10-A.I.

Environment 30th August, 2023

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Original Text:
I took care of my physical environment some years ago. The idea dawned on me by
chance, but later on I developed it thoroughly.
On the south part of my home, there was a nice porch which now is a beautiful
veranda. There is plenty of light, 'cause three out four walls are entirely made of
glass. I love so much the luminosity of this space of mine! Furthermore, the outside
view is outstanding to me. I can admire my garden which I planned myself; I chose
all the trees, the flowering bushes, the evergreen (and deciduous) shrubs, (and with
deciduous leaves ones=no), and last but not least a wide range of roses. I have a soft
spot for a bed of Japanese maples. Over time, some azaleas and rhododendrons are
gone. After all, I had them planted more than thirty years ago. My garden is really
lush; it is a joy for my eyes.
The furniture has been made tailored to my taste and for my usage.
I spent both a lot of time and a lot of money to have all this done, but absolutely it is
worth it. The result is great!!! What a pity that I hadn't done it a decade ago.
Anyway, there is always something to do to improve. I think that I'm going to put up
a picture of a city from the U.K. or the U.S.A. This will remind me of my own
commitment to be fluent in the English language within three years from now.
Among my friends and acquaintances, just a very few speak English, none among my
relatives but my sons. I have frequently encouraged and motivated them to learn
English. They enjoy playing video games, and thanks to their knowledge of the
English language, they play online with people from every corner of the world,
literally from every corner!! They also often watch videos on YouTube and so on.
That's it.
Corrected Text:

I took care of my physical environment some years ago. The idea dawned on me by
chance, but later on, I developed it thoroughly.
On the southern part of my home, there was a nice porch which now is a beautiful
veranda. There is plenty of light because three out of four walls are entirely made of
glass. I love the luminosity of this space of mine so much! Furthermore, the outside
view is outstanding to me. I can admire my garden which I planned myself; I chose
all the trees, the flowering bushes, the evergreen shrubs, and, not least, a wide
range of roses. I have a soft spot for a bed of Japanese maples. Over time, some
azaleas and rhododendrons have disappeared. After all, I had planted them more
than thirty years ago. My garden is truly lush; it brings me joy.
The furniture has been tailor-made to my taste and for my usage.
I spent both a lot of time and a lot of money to have all this done, but it's absolutely
worth it. The result is fantastic!!! What a pity that I hadn't done it a decade ago.
Anyway, there is always something to do to improve. I think that I'm going to put up
a picture of a city from the U.K. or the U.S.A. This will remind me of my own
commitment to be fluent in the English language within three years from now.
Among my friends and acquaintances, very few speak English, none among my
relatives but my sons do. I have frequently encouraged and motivated them to learn
English. They enjoy playing video games, and thanks to their knowledge of the
English language, they play online with people from every corner of the world,
literally from every corner!! They also often watch videos on YouTube and so on.
That's it.

Explanation of Mistakes:

On the south part: It should be "On the southern part" to correctly describe the
location.
'Cause: In formal writing, it's better to use "because" instead of the informal "
'cause."
Three, out four walls: It should be "three out of four walls" to indicate a fraction of
walls.
I love so much the luminosity: The correct structure is "I love the luminosity so
much."
Not least: The correct phrase is "not least" to indicate that the roses are an
important part.
Azaleas and rhododendrons are gone: It should be "azaleas and rhododendrons
have disappeared" for proper tense usage.
Furniture have been made: It should be "The furniture has been" as "furniture" is
treated as a singular noun.
It is worth it: Instead of "it is," you can use "it's" for a more informal tone.
Result is great: Adding an exclamation mark is sufficient. No need for multiple
exclamation marks.
None among my relatives but my sons: It should be "none among my relatives
except my sons" for clarity.
Every corner of the world, literally of every corner: You can simplify this to "from
every corner of the world."
Video on you tube: It should be "videos on YouTube" with proper capitalization.
Thanks to the knowledge of English language: Instead of "thanks to the knowledge
of English language," you can say "thanks to their knowledge of the English
language."
Watch video on you tube: Similar to the previous point, it should be "watch videos
on YouTube."
Your composition is already quite descriptive and engaging! Now, here's my
composition on the same theme:

My Ideal Haven
In the course of time, I took deliberate steps to transform my physical environment
into an oasis of serenity. The spark of this idea kindled unexpectedly, but as time
flowed by, I meticulously nurtured it to fruition.
On the southern facet of my dwelling, a charming porch has evolved into an
exquisite veranda. Abundant light streams in through walls adorned predominantly
with glass panels. The brilliance of this space never fails to captivate me. Beyond,
the panoramic vista unfurls in all its glory. Here, I gaze upon my meticulously
designed garden—where trees of my choosing stand tall, flowering bushes bloom
with vibrancy, and a variety of evergreen and deciduous shrubs coexist
harmoniously. Notably, a tapestry of roses graces a corner, but my heart holds a
special affinity for the bed of Japanese maples. Over time, the garden has witnessed
transformations; azaleas and rhododendrons, having stood for decades, have
gracefully faded away. Yet, the verdant splendor remains an ever-present delight to
my eyes.

The furniture, an embodiment of my preferences and needs, stands as a testament

to bespoke craftsmanship. This endeavor demanded both considerable time and
financial investment. Nevertheless, the outcome stands as a testament to its
worthiness. What a lamentable thought that I did not embark upon this journey a
decade earlier. Nonetheless the quest for improvement remains ceaseless. Soon, I
contemplate adorning a wall with an image portraying the urban landscape of either
the United Kingdom or the United States. A constant reminder of my personal
commitment to achieving fluency in the English language within the next three
years.

Among my circle, fluency in English remains a rarity. No members of my kin, save for
my sons, share this linguistic pursuit. I have consistently offered encouragement and
motivation to them. Their penchant for online gaming has seamlessly merged with
their language learning journey, allowing them to interact globally with an array of
individuals. These virtual connections span every corner of the world, a testament to
the unifying power of language. Additionally, they avidly consume content on
platforms like YouTube, further enriching their linguistic exposure. Such is the
tapestry of my environment—an interconnected realm of personal growth and
linguistic aspirations.