Nathaniel S.

Rivers
UWRT 1101 070
FPE
11/31/14

The Final Portfolio Essay

The Final Writers Portrait
This monster (hehe) was a rather odd beast. By that I mean it would have
most likely been completely done had I actually written the whole thing in draft 1
and of course shown it to my teacher. For the paper had always been a short story
with mystery/horror undertones, but due procrastination the paper will probably
never be completed as I keep making up more ideas to do. There was no grand
written brainstorming I did before this. I simply came up with ideas as I typed. For
instance the smaller font paragraphs came to me while typing the first normal
paragraph. So many ideas and concepts flew through my mind and were either
accepted, edited out, or edited once I actually reached the point of actually typing
it. Still due to how different this was, I was scared it wouldnt actually be considered
appropriate for the assignment. No matter, it was deemed acceptable, and I
celebrated not having to start back at square one. Now this paper has some
influences HP Lovecrafts world is most prominent within the paper and is even
hinted at multiple times
The car trembles on **g-S*th**h. The setting sun never remembered, now replaced with a dark
tapestry with *ut*r *o*s filling it. The dead cell phone waits in the back now of little use.
Raising

the gun towards you he fires and misses instead hitting a book on

Nightgaunts

As he falls over he fires again missing instead hitting the Necronomicon.

Hell even me I attempted to hint at either being possessed or actually
Nyarlathotep the Crawling Chaos. The main hint being the three eyed doors; which
the three eyes are one of the symbols for him. I attempted to use senses within the
first three paragraphs similar to the Literacy Narrative. I also used Ethans advice
for the Literacy Narrative by connecting the ending with the poem:
You hold the candle, the caged bird, to your body so tight. As if protecting it from the ever-crawling
shadow.
And just when the candle burns brighter; the bird released, and you are filled with hope
The ever-crawling shadow slices in, and consumes it
You are now lost within the ever-lasting shadow.

The ending effectively reenacts the poem. Well I wont to have something to talk
about in the 2 processes, so let us stop here at the end.
The Second Draft of the Writers Portrait
As mentioned before the first draft was incomplete. Now thats an
understatement it didnt even make it halfway through the paper. This on the other
hand was a near completed work with some issues to be discussed next. For the
most part this finally covered the required articles for the paper. Just like the first
draft it was typed in the Atkins Library without any form of ritual; which was also
covered by this paper ( :P ). It should be noted that the second draft did have a
ending, and in could have been left alone a part from some spelling and grammar
errors to be expected. It was during this that I came up with using that poem. I
originally wanted to uses a chant associated with the Lovecraftian god

Yog-Sothoth; which is the creature hinted at existing within the last small font
paragraph though corrupted with * .

The Third Draft of the Writers Portrait

Unlike the previous two drafts, the third was typed at my house. Its main
purpose was to fill the plot holes created by draft 2. The main one being is it
actually Nathaniel Rivers that was being interviewed. I did this with two things, the
first being the removal of me saying it is Nathaniel Rivers (the purpose being that
me never once actually says its me and its only the interviewer who only just
refers to me by Mr. Rivers; which isnt even my full name thus creating more
reason) and the second being the addition of the boss calling the interviewer saying
Im with him. This along with some rewording was done in this draft, but true to the
curse of this paper I left out the additions I wanted for the maid due to time
constraints.
The Final Literacy Narrative
This paper was to show literacy in a field. I chose primarily gaming, but I
ended up always including one other; this one being Arabic. This was solely revised
from draft 2 which was focused more on the story aspect than showing overall
literacy. In this paper we were near forced to give sensory details which I did my
best to include. These can mainly be seen early on before the actual gaming, as
once that occurred well not much else matters but a sweaty controller might. It
should be noted that the event that occurs in the paper was the only one I could

remember. Most of my literacy in gaming was spread over a long period, but this
paper was more appealing to readers it seemed. Oddly enough the most important
thing I got from this paper was how to respond really respond to other peoples
work. Thus though it didnt really affect my paper. I do however have more
confidence in responding to other works.
The 1st Literacy Narrative
This other monster was so big my group didnt even have enough time to go
over even half of it. This paper showed by growth in both gaming and English.
Therefore this monster was a bit everywhere not only that but covering everything
in detail. The comments I got for this paper were funny, as unlike in most writing
people want more elaboration they wanted less. The worst part was there was still
so much I left out. This paper was the only printed paper that had a true sense of
being an essay in the definitions that I understand.
The 2nd Literacy Narrative
To the celebrations of my group with paper was much shorter in comparison.
Unlike before I focused on gaming and Arabic instead. Finding this event was rather
easy, as its the only one that had created such an emotional response. It starts out
with me going to Jabriels house, my home away from home. Their father wasnt
that scary more just big and demanding when it came to saying As-salamu
alaykum. I actually dont know if I got it right. I just didnt want to have the reader
be stuck at the door attempting to pronounce a foreign language to a native
speaker. The house isnt made up. The rooms mentioned did exist at one time. At
that time maybe not, but at a time, yes. The epic battle is how I remember it, and I
did actually make everyone leave the room; how I cant remember but it did happen

and I did succeed. The ending during this draft I didnt know for certain what I
wanted, thus the story speeds up suddenly to the end.
The Midterm

-_UGH~~~, I did stuff. If my memory is correct then this is the paper where
rhetorical response would have helped. A shame I was sick the week it was taught.
This paper is probably the only other thing forced besides the blogs (ugh~~). First
paragraph was going over first post. This was a rather honest paragraph thats all
I can really describe it in a positive sense.
Yet the questions about fire and tornado are slightly more important
I did however find a fire escape map, but tornadoes, nope. Though not DIRE they
are questions that arent always gone over, and are there for safety. The second
paragraph was a list plain and simple; where I questioned almost every other
definition. Third paragraph went over revisions in Lit Nar. Fourth and last important
is the sample e-portfolios. Ehh.
Notebook 1
The Reader Response Letter 2 was the most helpful one that I did write. Just
like any other RRL I gave my opinion and said what I thought it was trying to say.
This along with activities done within class to improve responding to fellow students
helped the quality of help I gave. Less editing more idea suggestion. It might go
against everything I learned before, but I understand it and prefer it (as I have
difficulty correcting stuff in my own works).

Notebook 2
Oh wonderful warmups, I do now know what the hell a semi-colon is used for.
Quite frankly I didn't understand a single part of it to such a point I didn't know
where to incorrectly place it (replacing what should be a comma fanboy).
Feedback 1
The feedback I got for Literacy Narrative draft 2 I used to link the games boss
to the Arabic boss, and by doing so gave me an idea for the title A Boss Battle.
Before that it was title-less. I also came up with the cliff hanger I wonder if he will
try and teach me a new phase to co-inside with the road block right after the
game's boss.
Feedback 2
Hehe, the main feedback I got was it was bad. Which I can agree. It was also
because of the feedback that I believed it would be better to completely scrape
draft 1 in exchange for draft 2.

Wild Card 2 (Member Awareness?)

( the name doesn't even connect to the requirements)
The connection maybe debatable, but I did partially enjoy it. And I tried to
make it similar to how I wrote the Literacy Narrative draft 2.
Wild Card 1 (presentation)
Due to the sheer amount of possible info that was lost during mental edits
(before even typed) this part holds a lot of ideas both obvious and obscure. To begin

the small text paragraphs are anchors to the real world for the most part. The
changes in between paragraphs started as time moving faster outside. Then I came
up with possibly removing the house from existence at the end, thus the part where
everything shifts into corrupted typing. The cell phone was how I would transport
the house away by special chant. As mentioned before I was going to use a special
chant, but I had this great poem still in my head. Newly added is Else where the
sound this was added to expand the existence of the maid and give reason to her
entering the sate she is in.
Should I have more time elaborate on maid. How she was originally and
enemy. Was forgotten then remembered as not having a place. Became a decayed
corpse. Lastly being on deaths door.
Should even more time remain reveal possibilities of the truth behind the
me. Insane, possessed, likeness, and don't forget to wear a blazer.
Blogs
I forced had difficulty actually even coming up with 200 words. As a man of
few words these things were so painful.

The E-Portfolio
Just like me it's simple. Using only neutral colors, and no pictures. I did
however attempt to do some interesting things. Places where you couldn't see
everything I had a list. For the Process I made them smaller and next to each other;
while the finals were large and by themselves. There is some amusing text at the
beginning, but other than that it's rather text free.

Conclusion?
A class focused on writing where I actually learned stuff instead of just given
readings or writing assignments without new knowledge to practice. Again semicolons, I have only just learned their use. A use unknown to me until this class.