Descriptive Essay

The Universal Studio Day Trip

Qiyan, Cai
The structure/organization of my essay:
The route people take to enter Universal Studios：
Universal Studios' globe logo
Different themes of the park
Gift Shop
Rides that make people feel exciting
Butterbeer
Dinner and exit

One topic sentence for each paragraph

1. All visitors to Universal Studios feel a sense of excitement and

exhilaration as they enter the grounds decorated with movie props.
2. At Universal Studios, people can choose a specific theme park based
on their movie preferences.
3. Exciting entertainment facilities help people vent the stress of life.
4. One was leaning across the carriage, not shouting at all, but instead
carrying on with a repulsive tone.
5. Butterbeer is one of the most famous symbols of Universal Studios.

6. Departing from the park, the guests continued to feel joyful and hopeful
as they witnessed the exit’s chiseled words which reassures “The
Adventure will Never End."

Revised Essay
A world that is brighter than the ground arises above as a wavering circle of yellow

light emanates from the surface. QA structure that is designed to look like the planet

Earth emerges from the shadows. The words “Universal Studios” adorned the rough

exterior of this globe. All visitors to Universal Studios feel a sense of excitement and

exhilaration as they enter the grounds decorated with movie props.

In the beginning, people entereds the park by going through its uniquely fence-lined,

but nostalgically lighted exterior gates. Visitors would hears a loud scream as they

moved through the open countryside and noticed that the Hulk's roaring green

rollercoaster was not far above them, moving like a bullet. With an unwaveringly

broad smile on its face, an enormous SpongeBob stood there, cheerfully waving maps

in all directions. At the same time, large signs depicted well-known park characters,

such as Spiderman or Harry Potter, inviting the visitors to join them in their made-up

universes. At Universal Studios, people can choose a specific theme park based on

their movie preferences.

Look ahead, a child and his mother passed a gift shop while the child was sporting a

Popeye's Sailor hat. He noticed a machine that was dispensing an oval steel coin

featuring the park's well-known mascot Woody the Woodpecker winking slyly. The

youngster shook his mother's arm constantly as if it were chained with only two

quarters as the key. The mother gave up her bail, the child received his award, and
they moved on to explore the park's other attractions. Exciting entertainment facilities

help people vent the stress of life.

The park's rides and attractions stood restlessly as noises whirled around them

incessantly. Individuals tumbled twenty feet down a steep ramp while screaming. A

large air wave pushed back on the passenger to counteract the roaring pace which

gave the impression that time was moving forward. The cart trembleds with

excitement as it sensed the ride was immense force. Unfortunately, the rider was

pushed toward the "cushion" of the safety harness by the tremors. Some screamed till

their stomach gave in and their lungs gave out, pleading for the anguish to end. To

increase the ecstatic adrenaline that was there, the majority screamed with a "woo"

sound. One was leaning across the carriage, not shouting at all, but instead carrying

on with a repulsive tone.

A man who hads worked all day pursued the alluring aroma of the butterbeer stand.

He trieds to take a swallow from the back of the line as he watcheds others enjoy the

beverage out of desperate envy, but all that came out was a painfully dry sharpness

that slide down his throat. The man chugged the drink like a cascade overcoming a

desert after paying a well-worth $5.50. What comes next was a delectable

combination of freshness and sweetness from the root beer and butterscotch mixture.

Butterbeer is one of the most famous symbols of Universal Studios.

As night approacheds, the adventure met its end with a strong climax, as the darkness

complimenteds the neon glow of the rides and filled guests with further excitement as

they dived into the shadowy unknown. Bellies started to jumble and moan for dinner

as the attractive aromas of more restaurants began to open. Families chomped down

their warm juicy burgers reflecting and laughing over their crazy day. Departing from

the park, the guests continued to feel joyful and hopeful as they witnessed the exit’s

chiseled words which reassures “The Adventure will Never End."

Draft

A world that is brighter than the ground arises above as a wavering circle of yellow

light emanates from the surface. QA structure that is designed to look like the planet

Earth emerges from the shadows. The words “Universal Studios” adorned the rough

exterior of this globe. All visitors to Universal Studios feel a sense of excitement and

exhilaration as they enter the grounds decorated with movie props.

In the beginning, people entered the park by going through its uniquely fence-lined,

but nostalgically lighted exterior gates. Visitors would hear a loud scream as they

moved through the open countryside and noticed that the Hulk's roaring green

rollercoaster was not far above them, moving like a bullet. With an unwaveringly

broad smile on its face, an enormous SpongeBob stood there, cheerfully waving maps
in all directions. At the same time, large signs depicted well-known park characters,

such as Spiderman or Harry Potter, inviting the visitors to join them in their made-up

universes.

A child and his mother passed a gift shop while the child was sporting a Popeye's

Sailor hat. He noticed a machine that was dispensing an oval steel coin featuring the

park's well-known mascot Woody the Woodpecker winking slyly. The youngster

shook his mother's arm constantly, as if it were chained with only two quarters as the

key. The mother gave up her bail, the child received his award, and they moved on to

explore the park's other attractions.

The park's rides and attractions stood restlessly as noises whirled around them

incessantly. Individuals tumbled twenty feet down a steep ramp while screaming. A

large air wave pushed back on the passenger to counteract the roaring pace which

gave the impression that time was moving forward. The cart trembled with excitement

as it sensed the ride's immense force. Unfortunately, the rider was pushed toward the

"cushion" of the safety harness by the tremors. Some screamed till their stomach gave

in and their lungs gave out, pleading for the anguish to end. To increase the ecstatic

adrenaline that was there, the majority screamed with a "woo" sound. One was

leaning across the carriage, not shouting at all, but instead carrying on with a

repulsive tone.

A man who had worked all day pursued the alluring aroma of the butterbeer stand. He

tried to take a swallow from the back of the line as he watched others enjoy the
beverage out of desperate envy, but all that came out was a painfully dry sharpness

that slided down his throat. The man chugged the drink like a cascade overcoming a

desert after paying a well worth $5.50. What comes next was a delectable

combination of freshness and sweetness from the root beer and butterscotch mixture.

As night approached, the adventure met its end with a strong climax, as the darkness

complimented the neon glow of the rides and filled guests with further excitement as

they dived into the shadowy unknown. Bellies started to jumble and moan for dinner

as the attractive aromas of more restaurants began to open. Families chomped down

their warm juicy burgers reflecting and laughing over their crazy day. Departing from

the park, the guests continued to feel joyful and hopeful as they witnessed the exit’s

chiseled words which reassures “The Adventure will Never End.”