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Eight Ways To Improve Your Writing
Eight Ways To Improve Your Writing
1. Clauses at the beginning of a sentence: good idea, but avoid really long ones.
There is nothing more boring than a series of sentences that all start with the subject of the
sentence:
Instead of: "I train dogs. The animal shelter hires me. I do this every weekend."
Try: "As part of my weekend job at the animal shelter, I train dogs."
While clauses at the beginnings of sentences are great, you can have too much of a
good thing. Avoid really long clauses at the beginning of a sentence:
Instead of: "Every day, as I walk to work and pass the kiosk, where they sell those
delicious chocolate bars, I stop to buy one. "Try: "Every day on my way to work, I stop to
buy one of those delicious chocolate bars that they sell at the kiosk."
Instead of: "It is often the case that mobile phones end up on the lunch trays after the
meal." Try: "Mobile phones often end up on the lunch trays after the meal."
Sentences that start with 'there is..' or 'there are... often have a 'who' or 'which' that
follow. These can be cleaned up as follows: Instead of: "There is this guy at school who
always annoys me." Try: "This guy at school always annoys me."
Instead of: "I have a new job. I enjoy it a lot." Try: "I have a new job, which I enjoy a lot."
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5. Watch out for wordy sentences.
It is good to read and reread your own work. Often times during self-evaluation, you see
sentences that are not clear or 'run on'. Wordy sentences can be cleaned up with
punctuation and parallel constructions (Tip 7).
Instead of: "If everyone in the building were to just clean up their own garbage and if
they just sorted it properly then the recycle man wouldn't have to go through everything,
then we wouldn't have to pay extra fees for this service."
Try: "If everyone in the building disposed of his or her own waste in the proper recycle
bins, then we would not have extra expenses."
Instead of: "The character displays a lot of courage. But she fails to save the day."
Try: "Although the character displays a lot of courage, she fails to save the day."
7. Use parallelisms.
Parallelisms are sentences or phrases that contain parallel syntactical structures. These
usually contain lists of noun phrases or clauses with similar structure. For example: "I
decided not to (1) use PowerPoint, (2) read notecards or (3) memorize a script." Notice how
ideas 1-3 all contain a verb and an object. They all line up nicely in parallel.
Instead of: "I brushed the children's teeth and then I read a book to them. They climbed
under the covers and I tucked them in." Try: "I brushed the children's teeth, read them a
book and tucked them in."
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