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Samantha Gonzalez
ENC1101-23Fall0024
25 November 2023
Response Letter
Dear Sam,
Thank you for providing me with feedback on Major Assignment Two. Seeing the suggestions
and comments you gave me was refreshing because although this essay scored well, you did not
claim that it was perfect. I knew it was not perfect as I was writing it. In addition to reviewing
your feedback, I also reviewed feedback from a peer on my first draft. After reading through
your comments, as well as my peers, I have made significant changes regarding my introduction,
The purpose of Major Assignment Two was to provide literary artifacts that I have produced
recently and evaluate the effectiveness of the artifacts using social actors and genres. Although I
understood the prompt of this paper from the start, I struggled immensely with this paper. I
switched my artifacts and framework twice before finding the best ones for me to use effectively.
My first draft opened with a long, satirical story about why I don’t listen to music before it
suddenly shifted to my experience as a graphic designer. Although my peer enjoyed the story and
thought it was hilarious, she asked me “Why did you start with music if your essay is about
graphic design?” Honestly, there was no real reason behind adding the story other than for
humor. This comment was hard to take in because the introduction was my favorite part of the
essay and I didn’t want to get rid of it. However, I am grateful for her comment because it
Samantha Gonzalez
ENC1101-23Fall0024
25 November 2023
From her feedback, I wrote a couple of introductions, none of them about music. Having to
rewrite the introduction felt like it was setting me back a little, but in the end, I am glad I did.
After revising, my introduction invites the audience to think how common it is for people to have
a strong fascination with something (like a television show or hobby) and it eventually evolves to
Children's bedrooms are often themed around something stereotypical, like mermaids, racecars,
princesses, or rockets and space. Personally, my media consumption is low, so I find it hard to
answer with a specific title to questions like “What’s your favorite movie?”. Although I don’t
have specific titles, I have specific genres that I enjoy in media like science fiction, true crime,
historical, and fantasy…Even though I do not have much free time, I love spending it doing
The original introduction that I had was entertaining, but it didn’t respond to the prompt. From
this revision, it is clear to see that it introduces the main ideas, genres, and graphic design, sooner
and more effectively. The introduction is no longer misleading, nor is it unnecessary. In fact,
One of the hardest parts of this paper was writing a thesis. I had a conference with my instructor,
in which they informed me that I had forgotten to include a thesis. I made note of this and
cleaned up my main ideas, but still struggled to write a clear thesis statement. My instructor
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Samantha Gonzalez
ENC1101-23Fall0024
25 November 2023
commented on this, informing me that they liked my introduction, but it was still missing a thesis
statement.
I have created and revised a thesis statement according to this feedback. It reads, “The varieties
of graphic design, and graphic design itself, have a clear pattern in the way they are created,
contributing to the rhetorical moves that make each final productive uniquely effective.” Not
only did I write a clear thesis, but I also introduced that my artifacts were graphic design, and
conveyed that I will be analyzing the patterns in genres to prove this. I also included the idea of
rhetorical moves, and how the product’s effectiveness is dependent on them in the end.
The last piece of feedback I received was concerning my title. Because I struggled with this
paper so much, the title was the least of my worries. This led me to come up with a very simple
title, “Genre Analysis of Socio-Cultural Practices.” I know that titles are supposed to be eye-
catching, but this one is not. After some brainstorming, it currently reads, “The Hidden Genres in
Graphic Design”. I included the word “hidden” because even as someone who has been doing
graphic design for years, I have never realized the patterns in graphic design, and the specific
Although my comprehension of the prompts was not a struggle for Major Assignment Two, I
made several changes including my introduction, thesis, and title. By using valuable feedback
from my professor, and some from a peer, I revised my paper to sound more confident and be
Samantha Gonzalez
ENC1101-23Fall0024
25 November 2023
Savannah Jackson