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exclusionary
good use of
Gilroy here
Good use of
Bentley here
This is a very long paragraph: break it
up a bit more to highlight your points
more clearly.
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paragraph break
Excellent
Arguably,
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wow, great
quote from
Gilroy here
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defuses
good connection
between
language and
setting here
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second-generation
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good historical
detail
good quote
yes, great
observation
Irie
good comment
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Yes, excellent remarks here. Perhaps you could expand on these a
little bit more, but this shows a great understanding of Smith's work
and its relationship to the Black-British canon.
Really wonderful analysis: I like the nuanced focus on sex and masculinity in your
discussion of the Caribbean community in London, and it's a lovely tie-in with the
calypso form.
on
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great comment
on history here!
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writes
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stuff!
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include the title of the journal and the
issue/volume number in which the article
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180364963_CreolisingLondon
GRADEMARK REPORT
Instructor
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This is a truly excellent essay. The focus of the essay is
highly original-- the exploration of Black British identity
in Selvon's The Housing Lark and Smith's White Teeth-
- and the introduction offers an excellent discussion of
Black British identity in relationship to literature, making
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very good use of Gilroy and Bentley to make your
points. The analysis of the texts is fantastic; what
particularly stands out is your ability to weave together
an organic argument that comprises both texts and
offers a series of relevant and illuminating comparisons
between them. I also very much liked the comments on
how the two texts differ in their representations of racial
inequality and the characters' negotiation with their own
identity vis-a-vis an exclusionary white public. You
rightly remark that though things have changed in
Smith's representation, racism and exclusion still
persist, and you demonstrate this through apt close
readings and commentary. The essay really showcases
your impressive abilities at textual analysis, while it
also demonstrates that you have a clear understanding
of relevant critical debates by Hall, Moss, Bhabha and
others. You mobilize theory lightly but very effectively
to underscore your points, and you let the texts
demonstrate these points persuasively. Also excellent
is the way you show that Selvon and Smith are in
dialogue with, and writing back to, a canonical literary
tradition in English. You show how this writing back
parallels the move to deconstruct British identity and re-
imagine a black British identity. This is skilfully and
persuasively done. The essay demonstrates an
excellent understanding of the cultural concepts being
addressed here. Moreover, the extended commentary
on calypso works very well, and you convincingly show
how it forms an integral part of Selvon's narrative
approach to migration and its accompanying politics in
the text. Excellent stuff on creole language in Selvon
too.
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Comment 3
how are you using the word authentic here? I'd be wary of using this word in relationship to a literary
representation, especially a fictional one, which by definition is invented and is the product of an
author's artistic imagination. Selvon's work doesn't really aspire to authenticity in any way...
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Text Comment. This is a very long paragraph: break it up a bit more to highlight your points
more clearly.
Comment 5
Great stuff!
Comment 6
Or perhaps a better word here is "canonical"?
Comment 7
Second-generation, if her mother is Jamaican?
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Comment 9
Perhaps develop this point more fully?
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Comment 12
Great!
Comment 13
Can you expand more fully on this "inclusive idea" of Englishness?
Comment 14
Good
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QM Great stuff!
Great stuff!
Comment 15
Good
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Text Comment. Excellent use of Bhabha here! Well done-- this was a difficult passage to
unpack.
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Comment 17
What do you mean by "counteracts" here?
Comment 18
Great analysis!
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Text Comment. Yes, excellent remarks here. Perhaps you could expand on these a little bit
more, but this shows a great understanding of Smith's work and its relationship to the Black-British
canon.
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Text Comment. Really wonderful analysis: I like the nuanced focus on sex and masculinity in
your discussion of the Caribbean community in London, and it's a lovely tie-in with the calypso form.
Text Comment. on
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Comment 20
Nice connections here
Text Comment. Can you say more about how race intersects with class in this passage?
Text Comment. Perhaps you could reprise your discussion of Bhabha briefly here, to remind
the reader.
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QM Great stuff!
Great stuff!
Comment 22
Yes, important to point this out
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Text Comment. Perhaps you could unpack this quote more fully? Bentley seems to be making
a lot of assumptions about readerships here... one might disagree with his viewpoint
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Comment 23
Excellent
Comment 24
Really great comment!
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QM Great stuff!
Great stuff!
Great stuff!
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Text Comment. Is this a journal article? If so, you need to include the title of the journal and the
issue/volume number in which the article appears.
Comment 27
Do not add the URL to journal articles-- only to exclusively online resources such as newspaper
articles or blog posts.
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