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Jocelyne Gonzales
Mr. Griffin
Tech Prep 12
6 December 2011
"My Papa's Waltz"
by Theodore Roethke
The whiskey on your breath

Commented [a1]: This word makes me think about a strong

liquor only tough guys drink this pure.

Could make a small boy dizzy;

Commented [a2]: This word makes me think about head

turning.

But I hung on like death:

Commented [JG3]: This word makes me think of grabbing on

tight as you could.

Such waltzing was not easy.

Commented [JG4]: This word makes me think of a special

dance you would dance with.

We romped until the pans

Commented [JG5]: This word makes me think about being

clumsy.

Slid from the kitchen shelf;

Commented [JG6]: This word makes me think of falling off or

slowly going away.

My mother's countenance

Commented [JG7]: This word makes me think of happiness.

Could not unfrown itself.

Commented [JG8]: This word makes me think of not being able

to smile.

The hand that held my wrist

Commented [JG9]: This word makes me think of holding on

tight.

Was battered on one knuckle;

Commented [JG10]: This word makes think of beating

something.

At every step you missed

Commented [JG11]: This word makes me think about

forgetting.

My right ear scraped a buckle.

Commented [JG12]: This word makes me think about a belt.

You beat time on my head

Commented [JG13]: This makes me think about getting

distracted not focused.

With a palm caked hard by dirt,

Commented [JG14]: This word makes me think of something

sweet.

Then waltzed me off to bed

Commented [JG15]: This word makes me think of relaxation.

Still clinging to your shirt.

Commented [JG16]: This word makes me think about still

holding on.

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