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Dalisia Barraza

May 3rd, 2015


Reflective Essay
Taylor Diaz
English 120
Reflective Essay: MWA 1 Rhetorical Analysis
Although Id been certain that Id struggle writing this rhetorical analysis, I did not
expect such successful outcome. With few and minor errors I was able to write a strong
rhetorical analysis. Along with a thoughtful discussion on ethos, pathos, and logos I was able to
dig into the advertisement and evaluate my argument. Looking back, with comments from both
my instructor and peers, I now understand where I could have made a few changes that could
have strengthened my initial analysis even more so. Here is where I could have made changes:

My title was incorrectly formatted: By Means of Persuasion does not need to be bolded.
Revision of a sentence where I use generic language. My use of the word "common" in
"Pima Medical Institute is recognized as one of the most common medical programs in
New Mexico could be revised to Pima Medical Institute is recognized as a medical

career college that prepares students for careers in the medical field.
Revision of a sentence that sounds dull. To make my sentence more appealing, I change
the sentence to Students in the medical field are constantly plagued with thoughts of
money and time instead of A couple main ideas centered on the medical field by

students are both time and money.


Revision of a sentence where I want to be a bit more specific. The original sentence is
As future medical students, we dont want to spend our time stuck in school but out in
the workforce doing what were passionate about to As future medical students, we

dont want to spend our time stuck in school but out in the workforce gaining hand on

experience.
Revision of the sentence where the use of the word moderate is a bit confusing. In its
original context: From learning basic medical procedures to fairly moderate procedures,
students gain an understanding of whats to come in their field work to changing the
sentence to: From learning basic medical procedures to much more complex procedures,

students gain an understanding of whats to come in their field work.


Grammatical error. I use the word student when I should use the word students
instead. The sentence then becomes In addition, Pima Medical Institute offers career

planning services to their students.


Revision of the sentence where I use the word their. The sentence sounds awkward so
instead I insert the word its making the sentence: An argument is strong by its means
of persuasion and this advertisement uses all possible devices to convince students to join
the program.

Despite the fact I received a really good grade on my rhetorical analysis there were areas that
could have been improved. With few and minor errors I was able to easily correct them. Looking
back now, its obvious that I could have made these changes prior to initially turning in my
paper. Most of my errors could have been simply fixed had I reread my paper. Overall, I was
very proud of how I did on my paper and the improvements that I made to it.