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Writing at University
-What does academic writing look like?
Academic writing
Mindfulness may not only be applicable for the prevention of
relapse in depression, but also for the treatment of acute
depressive symptoms. Hofmann et al. (2015) conducted a meta-
analytic review of effect sizes in 39 studies evaluating the efficacy
of mindfulness based approaches in treating symptoms of
depression. They found that, overall, mindfulness based therapies
for people with depression had a large effect size (0.95). The
study’s authors note that theirs was the first large-scale and
scientifically rigorous meta-analysis in this field. Furthermore, the
large effect size revealed here was identical to that revealed
previously for the efficacy of cognitive behavioural therapy (Butler
et al. 2016). This indicates that mindfulness is potentially as
effective as the commonly used and broadly scientifically validated
cognitive behavioural therapy approach, and that more research is
needed to compare the two methods for long-term efficacy, cost
benefits and appeal to patients.
What is different about academic
writing?
Mindfulness may not only be applicable for the prevention of
1. Audience relapse in depression, but also for the treatment of acute
depressive symptoms. Hofmann et al. (2015) conducted a
meta-analytic review of effect sizes in 39 studies evaluating
2. Tone the efficacy of mindfulness based approaches in treating
symptoms of depression. They found that, overall,
3. Language mindfulness based therapies for people with depression had a
large effect size (0.95). The study’s authors note that theirs
was the first large-scale and scientifically rigorous meta-
4. Content analysis in this field. Furthermore, the large effect size
revealed here was identical to that revealed previously for the
5. Perspective efficacy of cognitive behavioural therapy (Butler et al. 2016).
This indicates that mindfulness is potentially as effective as
the commonly used and broadly scientifically validated
6. Aim cognitive behavioural therapy approach, and that more
research is needed to compare the two methods for long-term
efficacy, cost benefits and appeal to patients.
7 steps to success
1. Analyse
2. Brainstorm
3. Research
4. Plan of attack
5. First draft
6. Revise and edit
7. References
Keywords in academic writing:
• Planning;
• Critical thinking;
• Referencing;
• Well-supported points (Structure)
• Evidence-based arguments;
• Logical development (Language)
• Grammar (Editing)
Structure and Language
Paragraphs
Paragraphs give your writing structure. Each paragraph should
cover one idea or one aspect of an idea. A paragraph consists
of a topic sentence, a number of support sentences, and an
optional concluding sentence
The introduction of university education has also had a major impact on the
role nurses play within patient care. As nurses have been able to develop
their knowledge and skills away from the worries and stress of the work
environment, they have become more empowered and more confident in
the workplace (Stevens 1992). As a result, they are more likely to offer their
opinions as professionals and have a greater role in patient care. This is
clearly demonstrated by the work of Maison (2003) who found that
university trained nurses were more likely to consult with doctors in trauma
and paediatric wards than their hospital trained counterparts. This is a
change from the hospital base educated nurses who were well trained but
played a relatively insignificant role in planning patient care. In her review
analysing the traits of nurses trained in hospitals rather than universities
(n=120), Lehane (2001) found that deference to authority, particularly in
relation to the doctors, was stressed throughout their training when
compared with university trained nurses. University education has
therefore led to the advancement of the nursing profession, where
nurses now have a voice in patient care plans. However, it must be
noted that because university education does not reflect the true nature of
the working environment, students often have difficulty adjusting to other
aspects of ward work.
Too Specific
The slang expression ‘so long’ is likely a corrupted version of the
Arab word for goodbye – Salaam.
Too General
English has been influenced by many languages.
Just Right!
The Arabic origin of many English words is not always
immediately apparent.
The introduction of university education has also had a major impact on the
role nurses play within patient care. As nurses have been able to develop
their knowledge and skills away from the worries and stress of the work
environment, they have become more empowered and more confident in
the workplace (Stevens 1992). As a result, they are more likely to offer their
opinions as professionals and have a greater role in patient care. This is
clearly demonstrated by the work of Maison (2003) who found that
university trained nurses were more likely to consult with doctors in trauma
and paediatric wards than their hospital trained counterparts. This is a
change from the hospital base educated nurses who were well trained but
played a relatively insignificant role in planning patient care. In her review
analysing the traits of nurses trained in hospitals rather than universities
(n=120), Lehane (2001) found that deference to authority, particularly in
relation to the doctors, was stressed throughout their training when
compared with university trained nurses. University education has therefore
led to the advancement of the nursing profession, where nurses now have a
voice in patient care plans. However, it must be noted that because
university education does not reflect the true nature of the working
environment, students often have difficulty adjusting to other aspects of
ward work.
Adapted from the University of South Australia (2005)
P This is the point you want to make in
support of your topic sentence (POINT).
Previously they were seen as the doctor’s helper where E Make sure you explain why your
C they were ‘disciplined, sober, humble, obedient and never
evidence supports your point.
complained about her [sic] work (Stevens 1992, p.202).
(EXPLAIN)
This changing role has had an impact on the image of
nurses. D
L/C Use this sentence to re-enforce
As nurses’ roles have changed, they have had a more your original point and link to your next
E point OR your next paragraph. (LINK/
influential role in diagnosis, treatment and prevention.
CONCLUDE)
Adapted from the University of South Australia (2005)
This changing role has had an impact on the image of
nurses. Previously they were seen as the doctor’s helper P This is the point you want to make in
where they were ‘disciplined, sober, humble, obedient and support of your topic sentence (POINT).
never complained about her [sic] work (Stevens 1992,
p.202). Now they are considered to have a more influential
role in diagnosis, treatment and prevention as Duffy et al. E Provide some evidence to support
(1989) discovered in her meta-analysis on the subject. your point (EVIDENCE).
University education has caused a shift in the public’s
perception of nurses where the job is now considered
‘worthy of a college degree’ (Duffy et al., 1989, p. 17). As E Make sure you explain why your
nurses’ roles have changed, they have had a more evidence supports your point.
influential role in diagnosis, treatment and prevention. (EXPLAIN)
University education has consequently changed the roles
of nurses and their images. This means that nurses are
considered professionals which has had a significant L/C Use this sentence to re-enforce
impact on wages and labour relations. your original point and link to your next
point OR your next paragraph. (LINK/
CONCLUDE)
Adapted from the University of South Australia (2005)
Sentences
A sequence of words that begin with a capital letter and ends in
a full stop. The sentence must make sense as a single unit.
Sentence Writing Tips
1. Create an objective, confident voice
In this essay, I will examine how gender and ethnicity are factors that can affect
buying behaviour among adolescents.
A careful examination of how gender and ethnicity are key factors that can
affect buying behaviour among adolescents.
Avoid contractions
Avoid: 'don't', 'can't', 'it's', 'should've',
The word 'crusade' has connotations of a battle and is more aggressive in tone than
the word 'campaign'. 'Campaign' implies a more considered approach
http://www.phrasebank.manchester.ac.uk/
Editing
Why??
• Presents a well-written and clearly
finished piece
• Ensures your piece reads well
• Enables you to change, rearrange or
discard material to clarify points &
achieve a well-crafted final product
• Illustrates your interest in presenting a
refined assignment
• Less likely to annoy lecturers
• Allows you to improve your writing in
future
What should I look for?
Voice • Who is the target audience?
• Is the voice appropriate to the audience and purpose?
• Is the tone too formal/informal? No slang!
Students like having the craic with their friends in school and
it has been shown that recreational time can help ease
stress.’
Revising Solution
COHESION:
Moving from
students to
Part-time jobs can be perfect for a student if they employers
do not interfere with school. All employers must
follow the state and federal regulations for
employing minors (Walsh 2009). An employer
should also offer flexibility with scheduling to COHESION:
accommodate major projects or extra-curricular connection to
activities for school. Some employers even offer next paragraph
incentive programs designed to encourage
students to keep up their grades (Grady 2012).
However, studies suggest working increases stress VOICE: slang
in students (Li et al., 2015). This occurs because
students enjoy interacting with their friends after CITING:
school and it has been shown that this recreational reference for the
time can help ease stress (Byrne et al 2008). data used to
back up the point
Editing Techniques
Editing focuses on the
mechanical issues within the
text: sentence length,
spelling, punctuation, and
grammatical mistakes
Tips
• Take a break: Put your essay aside for a day or two before
editing
• Read Out Loud: Reading in your head allows your brain to
auto-correct some errors.
• Use a Straightedge: Use a ruler or book & read the paper line
by line. This forces you to see each line and each sentence
on its own.
• Tech: Spell check and Grammarly.
• Friend: Ask somebody to read your piece of writing.
• Short periods: If possible, do your editing and proofreading in
several short blocks of time to help concentration.
• Shorter sentences: Avoid long, convoluted sentences. Break it
up for the reader!
Sentence Length Exercise
However it is clear in all three studies that the authors
had different findings in terms of the employment
factors which impacted on the survey respondents and
there was also contrasting evidence when respondents
explained their motivation for moving to part-time work
and many people still felt under financial pressure even
though they had a partner who also worked.
Editing Example
Revise Edit
…and it
requires
time!