
s 2 & 3: paper wave swept the bottle to the beach./ ..unrolled and flattened it./ ..the paper was smooth
what was on albeit old./ …a message written in cursive- reminded him of his late grandfather’s
the paper: a handwriting./ love message /..read: to a woman named Querida. (explain the message)/ …
message at the bottom written: if found please send it to (home address).

what did he …familiar with the address. / ..read again, realised it was his grandmother’s home
decide to do address./ ..too many questions-.. at the drop of a hat, he took his bike and hurriedly cycled
describe the to his grandmother’s house./ ..called for his grandmother/ ..she was in her sofa–
situation knitting./ ..showed her the paper./ ..grandmother read – her face lit up- tears ran down her
related to the sunken cheek./ ..eagerly asked who, what./ ..grandmother smiled when replied, ‘I am your
message
gramp’s Querida. (explain relate to the message)
Paragraph his feeling in ...words fail him – how true love between his grandparents could last that long, the bottle
4: the end that was thrown in the see 70 years ago could find its way back, him of all the people had
found it./ ..smiled as he remembered his grandfather’s favourite quote ‘miracles happen to
those who believe in them.’

Writing a story
As Mark was about to throw away the old bottle, he saw that there was a piece of paper inside it. (140-190 words)
Your story must include:
• a message or map
• a surprise

Paragraph his feeling ...curious: ..it piqued his curiosity./ ..thinking to take it out or not: ..contemplating whether
1: when he saw to take the paper out./ ..decided to smash the bottle/pulled the cork out./ ..took the paper
it from the shards of glass carefully/took out the paper from inside the bottle.
what he did
Paragraph describe the ...paper: ..discoloured, rolled, smell of sea water – too long being under the see before
s 2 & 3: paper wave swept the bottle to the beach./ ..unrolled and flattened it./ ..the paper was smooth
what was on albeit old./ …a message written in cursive- reminded him of his late grandfather’s
the paper: a handwriting./ love message /..read: to a woman named Querida. (explain the message)/ …
message at the bottom written: if found please send it to (home address).

what did he …familiar with the address. / ..read again, realised it was his grandmother’s home
decide to do address./ ..too many questions-.. at the drop of a hat, he took his bike and hurriedly cycled
describe the to his grandmother’s house./ ..called for his grandmother/ ..she was in her sofa–
situation knitting./ ..showed her the paper./ ..grandmother read – her face lit up- tears ran down her
related to the sunken cheek./ ..eagerly asked who, what./ ..grandmother smiled when replied, ‘I am your
message
gramp’s Querida. (explain relate to the message)
Paragraph his feeling in ...words fail him – how true love between his grandparents could last that long, the bottle
4: the end that was thrown in the see 70 years ago could find its way back, him of all the people had
found it./ ..smiled as he remembered his grandfather’s favourite quote ‘miracles happen to
those who believe in them.’