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Screenwriting Contest
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Dear WRITER,
Your screenplay, THE SEERS OF TIONLAN, has been reviewed
by ALFIE and was rated #60 on a 1-100 scale.
ORIGINALITY X
PREMISE X
PLOT X
CHARACTERS X
DIALOGUE X
SETTING X
STRUCTURE X
PACING X
THEME X
STYLE X
PROJECT
X
POTENTIAL
The pacing has also suffered from this, and there are a
few particularly long scenes. Varying scene lengths is
important but to allow yourself to intertwine so many
characters and storylines it would be worth being as
efficient as possible with your scenes and not have them
go on longer than needed.
What should be taken into account for a future
project?
There is an interesting premise behind this story it is
just confused under many intertwining narratives and
characters. Try focus on Aaron and his individual story,
at least in a way that establishes his as the A-plot, and
do so early on.
Thank you!