Rewriting with Different

Point of View
By Fu Jinyu
 Instructions
 Rewrite Helen’s story with different
points of view.
 Retell Helen’s learning experience from the
point of view of Miss Sullivan.
 Retell Helen’s learning experience from the
point of view of her parents.
 Retell Helen’s learning experience from the
point of view of a stranger.
 Self Evaluation
 Evaluator shall ask the following questions
when evaluating his or her own work.
 Are there any grammatical errors or misspellings
in my writing? If so, please correct them.
 Is the title clear, concise and precise in my
writing?
 Are there any problems with paragraphing in my
writing?
 Can the plot be improved? And how? Make
comments in the box below.
 Peer Evaluation
 Evaluator shall ask the following questions when
evaluating the other’s work.
 Are there any grammatical errors or misspellings in my
writing? If so, please correct them.
 Is the title clear, concise and precise in my writing?
 Are there any problems with paragraphing in my
writing?
 Can the plot be improved? And how? Make comments
in the box below.
 What merits are there in his/her writing? Make
comments in the box below.
some common problems
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 Title
 Helen Keller 
 The Little Girl 
 Rewrite Helen’s Story from the Point of View of
Helen’s Parents 
 Knowledge is Happiness 
 Helen Keller’s Experience 
 Teaching Life 
 My Childhood 
 Q: What problems do you think there are
in the above titles?
 A Good Title
 You need to find a good title for your own work.
 The title must be clear, concise, and precise.
 A good example:
 The Most Important Day in Helen’s Life
 A Light at the End of the Tunnel
 An Unforgettable Teaching Experience
 The Day with Helen
 Days with Helen
 The Girl on the Porch
 The New Beginning of Helen
 A Light and Two Lonely Planets
 Plot
 Do Not Copy! Add Something of Your Own!
 What I expect is a NEW STORY of your
own!!!
 Now, go back to Text A, read carefully and
consider
 what details should be omitted,
 what details should be different when you adopt
a different point of view as Helen’s teacher,
parents and a stranger,
 and if not, how to revise them.
 Evaluation
 Read the student’s work below,
 tell who the narrator is (the point of view)
and
 make comments on the plot.
 … Now that my little girl knows that
everything has a name. Helen realized
what she had done, and for the first time
she finally had real feelings because she
now knows she can feel it too. Just like
others, I can’t be more appreciate to Miss
Sullivan, she was a light in my daughter’s
world. She lighted up her whole world and
made her find what she has missed.
 The first day I met Helen Keller, because of her
disabilities, she was anxious and nervous. I
wanted to change her, I wanted to make her
feel love, I wanted to teach her new things. …
Using this way she learned many words, I was
so proud of her because of her brave and
strong.
 …
 Helen Keller was hard-working. She broke
through the limit. She did something no one
could imagine. I believe she would be better in
the future.
 A Wonderful Period of My Life
 After I graduated from my university, I became
a teacher. I received a letter from a coup, who
asked me to be teacher their child, whose name
was Helen Keller. Their little daughter was blind
and deaf. Although it’s quite a difficult job, I
wanted to have a try.
 This day I came to their house and I saw the girl
standing on the pouch. I felt sympathy about
her and I wanted to teach her.
 …
  Be with Helen
 My name is Anne Mansfield Sullivan. I had never thought
that I could be so important to someone. In the past 21
years, I was like an injured kitten begging for God’s
mercy. But everything changed sine I met my student—
Helen.
 That was a sunny day. When I got off the train, Helen’s
parents were already there waiting for me. They looked
at me, hugged me, sent their regards to me. I could feel
the hope mixed with anxiety in their eyes. I know, Helen
mattered. “I will try my best”, I said to myself.
 I got trachoma since I was young within an inch of
losing my sight twice. So I knew what difficulties was
Helen going through. I walked to her step by step.
 …
 That night I was too happy to fall asleep. Tossing and
turning, I kept reviewing the image that Helen grasped
the new words. Just like the lost lamb found the way
home. And I was glad to be the light.
 A Light and Two Lonely Planets
 I’m Anne Sullivan, a person grown up at asylum. Sadly,
at the age of three, I suffered from trachoma, a kind
of serious eye disease, and almost lost my eyesight. A
fter that, I became a lonely planet. I rejected to com
municate with anyone. I yelled at them and threw all the
things onto the floor. Thanks to Ms. Hobkin, my adoptiv
e mother, I was able to finish school at Perkins School, a
s an outstanding graduate, on 1886.
 On August, I received a letter from Mr. Ananos, the hea
d-teacher of my school. He asked me to help Keller’s for
their daughter, Helen Keller, was a blind and deaf child.
In fact, I didn’t like this job. However, I had nothing to d
o but help this poor girl, so I admitted.
 …
 The New Beginning of Helen
 I’m Anne Sullivan, Helen’s teacher. I still remem
ber the day when I first Helen. The little blind de
af girl stood by the door, nervous but excited, w
aiting for my coming. I approached her and kiss
ed her fair-skinned face. Then she smiled brightl
y. I fall in love with that immediately. What an in
nocent girl attacked by the awful disease, I thou
ght at that time.
 Then Helen held my hands and showed me arou
nd her room. It was a cozy and tidy room, with s
everal dolls put on the bed. I took one for Helen
…
 I am a mother. I love my daughter Helen. But my poor d
aughter couldn’t see or hear anything since she was bor
n.
 She always turned tense and angry in any one moment.
She shouted, cried, threw anything around her. I could n
ot do anything but only watch aside.
 The eventful day, for Helen, also for me, finally came. I
would never forget. I stood far away full of expectation i
n that afternoon. The teacher, Miss Sullivan, the woman
I thank forever, slowly spelled the words in Helen’s hand,
again and again. …
 When Helen ran to me and made the letters of “d-o-o-l”,
I was so excited that I couldn’t help crying. I hold her in
my arms and told her “I love you”, again and again.
 …
 I was grateful about the kind teacher. She gave Helen n
ew eyes, to see the colorful world by her heart.
 I’m Jack, a new postman of Tuscumbia, a small t
own in north Alabama.
 Nowadays, I met a strange thing. When I deliver
ed the mails to the Kellers, I found a little girl pl
aying with an old but clean doll beside a well. Th
e girl is very quiet, but her eyes seemed to be bli
nd. What a cute but pathetic girl! However, her
action changed my idea. When a young lady bro
ught a new beautiful doll to her, and whisper so
mething to her. Surprisingly, the girl was very an
gry and dashed it upon the floor. Oh! That’s bad.
 …
 Helen’s Learning Experience
 I was Elizabeth, a servant of Miss Keller’s home.
Ever since I entered this house, it has sponsored
various sounds from Helen, a poor disabled girl.
She lost her all senses but a senses of touch. So,
in that way, Helen had a bad temper and it
increasingly took place near the end of this year.
 Oh, my god, can you imagine there is someone
noising all day? It was really a hard time for all
of us before Miss Sullivan came to Helen.
 …
The followings are two letters
from Anne Sullivan to her
friend
 April 3, 1887
 The hour from twelve to one is devoted to the le
arning of new words. But you mustn’t think this i
s the only time I spell to Helen; for I spell in her
hand everything we do all day along, although s
he has no idea as yet what the spelling means.
 On March 31st I found that Helen knew eighteen
nouns and three verbs. Here is a list of the word
s. Those with a cross after them are words she a
sked for herself: doll, mug, pin, key, dog, hat, cu
p, box, water, milk, candy, eye (×), finger (×), h
ead (×), cake, baby, mother, sit, stand, walk. O
n April 1st she learned the nouns knife, fork, spo
on, saucer, tea, papa, bed, and the verb run.
 April 5, 1887
 I must write to you a line this morning
because something very important has
happened. Helen has take the second
great step in her education. She has
learned that everything has a name and
that the manual alphabet is the key to
everything she wants to know.