When I was I child.

My parent asked me to join the Primary school, I was

seven years at that time. For the first time I entered the school, I saw it
was very crowded but I can enjoyed it. The school was in down town it was a
nice school with a green field. We could play there very school time. In my
Primary school we wore short pants and with white shirt. For my school daily
activity we studied about math, Religion, Language and sport. I liked study
Math because My Match teacher was very kind and young at that time she
also very patien when she taught her student. That's why I liked her very
much. In sport I like playing Badminton with the other friend. I enjoyed it
very much. I used to play Badminton. But now I like playing tennis.

Strengths

Weaknesses
Basic grammar and punctuation errors eg. I can enjoy ed
Errors do not obscure meaning
it, I liked stud y , When I was I child .
Correct use of some tenses eg. I used to play badminton Errors in the way words are put together eg. For the first
but now I like playing tennis.
time I entered the school
Use of simple sentences only eg. It was a nice school with
Some conjunctions used eg. and, but, because
a green field.
Some simple cohesive devices used to develop cohesion
eg. I liked study Math because my match teacher was
Limited vocabulary range eg. My parent asked me to join
very kind and young at that time. She also very patien
the Primary school
when she taught her student.
Some signal words used eg. at that time, now
No paragraphing so main ideas are not clearly developed
Information is easy to understand

Narrow range of conjunctions used

Narrow range of signal words used
A lack of overall planning because there is no paragraphing
Limited language forms because simple sentences are
mostly used
The content is not developed eg. I saw it was very
crowded but I can enjoyed it.

Overall assessment:
Adequate (Pre-Intermediate ADFELPS level 5)