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Topic: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important
consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people choose their jobs based on the size of the salary offered.

Personally, I disagree with the idea that money is the key consideration when

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deciding on a career because I believe that other factors are equally important.
On the one hand, I agree that money is necessary in order for people to

meet their basic needs. For example, we all need money to pay for housing,
food, bills, health care, and education. Most people consider it a priority to at

least earn a salary that allows them to cover these needs and have a reasonable
quality of life. If people chose their jobs based on enjoyment or other non-

financial factors, they might find it difficult to support themselves. Artists and

musicians, for instance, are known for choosing a career path that they love, but
that does not always provide them with enough money to live comfortably and
raise a family.

Nevertheless, I believe that other considerations are just as important as

what we earn in our jobs. Firstly, personal relationships and the atmosphere in
a workplace are extremely important when choosing a job. Having a good
manager or friendly colleagues, for example, can make a huge difference to
workers levels of happiness and general quality of life. Secondly, many

peoples feelings of job satisfaction come from their professional achievements,

the skills they learn, and the position they reach, rather than the money they
earn. Finally, some people choose a career because they want to help others
and contribute something positive to society.
In conclusion, while salaries certainly affect peoples choice of profession, I do
not believe that money outweighs all other motivators.
(275 words, band 9)

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Bi phn tch
1/ Cu trc:

bi essay ny, thy Simon chn cch phn tch c hai mt c nu ra

phn bi. Mt cch c th, phn thn bi, thn bi 1 c dng

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nu ln kin ca thy v vic nhiu ngi hin nay t mc thu nhp ngh l
tiu ch quan trng nht quyt nh xem h c nn lm ngh hay khng,
mt m thy khng ng tnh. phn thn bi 2 thy li quay ngc li

chnh ca mnh ng thi l chnh ca c bi vn ( c cp n cu

thesis statement cu cui ca m bi). Vi vic s dng cu trc o ngc,

nevertheless, ng thi nu ln lun im tri ngc thn bi 1, v tnh lm

cc lun im c nu trong phn thn bi 2 n c cm gic nng hn, v

quan trng hn. y l mt cch vit rt hay trong trng hp bn khng mun
dnh c bi ch ni v mt kin duy nht, v bn mun lm ni bt ln chnh
ca bi.

2/ Ng php:

Bn cnh cc cu trc ng php cn bn nh passive voice, conditional

sentence hay complex sentence, cn c mt s im ng php cc bn nn lu
:

Khng dng cc dng rt gn nh dont, wont.

Khng dng all people, everybody, I, you m thay vo l most people,

etc.

Khuyn khch cc bn dng cc synonyms v antonyms vocabulary

c a dng hn.
o V d: Thay v ni bn khng thch/ng g (I do not like it, I do
not agree with it) th nn dng dislike, disagree, etc. ( phn ny
page c 1 bi post hng dn cc bn nn s dng cc t hay

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cm t formal no th hin s khng ng , cc bn xem li
nh).

S dng cc transitional words: however, nevertheless, on the one hand,

etc.

phi mun dng sao cng c v rt d sai).

o V d: non-financial, etc.

Dng prefix v suffix (cc bn nn nghin cu k v suffix v prefix khng

Dng phrase thay v clause.

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o V d: I disagree with the idea that money is the key consideration

when deciding on a career.
3/ Vocabulary:

The size of the salary offered: Mc lng c ngh

The key consideration: Vn ng quan tm nht

Consider it a priority: Xem iu g quan trng hn nhng iu cn li

Career path: Con ng s nghip

Certainly affect peoples choice: Chc chn nh hng n s la chn ca

nhiu ngi

Outweigh all other motivators: Nng hn/quan trng hn cc yu t cn li

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