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Sam Pull
Mr. Griffin
Tech Prep 12
6 December 2011
"My Papa's Waltz"
by Theodore Roethke
The whiskey on your breath

Commented [NM1]: This word makes me think about the old

west and an old man drinking and smoking a cigar. Basically looking
like a mobster

Could make a small boy dizzy;

Commented [NM2]: This word makes me think about

somebody having a headache, not thinking straight.

But I hung on like death:

Such waltzing was not easy.

Commented [NM3]: This word makes me think of sleep,

funerals, and somebody in the hospital, tears. Not being on earth
any longer
Commented [NM4]: This word makes me think about a ball
where people are dancing slow with classical music playing in the
background looking marvelous.

We romped until the pans

Commented [NM5]: This word makes me think about people

acting crazy just jumping around. Not having a care in the world.

Slid from the kitchen shelf;

Commented [NM6]: This word makes me think of food and my

own kitchen

My mother's countenance

Commented [NM7]: This word makes me think about different

facial expressions that people can make whether it is ugly and/or
cute.

Could not unfrown itself.

Commented [NM8]: This word makes me think about

somebody talking down to themselves saying what they cant do
but also at the same time crying for help.

The hand that held my wrist

Commented [NM9]: This word makes me think about my own

hand, five fingers just chilling

Was battered on one knuckle;

Commented [NM10]: This word makes me think about

somebody baling up there fist, punching someone or getting ready
to punch someone.

At every step you missed

Commented [NM11]: This word makes me think of steps, just

regular steps, somebody walking up stairs or walking downstairs

My right ear scraped a buckle.

Commented [NM12]: This word makes me think about

somebody with a belt, strapped up with a gun

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You beat time on my head

Commented [NM13]: This word makes me think about beats,

the kind of beats that you hear when you listen to music and the
bass just hitting your system

With a palm caked hard by dirt,

Commented [NM14]: This word makes me think about a rock

Then waltzed me off to bed

Commented [NM15]: This word makes me think about my bed

and sleep like relaxing after a long day and just lying on a cloud.
Letting go of everything.

Still clinging to your shirt.

Commented [NM16]: This word makes me think about a

girlfriend harassing her boyfriend just bothering him non stop.