My favourite animal

My favourite animal is the horse.

Firstly,I want to tell you where
does the horses live.?
1. Domesticated by people’s horses
are live living in stables, and are
being ridden by people.
2.Some of the not domesticated horses
are live living on in farms and are
used to help with farm work.
3.some wild of the horses live are
living in grassland prairies.
Secondly, I want to tell you
about the behavior of the horses.
1. When Ma Ping is standing and
resting, he often takes turns to rest
one back foot.
2. Horses lie down and roll when
they are happy outdoors.They first
kneel down with theirits front
legsfoot, then lie down with their
its whole body. When they stand up,
they should stand first and then.
Thirdly I want to tell you why I
like horses very much.
1. They are very lively,naive and
cute.
2. Different horses have different
characters,like different people
person have different characters.We
can study many life Ttruths on the
horse.
That is all about the horse I
know,how about you?

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