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Student:
Beth Wilkerson
Professor:
Dr. Jan Holmevik
Date:
June 22, 2009
PROPOSAL WRITING:
IT’S A LOT HARDER THAN IT LOOKS!
Coming into this class, I didn’t expect writing a proposal to be easy, but I certainly didn’t expect it to be
as involved as it was either. Fortunately, I had Johnson-Sheehan (affectionately referred to as “JS” in the
remainder of this paper), along with my classmates and professor, to guide me along the way. Without
them, I fear my proposal would not be near the caliber it is today. Since JS was the main contributor to
the organization of my thesis proposal, it seems appropriate to describe its development in terms of the
guidelines outlined in the chapters of his book, aptly named Writing Proposals (2008).
At this point, I also began to establish who my readers were, what their needs would be, and how they
would expect my proposal to be completed. Obviously my primary readers would be my committee
members, but I had to evaluate their level of prior knowledge of CMC and foreign languages, how
modern or traditional they might be, and the context in which they would be reading my proposal.
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Knowing my topic would involve research in language pedagogy and computer technology, I figured my
primary readers would be up-to-date with advances in technology and progressive enough to accept a
proposal that utilized color and a non-traditional design and layout. But knowing that some of my
secondary readers—other faculty members and students—as well as tertiary readers—professional
publications, perhaps—might not be as progressive, I knew I would have to achieve a balancing act
between modern and traditional in both my proposal’s structure and design.
Planning Strategically
As we approached chapter 3 of JS’s book, I began to set specific objectives for my proposal, analyzing the
rhetorical situation. Once again, I had to ask myself questions like “What is my proposal about? What is
it not about? Who will read it? Where will it be read, and how will that context shape its reading?” I also
had to outline my specific objectives and then rank them to determine which was the most important; in
other words, I had to determine what my “TRO” or Top Rank Objective was and what my secondary
objectives were. As shown in Figure 1 below, my first TROs were somewhat broad and underdeveloped:
Figure 1:
Original TROs Posted to Blogger
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Throughout the entire proposal writing process, my TRO seemed to change constantly as I strove to find
a balance between an objective narrow enough to allow me to write a thesis in one academic year yet
broad enough to give my thesis application beyond an 100-page paper doomed to become irrelevant
before it was ever completed. When all was said and done, my TRO developed into the desire to
demonstrate how three emerging virtual environments could be used effectively to learn a foreign
language. More specifically, my TRO became to demonstrate how virtual environments with varying levels of
pedagogical structures can contribute to effective second language acquisition.
Before writing the current situation section, I conducted research using a variety of electronic and print
sources, some of which were based on empirical methods such as interviews and participatory
observations of tandem learning in virtual environments. Including a wide range of sources helped me to
ensure that I was providing an adequate overview of my topic. After reading through a sufficient amount
of material, I determined that my current situation section would benefit most from a narrative format
that would trace the history of foreign language learning in CMC.
While writing the current situation section, I continuously referred back to JS’s three guidelines in
chapter 4: Problems are the effects of causes, ignored problems tend to grow worse, and blame change, not people (p. 56).
In particular, I took the last suggestion to heart along with Dr. Haynes’s advice to the class to be
generous when discussing the work of previous researchers. In a thesis proposal, she said there is no need
to discredit the work of others; simply demonstrating how our work will expand on their work is
sufficient. I thought of this often as I revised my current situation section. So often we assume we need to
put others’ research down to make a place for our own when, in actuality, without their work, we
wouldn’t have a framework for our own in the first place. After all, how could I build on knowledge of
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tandem learning in virtual environments if I couldn’t read the work of others who came before me? When
revising this section, I looked for instances when I had discredited previous research and rewrote it to
better reflect an appreciation of their work while also demonstrating how I aimed to build on that work.
Figure 2:
One of the First of Many Methodology Mindmaps
Following the development of a proposed solution, I began to address the “why” questions of my plan. I
had to truly consider why my solution—case studies—would better build on the opportunity than, say, a
theoretical analysis. I determined that direct interaction with the three environments was the most
appropriate way to truly understand the ways the platforms contribute to second language acquisition.
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Completing one-on-one interviews and analyzing chat and email logs from users would give my study a
more personal touch and extend it beyond the theoretical into the practical. In addition, using a
combination of empirical and descriptive methods would give my study more validity while also allowing
me to include a thick description of the environments and my interactions with other users. Since
learning a new language is all about communication with others, I wanted to use a method that would
allow me to communicate with people in the environment I would study.
After several mindmaps, I finally had a solid plan in mind and began to determine the feasibility of the
solution. Using JS’s suggestion to move backward from the project due date, I determined the scope of
my case studies. I knew that I would have roughly seven or eight months to complete the studies and
write an entire thesis, so I decided to devote an entire month for each virtual environment, as well as a
month to write the introduction, methodology, and analysis/conclusion sections of my thesis.
Describing Qualifications
Because thesis proposals don’t ordinarily include a full-blown qualifications section, I knew I wouldn’t
need to devote as much time to this portion of my proposal as I did to the current situation section. By
including a variety of sources in my literature review and showing where my proposed research would fit
in, I had helped to somewhat establish my credibility, or ethos, already. However, I also knew that
explaining explicitly, at least to a certain extent, why I was qualified to research this specific topic would
further enhance my credibility. Therefore, I included one paragraph in the introduction of my proposal
explaining my personal experiences with tandem learning. I opted to exclude formal information about
previous research related to second language acquisition and CMC as I felt doing so would cause
information overload—part of the “want to tell” versus “want to know” dilemma JS discusses throughout
his book. I also felt that my personal experiences, rather than my academic ones, with tandem learning
would tie in well with JS’s suggestion to focus on what makes me uniquely qualified to pursue my topic.
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emphasizing the tangible and value benefits of my proposed research—everything from a Clemson
diploma and a bound thesis to further knowledge on tandem learning and implications for foreign
language instructors, future researchers, and students.
In addition to knowing I wanted to include circular elements in my design, I knew I wanted to include
ample white space to provide a break for readers’ eyes and to help them identify various levels of
information in the proposal. I decided to use different heading levels, in addition to bulleted points, to
highlight different steps in my chapter outline to draw the readers’ eyes to the most important
information on the page in case they chose to skim the information. My different level heading styles,
shown on the next page, indicate a progression in material throughout my paper.
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FIRST-LEVEL HEADING (Font: Corbel; Size: 14; Boldface; Color: RGB 89, 89, 89)
Second-Level Heading (Font: Corbel; Size: 12: Boldface; Color: RGB 127, 127, 127)
Third-Level Heading (Font: Corbel; Size: 11; Italics; Color: 128, 128, 128)
In particular, I made the most use of different headings throughout my literature review and
methodology sections, as these parts seemed to include a wealth of information that could be subdivided.
I chose to use a sans serif font, Corbel, for the headings to make it stand out from the serif font, California
FB, that I used throughout the body of my paper. I chose these two fonts based on JS’s suggestion to use
serif fonts throughout the body of the proposal for North American readers and Dr. Holmevik’s
suggestion to use serif fonts for print documents and sans serif for Web-based documents. I also took JS’s
suggestion to only use two typefaces to heart. I felt that a sans serif font would work well for the
headings since it would provide a subtle difference between the serif font used for the body while still
being easily readable in a print format since it would appear only for short phrases. In addition to using
different font sizes for the different level headings, I also used bold and italics to demonstrate a hierarchy
of information throughout the document.
Throughout the entire design process, I tried to maintain consistency. For example, I included a semi-
circular object filled with a lime green gradient on the top and bottom of each of my pages. In the bottom
right corner of each page, I also placed a circular object in which the page number appears. These
elements provide a predictable pattern from page to page that helps establish my ethos throughout the
paper. I chose the lime green color for the proposal border to create an other-worldly, progressive tone to
my proposal and the circular image for the page numbers to, once again, emphasize the circular, or
reciprocal, nature of tandem learning. Based on a discussion of the sample Overture Design proposal held
the last week of class, I also decided to make the green object at the bottom of the page more heavily
weighted than the green object at the top to subtlety imply that my paper is “solid.”
Using Graphics
After creating the basic design for my proposal, I began to consider what graphics would enhance the
written content. Rather than using the original table I created in my rough draft, shown on the next page
in Figure 3, I decided to incorporate a Gantt chart, shown in Figure 4, showing the beginning and ending
date for each portion of my proposal timeline. Doing so helped simplify the information for the reader by
demonstrating how each stage of the thesis process will overlap. It also contributed further to my
credibility by demonstrating the feasibility of my proposed plan. However, I did not let the Gantt chart
stand alone. I still highlighted its main points within the text portion of my proposal to ensure that the
reader understood the information I was trying to convey. When incorporating the Gantt chart in my
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proposal, I was also careful to present the information ethically by titling it appropriately and clearly
labeling the axes.
Figure 3:
Portion of the Original Chart Included in the Rough Draft of My Proposal
Figure 4:
Simplified Gantt Chart
6/15 6/30 7/15 7/30 8/14 8/29 9/13 9/28 10/13 10/28 11/12 11/27 12/12 12/27 1/11 1/26 2/10 2/25 3/12 3/27 4/11 4/26
Proposal to Chair
Proposal to Committee
IRB Approval
Chapter 2
Deliverables
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 1
Chapter 6
Draft to Chair
Full Thesis to…
Revisions to Committee
Thesis Defense
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In order to make my proposal more visually effective, I also used captions in the shape of circles
to, once again, create consistency and also to highlight key points in my paper. Specifically, I
used circles, shown in Figures 5 and 6 below, to clarify a word choice in my TRO and to provide
an explanation of abbreviations that would be found throughout my proposal.
Figure 5: Figure 6:
Circle Used to Explain Word Choice Circle Used to Explain Common Abbreviations
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Figure 7: Figure 8:
Title Page Portion of Cover Letter
Altogether, developing an effective proposal was more difficult than I anticipated, and I’m sure
further editing awaits me. But I now have a skill set, thanks to Proposal Writing and JS, that
will guide me through the process not only with my thesis proposal but with any I might write
in the future.
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