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OVERALL BAND SCORE 6.5 6+7+6+7

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WRITING TASK 1

The chart below gives information about USA marriage and divorce rates between
1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years

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Your answer
The charts show how the number of marriages and divorces changed
between 1970 and 2000 in the USA, and a breakdown of the proportion
of four marital status in years 1970 and 2000.

Overall, marriages outnumbered divorces over the 30-year period, and

while the number of the married showed a slight decrease over the
period given, that of divorced remained at around 1 million. In terms of
the specific marital status, the proportion of the divorced and those who
never got married rose, while those of the married and the widowed
witnessed a decrease.

Turing first to the number of marriages and divorces, 2.5 millions

Americans were married in 1970, and this figure remained the same till
1980, after which it showed a slight fall, decreasing to 2 million at the
end of the period. The number of divorces, on the other hand, showed a
growth pattern from 1 million to just under 1.5 million between 1970
and 1980, after which it fell modestly back to the 1970 figure in 2000.

As far as the marital status are concerned, those who never got married
and the divorced rose, with the proportion for the former rising from
around 15% to 20%, and the latter from almost a negligible amount to
just under 10%. In contrast, the proportion of the married and witnessed
a fall, from 70% to almost 60%, while that of the widowed stayed at
around 9%.

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OVERALL BAND SCORE 6.5 6+7+6+7

TA – Task Achievement nb – GRA and LR errors have not been
corrected

Band score 6
There’s some incorrect information in the overview– note my
corrections. To persuade the examiner that your overview is clear, it
shouldn’t have any inaccuracies. This limits your score to 6 for TA as you
need a clear overview for a band score 7.

Information is summarised accurately.

Your use of the married / the divorced is a distraction and not really
natural.
You would get a 7 if your overview were clear.

The charts show how the number of marriages and divorces changed
between 1970 and 2000 in the USA, and a breakdown of the proportion
of four marital status in years 1970 and 2000.

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Overall, marriages outnumbered divorces over the 30-year period, and

while the number of the married marriages showed a slight decrease
over the period given, that of divorced divorces remained at around 1
million. In terms of the specific marital status, the proportion of the
divorced and those who never got married rose, while those of the
married and the widowed witnessed a decrease.
Turing first to the number of marriages and divorces, 2.5 millions
Americans were got married in 1970, and this figure remained the same
till 1980, after which it showed a slight fall, decreasing to 2 million at the
end of the period. The number of divorces, on the other hand, showed a
growth pattern from 1 million to just under 1.5 million between 1970
and 1980, after which it fell modestly back to the 1970 figure in 2000.
As far as the marital status are concerned, those who never got married
and the divorced rose, with the proportion for the former rising from
around 15% to 20%, and the latter from almost a negligible amount to
just under 10%. In contrast, the proportion of the married and witnessed
a fall, from 70% to almost 60%, while that of the widowed stayed at
around 9%.

C&C - Cohesion and Coherence nb GRA and LR errors have not been
corrected

Band score 7
The organisation is good.
There is clear progression throughout.

There is some good use of cohesive devices and referencing, with a few
errors and missed opportunities which limit your score to 7 for C&C.

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The charts show how the number of marriages and divorces changed
between 1970 and 2000 in the USA, and with a breakdown of the
proportion of four marital status in years 1970 and 2000.

Overall, marriages outnumbered divorces over the 30-year period, and

while the number of the married showed a slight decrease over the
period given, that of divorced remained at around 1 million. In terms of
the specific marital status, the proportion of the divorced and those who
never got married rose, while those of the married and the widowed
witnessed a decrease.

Turing first to the number of marriages and divorces, 2.5 millions

Americans were married in 1970, and this figure remained the same till
until 1980, after which it showed a slight fall, decreasing to 2 million at
the end of the period. The number of divorces, on the other hand,
showed a growth pattern from 1 million to just under 1.5 million
between 1970 and 1980, after which it fell modestly back to the 1970
figure in 2000.

As far as the marital status are concerned, the proportions of both those
who never got married and the those who were divorced rose, with the
proportion for the former rising from around 15% to 20%, and the latter
from almost a negligible amount to just under 10%. In contrast, the
proportion of the married and witnessed a fall, from 70% to almost 60%,
while that of the widowed stayed at around 9%.

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LR- - Lexical resource nb Some GRA errors have not been corrected.
Band score 6

The vocabulary used is adequate, but there is not enough accuracy for a
higher score.
Attempts to use higher level vocabulary result in more frequent errors,
but the meaning is generally clear.

The charts show how the number numbers of marriages and divorces
changed between 1970 and 2000 in the USA, and with a breakdown of
the proportion people in of four marital status statuses in years 1970
and 2000.
Overall, marriages outnumbered divorces over the 30-year period, and
while the number of the married marriages showed a slight decrease
over the period given, that of divorced divorces remained at around 1
million. In terms of the specific marital statusstatuses, the proportion of
the divorced divorcees and of those who never got married rose, while
those of the married people and the widowed widows witnessed a
decrease.
Turing first to the number of marriages and divorces, 2.5 millions million
Americans were got married in 1970, and this figure remained the same
till until 1980, after which it showed a slight fall, decreasing to 2 million
at the end of the period. The number of divorces, on the other hand,
showed a growth pattern from 1 million to just under 1.5 million

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between 1970 and 1980, after which it fell modestly back to the 1970
figure in 2000.
As far as the marital status statuses are concerned, those who never got
married and the divorced rose, with the proportion for the former rising
from around 15% to 20%, and the latter from almost a negligible amount
to just under 10%. In contrast, the proportion of the married people and
witnessed a fall, from 70% to almost 60%, while that of the widowed
widows stayed at around 9%.

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GRA - Grammatical range and accuracy nb Some LR errors have not

been corrected

Band score 7
There is a range of complex structures with sufficient accuracy to get a
band score 7. Be careful with tenses.
You need a higher level of accuracy for an 8 for GRA.
Many errors are penalised under C&C and LR.

GRAMMATICAL STRUCTURES YOU COULD USE IN DIFFERENT TYPES OF TASK 1

QUESTION – NOT NECESSARILY IN THIS ONE

If you want to write

The percentage of unemployment was 5%
The proportion of unemployment was 5%
you need to rephrase:
Unemployment stood at 5%
Around 5% of the workforce was unemployed
the past perfect […] by 1990 numbers had reached 20 million
participle phrases […], ending the period at this level.

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grouping (A) With regard to food and drink, including

tobacco products, 30% of expenditure in both
Two or more features
Ireland and Turkey went on these products,
can be grouped
while the figures for Italy, Spain, and
together
Sweden stood at between 15% and 19%.
Grouping (B) With regard to shipping goods by water and
rail, both fluctuated throughout the 28 year
period, although the former ended with a rise
of around 30%, and the latter finished the
period close to its starting level of 40 MTA
preposition + gerund […] , with x million passengers using it every
year.
preposition + gerund […] , with 100 grams per week being
(passive) consumed by the typical person in this
country […]
Inversion Only later did passenger numbers recover to
[…]
Grammar in use Advanced 99-100

The charts show how the number of marriages and divorces changed
between 1970 and 2000 in the USA, and with a breakdown of the
proportion of four marital status in the years 1970 and 2000.

Overall, marriages outnumbered divorces over the 30-year period, and

while the number of the married showed a slight decrease over the
period given, that of divorced remained at around 1 million. In terms of
the specific marital status, the proportion of the divorced and those who
never got married rose, while those of the married and the widowed
witnessed a decrease.

Turing first to the number of marriages and divorces, 2.5 millions

Americans were married in 1970, and this figure remained the same till
1980, after which it showed a slight fall, decreasing to 2 million at the
end of the period. The number of divorces, on the other hand, showed a

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growth pattern from 1 million to just under 1.5 million between 1970
and 1980, after which it fell modestly back to the 1970 figure in 2000.

As far as the marital status are concerned, those who never got married
and the divorced rose, with the proportion for the former rising from
around 15% to 20%, and the latter from almost a negligible amount to
just under 10%. In contrast, the proportion of the married and witnessed
a fall, from 70% to almost 60%, while that of the widowed stayed at
around 9%.

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Model Answer

None available for the one you did

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