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Sam Pull
Mr. Griffin
Tech Prep 12
6 December 2011
"My Papa's Waltz"
by Theodore Roethke
The whiskey on your breath

Commented [a1]: This word makes me think about

Commented [RL2R1]: That His Father Was A Drunk

Could make a small boy dizzy;

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But I hung on like death:

Commented [RL4R3]: That His Breath Must Of Smelled Really

Bad

Such waltzing was not easy.

Commented [RL5]: He Was Being Strong About His Dads Poor

Choices
Commented [RL6]: He Was Dancing.

We romped until the pans

Commented [RL7]: They Danced For A While.

Slid from the kitchen shelf;

Commented [RL8]: They Were Dancing So Hard That The

Impact Of The Feet Was Shaking The Pans

My mother's countenance

Commented [RL9]: He Mother Was upset

Commented [RL10]: His Mother Was upset.

Could not unfrown itself.

Commented [RL11]: She Was Upset That She Couldnt Say

Something

The hand that held my wrist

Commented [RL12]: Gripped his wrist

Was battered on one knuckle;

Commented [RL13]: Wrapped

At every step you missed

Commented [RL14]: When He Messed Up On A Dance

My right ear scraped a buckle.

Commented [RL15]: Damaged

You beat time on my head

Commented [RL16]: Pressured

With a palm caked hard by dirt,

Commented [RL17]: His Dads Hands

Then waltzed me off to bed

Commented [RL18]: He tired him out

Still clinging to your shirt.

Commented [RL19]: Holding on to his shirt

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