To:Prof.Musselman From:ChanTszChingJulia CC:ParisAshley Date:1/22/2014 RE:Unit1Draft1PeerReview PeerReview Summary:Theauthordescribesherworkasagraphicdesignerstraighttothepoint.Inthefirstthree paragraphs,shetalksaboutherworkandtheinfluentialexperiencesinNortheasternUniversity includingactivitiesandopportunitiesthattheschoolhasbeenoffering.Hence,someoftheusefuladvices andcommentsthatthoseprofessorshavegiventoher.Then,theauthormovesontotalkabouther idols.Alotofexamplesareshowninthisparagraph.Followedbythelastparagraph,theauthorsshared hercoopexperience,bringingthestrengthandspecialtyofNortheasternUniversity.Theauthorends bytalkingaboutherprinciples,futureplanningsandgoals. Major:Thewholeessayisveryconciseandstraighttothepoint.Theauthorfocusesonherworkand makesitaverywellorganizedpiece.Shehastalkedabouteveryaspectofherworkinthefield.

Also, theauthorhasadetaileddescriptionofthethingsandpeoplethathaveinfluencedher,aswellas bringingoutthegoodnessoftheuniversity. Minors:Thepieceisabitoverlystraighttothepoint,somedecorationsonwordsandparaphrasing willaddcolorstotheworkandmakeitmoreappealingtoreaders. E.g.FromthecoopexperienceIhavelearnednotonlyhowtoimprovemy designskillsbutalsohowtobeonepartofabiggerwholeandhowtosatisfythe needsagooddesignaswellastheneedsofaclient.Thissentenceisabitclumsy,youcantryto separatethemintotwosentencesbysayingFromthecoopexperience,Ihavelearnednotonlyhow toimprovemydesignskills,butalsohowtobeapartofthebiggerwhole.Moreover,ithasguidedme inunderstandingmoreabouttherequirementsforsatisfyingtheneedsofagooddesign,aswellasthe needsofaclient. P.S.Becarefulofhavingrunonsentences,whichmakethereadermoredifficulttoreadand understand.Furthermore,youhavebeenmissingafewofthepunctuations,theyareimportantin sentences.