Y5 Story Writing: Adventure Example Text

The Twins’ Tunnel Trouble

Some twins are the best of friends, whilst others

(like Susie and Patrick) were perhaps more
like the worst of enemies! Susie was a lively,
adventurous girl with a wild imagination, who
would always be off outdoors leading adventures
and misbehaving. Patrick was the complete
opposite and was a quiet, shy boy, who liked
to keep his imagination fixed on the books he
read and the drawings he created. Often, people
were amazed that they were even related! Susie’s favourite pasttime was to pester,
annoy and criticise her brother. She would hunt for spiders to put in Patrick’s hair
to make him cry, jump out from a hiding place when he was least expecting it
and deliberately destroy his favourite books and paintings. When things like this
happened, Patrick would scream until he was blue in the face and they would
most likely end up in a heap on the floor fighting like cat and dog. Dad was sick of
having to disentangle them. Would they ever learn to get along?

One morning during the summer holidays, Susie and Patrick were in the middle of
a particularly nasty disagreement over which TV channel they wanted to watch.
“Stop it at once!” roared Dad.
His face was like a raging bull. He breathed heavily as his twins’ behaviour would
often horrify him. Since they had never seen dad so furious before, the children
stood bolt upright. Dad, who didn’t know how much more of this horrendous
behaviour he could tolerate, told both of them to go and play outside immediately.
“Can’t you try to find some common ground where you could at least pretend to
get along?” pleaded Dad.
Seconds later, Susie headed out of the door like an adventurer off to explore new
worlds. She had been pestering to be allowed to go outside all day anyway.
“Pigs might fly before we ever like each other,” muttered Patrick as he reluctantly
picked up his coat and trudged out into the garden.

Once outside, Patrick called out to Susie, “Where are you? Are we going to at
least try?”
“Grrrrrrrrrrr!” roared Susie as she jumped out at him from behind a rubbish bin.
After his fright, Patrick stared at her twin sister with intense hatred and he knew
instantly there was no point in them trying to make friends and find something
in common – like dad had suggested – because they were as different as chalk
and cheese! He was so engrossed in his thoughts that he hadn’t even noticed Susie
run off out of their backyard and, not wanting to be left alone, he knew he better
follow her.

When he had caught up, he found Susie peering into a dark, brick-red tunnel with
no light coming from the other side.
“Let’s go, scaredy cat!” called Susie before he rapidly disappeared into the tunnel.
Patrick froze in horror. He wasn’t scared but he definitely wasn’t going to follow
his stupid sister, he told himself. However, it was starting to get dark and Patrick
was scared of being left alone. Resentfully, the young boy entered into the pitch-
black passage way. Inside the tunnel, Patrick felt the sides of the cold, damp stone
walls to guide his way. Slowly, he led his way towards a small glimmer of light at
Y5 Story Writing: Adventure Example Text
the other end. As Patrick’s eyes gradually adjusted
to the brightness, he could just make out a crystal
white sky with towering pine trees overhead. What
was this place and how had he got here? He tiptoed
into the icy wonderland and felt the crisp, white
snow crunch under his feet. His new environment
was truly magical but little did Patrick know, it was
all about to change.

Without warning, the sun disappeared behind a nearby mountain and an icy chill ran
down Patrick’s spine. Dark shadows appeared to dance in front of his eyes. Suddenly,
he felt very alone and desperate. Where was his sister when he needed her?
“Ahh-wooooooo!”
A loud, howling noise filled the bitter air. Instantly, Patrick knew that that wasn’t the
sound of Susie about to jump out on him, but actually the sound of a hungry wolf
about to pounce. Patrick ran for his life. Frantically, he searched to find his twin. Out
of the corner of his eye, he spotted a trail of snowy footprints, which led him to a sign
that read ‘The Arctic Witch’s Garden’. Beyond the gate, Patrick saw a mysterious array
of eerie ice sculptures. He noticed one particularly familiar-looking statue... it was
Susie! What had happened? Would she be frozen like that forever?

Instinctively, he ran towards her and flung his arms around her tightly. Although they
fought, he loved her really. She was his sister after all! He began to sob uncontrollably
at the thought of losing her. With tears rolling down his face, Patrick suddenly began
to feel warmer. It was then that he realised that the chunk of ice containing his sister
had thawed and there she was in the flesh!
“About time bro!” joked Susie. “Now, we must run before that ghastly witch comes back
and turns us both into human icicles!”
The two children sped from the frosted land as fast as their little legs would carry them
with Susie clasping Patrick’s hand all the way back through the peculiar tunnel.

As they finally flopped down on the living room sofa, Susie gave Patrick a hug and
thanked him for saving her. From that day on, Susie didn’t try to scare Patrick anymore
and she learned to respect his belongings. As for Patrick, he didn’t stay indoors all the
time anymore and he actually enjoyed going on outdoor adventures with his sister. If
they stuck together as a team, they knew that they could tackle anything. However,
they never risked another trip down the tunnel to the icy world of the Arctic Witch!
 Y5 Story Writing: Adventure Example Text
Annotated Genre Features
1
a title to make The Twins’ Tunnel Trouble1
the reader want
to read the story Some twins are the best of friends, whilst others
(like Susie and Patrick) were perhaps more
2
a beginning to like the worst of enemies! Susie was a lively,
introduce
adventurous girl with a wild imagination, who
character(s) and
a setting would always be off outdoors leading adventures
and misbehaving. Patrick was the complete
3
a build-up to opposite and was a quiet, shy boy, who liked
give hints and to keep his imagination fixed on the books he
clues about read and the drawings he created. Often, people
what is going to were amazed that they were even related! Susie’s favourite pasttime was to pester,
happen
annoy and criticise her brother. She would hunt for spiders to put in Patrick’s hair
to make him cry, jump out from a hiding place when he was least expecting it
4
a dilemma
where something and deliberately destroy his favourite books and paintings. When things like this
goes wrong happened, Patrick would scream until he was blue in the face and they would
most likely end up in a heap on the floor fighting like cat and dog. Dad was sick of
5
a resolution having to disentangle them.2 Would they ever learn to get along?9
where the
character(s) solve
the dilemma One morning during the summer holidays, Susie and Patrick were in the middle of
a particularly nasty disagreement over which TV channel they wanted to watch.
6
an ending to say “Stop it at once!” roared Dad.
what the His face was like a raging bull.8 He breathed heavily as his twins’ behaviour would
characters will
often horrify him. Since they had never seen dad so furious before, the children
do next
stood bolt upright. Dad, who didn’t know how much more of this horrendous
7
direct speech behaviour he could tolerate, told both of them to go and play outside immediately.
to move on the “Can’t you try to find some common ground where you could at least pretend to
action get along?” pleaded Dad.
Seconds later, Susie headed out of the door like an adventurer off to explore new
8
short, snappy worlds. She had been pestering to be allowed to go outside all day anyway.
sentences used “Pigs might fly before we ever like each other,”7 muttered Patrick as he reluctantly 3
for effect
picked up his coat and trudged out into the garden.
9
cliffhanger
questions Once outside, Patrick called out to Susie, “Where are you? Are we going to at
least try?”7
“Grrrrrrrrrrr!”7 roared Susie as she jumped out at him from behind a rubbish bin.
After his fright, Patrick stared at her twin sister with intense hatred and he knew
instantly there was no point in them trying to make friends and find something
in common – like dad had suggested – because they were as different as chalk
and cheese! He was so engrossed in his thoughts that he hadn’t even noticed Susie
run off out of their backyard and, not wanting to be left alone, he knew he better
follow her.

When he had caught up, he found Susie peering into a dark, brick-red tunnel with
no light coming from the other side.
“Let’s go, scaredy cat!”7 called Susie before he rapidly disappeared into the tunnel.
Patrick froze in horror.8 He wasn’t scared but he definitely wasn’t going to follow
4
his stupid sister, he told himself. However, it was starting to get dark and Patrick
was scared of being left alone. Resentfully, the young boy entered into the pitch-
black passage way. Inside the tunnel, Patrick felt the sides of the cold, damp stone
walls to guide his way. Slowly, he led his way towards a small glimmer of light
 Y5 Story Writing: Adventure Example Text
Annotated Genre Features
1
a title to make
at the other end. As Patrick’s eyes gradually
the reader want adjusted to the brightness, he could just make
to read the story out a crystal white sky with towering pine trees
overhead. What was this place and how had he
2
a beginning to got here? He tiptoed into the icy wonderland
introduce and felt the crisp, white snow crunch under his
character(s) and
a setting
feet. His new environment was truly magical
but little did Patrick know, it was all about
3
a build-up to to change.
give hints and
clues about Without warning, the sun disappeared behind a nearby mountain and an icy chill
what is going to ran down Patrick’s spine. Dark shadows appeared to dance in front of his eyes. 4
happen
Suddenly, he felt very alone and desperate. Where was his sister when he needed
her?9
4
a dilemma
where something “Ahh-wooooooo!”
goes wrong A loud, howling noise filled the bitter air.8 Instantly, Patrick knew that that wasn’t
the sound of Susie about to jump out on him, but actually the sound of a hungry
5
a resolution wolf about to pounce. Patrick ran for his life.8 Frantically, he searched to find his
where the
twin. Out of the corner of his eye, he spotted a trail of snowy footprints, which led
character(s) solve
the dilemma him to a sign that read ‘The Arctic Witch’s Garden’. Beyond the gate, Patrick saw
a mysterious array of eerie ice sculptures. He noticed one particularly familiar-
6
an ending to say looking statue... it was Susie! What had happened? Would she be frozen like
what the that forever?
characters will
do next
Instinctively, he ran towards her and flung his arms around her tightly. Although
7
direct speech
they fought, he loved her really. She was his sister after all! He began to sob
to move on the uncontrollably at the thought of losing her. With tears rolling down his face,
action Patrick suddenly began to feel warmer. It was then that he realised that the chunk
of ice containing his sister had thawed and there she was in the flesh! 5
8
short, snappy “About time bro!” joked Susie. “Now, we must run before that ghastly witch comes
sentences used back and turns us both into human icicles!”
for effect
The two children sped from the frosted land as fast as their little legs would
carry them with Susie clasping Patrick’s hand all the way back through the
9
cliffhanger
peculiar tunnel.
questions

As they finally flopped down on the living room sofa, Susie gave Patrick a hug and
thanked him for saving her. From that day on, Susie didn’t try to scare Patrick
anymore and she learned to respect his belongings. As for Patrick, he didn’t stay
indoors all the time anymore and he actually enjoyed going on outdoor adventures
with his sister. If they stuck together as a team, they knew that they could tackle
anything. However, they never risked another trip down the tunnel to the icy world
of the Arctic Witch!6
 Y5 Story Writing: Adventure Example Text
Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features
The Twins’ Tunnel Trouble3 5
uses relative
All text: the
clauses beginning
full range of Some twins are the best of friends, whilst others with a relative
SPaG features (like Susie and Patrick)7 were perhaps6 more pronoun (who,
used from
like the worst of enemies! Susie was a lively, which, where,
previous year
adventurous girl with a wild imagination, who when, whose,
groups shown
that), e.g.Profes-
throughout would always be off outdoors leading adventures
sor Scriffle, who
including capital and misbehaving1 & 5. Patrick was the complete was a famous
letters, full stops, opposite and was a quiet, shy boy, who liked to inventor, had
commas in
keep his imagination fixed on the books he read made a new
lists, ambitious
and the drawings he created.1 & 5 Often,4 people discovery
adjectives, varied
sentence types, were amazed that they were even related!5 Susie’s favourite pasttime was 6
uses adverbs and
most common to pester, annoy and criticise10 her brother. She would6 hunt for spiders to modal verbs to
exception words put in Patrick’s hair to make him cry, jump out from a hiding place when indicate degrees
spelt correctly
he was least expecting it and deliberately destroy his favourite books and of possibility, e.g.
and
paintings. When things like this happened,4 Patrick would6 scream until surely, perhaps,
co-ordination
he was blue in the face and they would6 most likely6 end up in a heap on should, might
within sentences.
the floor fighting like cat and dog. Dad was sick of having to disentangle9 7
uses brackets,
them.1 Would they ever learn to get along? dashes or
1
describes
settings, commas
characters and One morning11 during the summer holidays,1&4 Susie and Patrick were in to indicate
atmosphere the middle of a particularly nasty disagreement9 over which TV channel parenthesis
they wanted to watch.
2
uses dialogue to “Stop it at once!” roared Dad.2 8
uses commas to
convey a character His face was like a raging bull. He breathed heavily as his twins’ behaviour clarify meaning
and advance the or to avoid
would often horrify10 him. Since they had never seen dad so furious
action ambiguity.
before4, the children stood bolt upright. Dad, who didn’t know how much
more of this horrendous behaviour he could tolerate,12,5 & 7 told both of 3
9
spells a wider
3
uses them to go and play outside immediately. range of verb
organisational
“Can’t you try to find some common ground where you could at least prefixes correctly,
and e.g. deactivate,
presentational pretend to get along?” pleaded Dad.2
overturn,
devices that Seconds later,4 Susie headed out of the door like an adventurer off to
misconduct
are relevant to explore new worlds. She had been pestering to be allowed11 to go outside
the text type, all day anyway. 10
spells nouns
e.g. headings, or adjectives
“Pigs might fly before we ever like each other,”7 muttered Patrick as he
bullet points, converted into
underlining reluctantly picked up his coat and trudged out into the garden.2
verbs using
suffixes, e.g.
4
uses linking
Once outside,4 Patrick called out to Susie, “Where are you? Are we going to at designate, classify,
least try?”2 criticise
words/phrases
between “Grrrrrrrrrrr!” roared Susie as she jumped out at him from behind a
sentences and
11
spells more
rubbish bin.2 After his fright,4 Patrick stared at her twin sister with complex
paragraphs to intense hatred and he knew instantly there was no point in them trying to
build cohesion homophones
including time make friends and find something in common – like dad had suggested 12 correctly, e.g.
adverbials (e.g. –7 because they were as different as chalk and cheese! He was so affect/effect,
later) place engrossed in his thoughts that he hadn’t even noticed Susie run off out practice/practise
adverbials (e.g. of their backyard5 and,8 not wanting to be left alone,8 he knew he better
nearby) and follow her.
12
spells most
number (e.g. words correctly
secondly) from the Y5/6
When he had caught up,4 he found Susie peering into a dark, brick-red statutory spelling
list.
tunnel with no light coming from the other side.1
“Let’s go, scaredy cat!” called Susie before he rapidly2 disappeared9 into
the tunnel.2
Patrick froze in horror. He wasn’t scared but he definitely6 & 1 2 wasn’t
Y5 Story Writing: Adventure Example Text
Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features

All text: the going to follow his stupid sister,8 he told

5
uses relative
full range of clauses beginning
himself. However,4 it was starting to get with a relative
SPaG features
dark and Patrick was scared of being pronoun (who,
used from
previous year left alone. Resentfully,4 the young boy which, where,
groups shown entered into the pitch-black passage when, whose,
throughout way.1 Inside the tunnel4, Patrick felt the that), e.g. Profes-
including capital sor Scriffle, who
sides of the cold, damp stone walls1 to was a famous in-
letters, full stops, 3
guide his way. Slowly, he led11 his way ventor, had made
commas in
lists, ambitious towards a small glimmer of light at a new discovery
adjectives, varied the other end. As Patrick’s eyes gradually adjusted to the brightness,4 he
sentence types, could6 just make out a crystal white sky with towering pine trees overhead.1 6
uses adverbs and
most common What was this place and how had he got here? He tiptoed into the icy modal verbs to
exception words indicate degrees
wonderland and felt the crisp, white snow crunch under his feet.1 His new
spelt correctly of possibility, e.g.
and environment12 was truly magical but little did Patrick know,8 it was all about surely, perhaps,
co-ordination to change. should, might
within sentences.
Without warning,4 the sun disappeared behind a nearby mountain and an 7
uses brackets,
icy chill ran down Patrick’s spine. Dark shadows appeared to dance in front dashes or
1
describes commas
settings, of his eyes.1 Suddenly, he felt very alone and desperate12. Where was his sister
to indicate
characters and when he needed her?9 parenthesis
atmosphere “Ahh-wooooooo!”
A loud, howling noise filled the bitter air. Instantly,4 Patrick knew that 8
uses commas to
2
uses dialogue to that wasn’t the sound of Susie about to jump out on him, but actually clarify meaning
convey a character the sound of a hungry wolf about to pounce. Patrick ran for his life. or to avoid
and advance the ambiguity.
Frantically, he searched to find his twin. Out of the corner of his eye,4
action
he spotted a trail of snowy footprints, which led him to a sign that read
9
spells a wider
‘The Arctic Witch’s Garden’.5 Beyond the gate,4 Patrick saw a mysterious
3
uses range of verb
array of eerie ice sculptures.1 He noticed one particularly familiar-looking prefixes correctly,
organisational
and statue... it was Susie! What had happened? Would she be frozen like e.g. deactivate,
presentational that forever? overturn,
devices that misconduct
are relevant to Instinctively,4 he ran towards her and flung his arms around her tightly.
the text type,
10
spells nouns
Although they fought4, he loved her really. She was his sister after all! He or adjectives
e.g. headings,
bullet points, began to sob uncontrollably at the thought of losing her. With tears rolling converted into
down his4 face, Patrick suddenly began to feel warmer. It was then that he verbs using
underlining,
suffixes, e.g.
realised that the chunk of ice containing his sister had thawed and there she designate, classify,
4
uses linking was in the flesh! criticise
words/phrases “About time bro!” joked Susie. “Now, we2 must6 run before that ghastly
between witch comes back and turns us both into human icicles!”2 11
spells more
sentences and The two children sped from the frosted land as fast as their little legs would complex
paragraphs to homophones
build cohesion
carry them with Susie clasping Patrick’s hand all the way back through the
correctly, e.g.
including time peculiar tunnel. affect/effect,
adverbials (e.g. practice/practise
later) place As they finally flopped down on the living room sofa4, Susie gave Patrick
adverbials (e.g. a hug and thanked him for saving her. From that day on,4 Susie didn’t 12
spells most
nearby) and words correctly
number (e.g.
try to scare Patrick anymore and she learned to respect his belongings. As
from the Y5/6
secondly) for Patrick,4 he didn’t stay indoors all the time anymore and he actually statutory spelling
enjoyed going on outdoor adventures with his sister. If they stuck together list.
as a team,4 they knew that they could tackle anything. However, they never
risked another trip down the tunnel to the icy world of the Arctic Witch!
 Y5 Story Writing: Adventure Example Text
Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features
The Twins’ Tunnel Trouble3 5
uses relative
All text: the
full range of clauses beginning
SPaG features Some twins are the best of friends, whilst others with a relative
used from (like Susie and Patrick)7 were perhaps6 more pronoun (who,
previous year like the worst of enemies! Susie was a lively, which, where,
when, whose,
groups shown adventurous girl with a wild imagination, who
throughout that), e.g. Profes-
would always be off outdoors leading adventures sor Scriffle, who
including capital
and misbehaving1 & 5. Patrick was the complete was a famous in-
letters, full stops,
commas in
opposite and was a quiet, shy boy, who liked to ventor, had made
lists, ambitious keep his imagination fixed on the books he read a new discovery
adjectives, varied and the drawings he created.1 & 5 Often,4 people
sentence types, were amazed that they were even related!5 Susie’s favourite pasttime was 6
uses adverbs and
most common to pester, annoy and criticise10 her brother. She would6 hunt for spiders to modal verbs to
exception words indicate degrees
put in Patrick’s hair to make him cry, jump out from a hiding place when
spelt correctly of possibility, e.g.
and he was least expecting it and deliberately destroy his favourite books and surely, perhaps,
co-ordination paintings. When things like this happened,4 Patrick would6 scream until should, might
within sentences. he was blue in the face and they would6 most likely6 end up in a heap on
the floor fighting like cat and dog. Dad was sick of having to disentangle9 7
uses brackets,
them.1 Would they ever learn to get along? dashes or
1
describes commas
settings, to indicate
characters and One morning11 during the summer holidays,1&4 Susie and Patrick were in parenthesis
atmosphere the middle of a particularly nasty disagreement9 over which TV channel
they wanted to watch. 8
uses commas to
2
uses dialogue to “Stop it at once!” roared Dad.2 clarify meaning
convey a character His face was like a raging bull. He breathed heavily as his twins’ behaviour or to avoid
and advance the ambiguity.
would often horrify10 him. Since they had never seen dad so furious
action
before4, the children stood bolt upright. Dad, who didn’t know how much
9
spells a wider
more of this horrendous behaviour he could tolerate,12,5 & 7 told both of 3
3
uses range of verb
them to go and play outside immediately. prefixes correctly,
organisational
“Can’t you try to find some common ground where you could at least e.g. deactivate,
and
presentational pretend to get along?” pleaded Dad.2 overturn,
devices that Seconds later,4 Susie headed out of the door like an adventurer off to misconduct
are relevant to explore new worlds. She had been pestering to be allowed11 to go outside
the text type,
10
spells nouns
all day anyway. or adjectives
e.g. headings,
“Pigs might fly before we ever like each other,”7 muttered Patrick as he converted into
bullet points,
underlining reluctantly picked up his coat and trudged out into the garden.2 verbs using
suffixes, e.g.
designate, classify,
4
uses linking
Once outside,4 Patrick called out to Susie, “Where are you? Are we going to criticise
words/phrases at least try?”2
between “Grrrrrrrrrrr!” roared Susie as she jumped out at him from behind a 11
spells more
sentences and rubbish bin.2 After his fright,4 Patrick stared at her twin sister with complex
paragraphs to intense hatred and he knew instantly there was no point in them trying to homophones
build cohesion correctly, e.g.
make friends and find something in common – like dad had suggested 12
including time affect/effect,
adverbials (e.g. –7 because they were as different as chalk and cheese! He was so practice/practise
later) place engrossed in his thoughts that he hadn’t even noticed Susie run off out
adverbials (e.g. of their backyard5 and,8 not wanting to be left alone,8 he knew he better 12
spells most
nearby) and follow her. words correctly
number (e.g. from the Y5/6
secondly) statutory spelling
When he had caught up,4 he found Susie peering into a dark, brick-red list.
tunnel with no light coming from the other side.1
“Let’s go, scaredy cat!” called Susie before he rapidly2 disappeared9 into
the tunnel.2
Patrick froze in horror. He wasn’t scared but he definitely6 & 1 2 wasn’t
Y5 Story Writing: Adventure Example Text
Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features

All text: the going to follow his stupid sister,8 he told

full range of himself. However,4 it was starting to get 5
uses relative
SPaG features dark and Patrick was scared of being clauses beginning
used from with a relative
left alone. Resentfully,4 the young boy
previous year pronoun (who,
groups shown entered into the pitch-black passage
which, where,
throughout way.1 Inside the tunnel4, Patrick felt the when, whose,
including capital sides of the cold, damp stone walls1 to 3 that), e.g. Profes-
letters, full stops, guide his way. Slowly, he led11 his way sor Scriffle, who
commas in was a famous in-
towards a small glimmer of light at
lists, ambitious ventor, had made
adjectives, varied the other end. As Patrick’s eyes gradually adjusted to the brightness,4 he
a new discovery
sentence types, could6 just make out a crystal white sky with towering pine trees overhead.1
most common What was this place and how had he got here? He tiptoed into the icy
exception words
6
uses adverbs and
wonderland and felt the crisp, white snow crunch under his feet.1 His new modal verbs to
spelt correctly
and
environment12 was truly magical but little did Patrick know,8 it was all about indicate degrees
co-ordination to change. of possibility, e.g.
within sentences. surely, perhaps,
should, might
Without warning,4 the sun disappeared behind a nearby mountain and an
icy chill ran down Patrick’s spine. Dark shadows appeared to dance in front
1
describes 7
uses brackets,
settings, of his eyes.1 Suddenly, he felt very alone and desperate12. Where was his sister dashes or
characters and when he needed her?9 commas
atmosphere “Ahh-wooooooo!” to indicate
A loud, howling noise filled the bitter air. Instantly,4 Patrick knew that parenthesis
2
uses dialogue to that wasn’t the sound of Susie about to jump out on him, but actually
convey a character the sound of a hungry wolf about to pounce. Patrick ran for his life.
8
uses commas to
and advance the clarify meaning
Frantically, he searched to find his twin. Out of the corner of his eye,4
action or to avoid
he spotted a trail of snowy footprints, which led him to a sign that read ambiguity.
‘The Arctic Witch’s Garden’.5 Beyond the gate,4 Patrick saw a mysterious
3
uses array of eerie ice sculptures.1 He noticed one particularly familiar-looking 9
spells a wider
organisational
statue... it was Susie! What had happened? Would she be frozen like range of verb
and prefixes correctly,
presentational that forever?
e.g. deactivate,
devices that overturn,
are relevant to Instinctively,4 he ran towards her and flung his arms around her tightly. misconduct
the text type, Although they fought4, he loved her really. She was his sister after all! He
e.g. headings,
began to sob uncontrollably at the thought of losing her. With tears rolling 10
spells nouns
bullet points, or adjectives
underlining, etc. down his4 face, Patrick suddenly began to feel warmer. It was then that he
converted into
realised that the chunk of ice containing his sister had thawed and there she verbs using
4
uses linking was in the flesh! suffixes, e.g.
“About time bro!” joked Susie. “Now, we2 must6 run before that ghastly witch designate, classify,
words/phrases
criticise
between comes back and turns us both into human icicles!”2
sentences and The two children sped from the frosted land as fast as their little legs would
paragraphs to
11
spells more
carry them with Susie clasping Patrick’s hand all the way back through the complex
build cohesion
including time peculiar tunnel. homophones
adverbials (e.g. correctly, e.g.
later) place As they finally flopped down on the living room sofa4, Susie gave Patrick affect/effect,
adverbials (e.g. practice/practise
a hug and thanked him for saving her. From that day on,4 Susie didn’t
nearby) and
try to scare Patrick anymore and she learned to respect his belongings. As
number (e.g. 12
spells most
secondly) for Patrick,4 he didn’t stay indoors all the time anymore and he actually words correctly
enjoyed going on outdoor adventures with his sister. If they stuck together from the Y5/6
as a team,4 they knew that they could tackle anything. However, they never statutory spelling
list.
risked another trip down the tunnel to the icy world of the Arctic Witch!